A Stolen Kiss
triolet197 total reviews
Comment from allborn66
This is a very delightful poem. The form and rhyme enhances the piece. I'm not sure if I like the word poacher. It is an illegal hunter. I think burglar would be better - it's still two syllables and not necessarily violent like robber.
Barbara
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
  |
This is a very delightful poem. The form and rhyme enhances the piece. I'm not sure if I like the word poacher. It is an illegal hunter. I think burglar would be better - it's still two syllables and not necessarily violent like robber.
Barbara
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
-
Barbara, thank you so much :-) You think of a burglar as more legal or less violent than a poacher? Brooke
-
I think that it goes better with stealing kisses than a poacher. Most thieves are sneaky, not violent. Robbers and Robbery involve violence, thieves and burglars do not. I double check the definition before I suggested it.
Barbara
Comment from Petriesan
well, I have a story where a stolen kiss is a crime, but maybe I had best not tell it here. . .(yeah, I know, I am a coward and a charlatan for leading on)
I like the feel of this poem, as always. . .good work
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
|
well, I have a story where a stolen kiss is a crime, but maybe I had best not tell it here. . .(yeah, I know, I am a coward and a charlatan for leading on)
I like the feel of this poem, as always. . .good work
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
-
Petriesan, thank you so very much for the laugh and the review :-) Brooke
Comment from Marillion
A lovely verse, my friend. If music be the food of love, then play on, maestro. Great choice of repeating lines, as they fit the conceit perfectly. The gangster of love will appreciate such sweet sentiments.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
|
A lovely verse, my friend. If music be the food of love, then play on, maestro. Great choice of repeating lines, as they fit the conceit perfectly. The gangster of love will appreciate such sweet sentiments.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
-
Marillion, thank you so much :-) Brooke
-
My pleasure! :)
Comment from angelface2
Oh, this is such a cute picture. The poem is sweet, but I'm not so sure Sawyer is convinced that a stolen kiss is not a crime! Love it. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
|
Oh, this is such a cute picture. The poem is sweet, but I'm not so sure Sawyer is convinced that a stolen kiss is not a crime! Love it. Miss Sally
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
-
Miss Sally, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from c_lucas
Give Sawyer ten years and he will pay more attention to the young lady. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
|
Give Sawyer ten years and he will pay more attention to the young lady. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
-
The funny thing, Charlie, is when she's not around, he talks about her all the time. I've personally witnessed him pretend phone calling her dozens of times. LOL Thanks so much, my friend. Brooke :-)
-
You're little "Pistol" will soon be a "Son of a Gun," You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
Comment from Titanx9
This is the cutest picture. Sawyer is probably wondering what is Chloe up to, "I'll allow her to have her way if she doesn't get in my line of vision here to see...." I love it as well as that lovely poem that gets right to the heart of the situation.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
|
This is the cutest picture. Sawyer is probably wondering what is Chloe up to, "I'll allow her to have her way if she doesn't get in my line of vision here to see...." I love it as well as that lovely poem that gets right to the heart of the situation.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
-
Titan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
This is a delightful poem and perfect for upcoming Valentine's Day. I really like how you were able to fit it into the triolet format.
My favoritie line is one of your refrains: "if love is in the poacher's heart."
Good luck in the contest, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
|
This is a delightful poem and perfect for upcoming Valentine's Day. I really like how you were able to fit it into the triolet format.
My favoritie line is one of your refrains: "if love is in the poacher's heart."
Good luck in the contest, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
-
Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
This poem and picture reminded me of a song sung by Peter Paul & Mary (with Andy Williams) many years ago... "Kisses Sweeter Than Wine".
http://youtu.be/gVpoiChuyWI
I love the triolet form, perhaps time to write one of these too.
Your poems are cheering me up this afternoon...I had a cyst removed from my back this morning, and the freezing is coming out now...oh the pain! I need a kiss.
I like the repeating line,
"A stolen kiss is not a crime
if love is in the poacher's heart." ...Terrific idea to name the kiss stealer a "poacher". Looks like Sawyer has his first girlfriend.
Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest!
your fan,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
|
Hi Brooke
This poem and picture reminded me of a song sung by Peter Paul & Mary (with Andy Williams) many years ago... "Kisses Sweeter Than Wine".
http://youtu.be/gVpoiChuyWI
I love the triolet form, perhaps time to write one of these too.
Your poems are cheering me up this afternoon...I had a cyst removed from my back this morning, and the freezing is coming out now...oh the pain! I need a kiss.
I like the repeating line,
"A stolen kiss is not a crime
if love is in the poacher's heart." ...Terrific idea to name the kiss stealer a "poacher". Looks like Sawyer has his first girlfriend.
Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest!
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
-
Kimbob, thank you so much. I complained after your last review when they wouldn't let me nominate you, so this time I know they'll let me. LOL :-) I'm sorry to hear about your cyst and the pain. I'm sending you a friendly virtual kiss right through my computer screen :-) Chloe and Sawyer are quite the item. LOL Brooke
-
thank you, Brooke... just what I needed tonight!
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
A kiss stolen is no offence, though some these days might like to make it so. Well said in your little triolet, the innocence of childhood passes all to rapidly these days.
Patrick
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
|
Hi Brooke,
A kiss stolen is no offence, though some these days might like to make it so. Well said in your little triolet, the innocence of childhood passes all to rapidly these days.
Patrick
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2014
-
Thank you, Patrick :-) Brooke
Comment from JM daSilva
Kiss-thieves. I used to be one of them when I was younger. Funny that I practically never asked a girl on a date. lol. I kissed them somehow first. Well, but I'm Brazilian-American-British-French, so...lol.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
|
Kiss-thieves. I used to be one of them when I was younger. Funny that I practically never asked a girl on a date. lol. I kissed them somehow first. Well, but I'm Brazilian-American-British-French, so...lol.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
-
JM, it is always good to hear from you. Thank you so much. :-) Brooke
-
Welcome.
