If Green is Grass
a rhyming poem in 8/6/8/6147 total reviews
Comment from Dawny53
If I had a 6 I would certainly give it. This is one of my favorites from you. I really enjoyed the reversing of color to object, object to color. It gave the entire poem so much more life and interest. I wondered if you meant for this to be a poem for children, I can see how a child would interpret colors this way.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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If I had a 6 I would certainly give it. This is one of my favorites from you. I really enjoyed the reversing of color to object, object to color. It gave the entire poem so much more life and interest. I wondered if you meant for this to be a poem for children, I can see how a child would interpret colors this way.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Dawny - no, I did not intend this for children :-) Brooke
Comment from GeraldS
This is a charming piece. It holds the reader's interest until the end and provides much food for thought. It is well-written and very professionally presented. Each sentence leads into the next. The philosophical meaning is nicely threaded throughout the commentary.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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This is a charming piece. It holds the reader's interest until the end and provides much food for thought. It is well-written and very professionally presented. Each sentence leads into the next. The philosophical meaning is nicely threaded throughout the commentary.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Gerald, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
A poem of innocence about the wonders of the Universe that a child must reflect upon. Great use of imagery, words and rhymes and a lovely smooth read. Enjoyable read, as always. faye
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A poem of innocence about the wonders of the Universe that a child must reflect upon. Great use of imagery, words and rhymes and a lovely smooth read. Enjoyable read, as always. faye
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Cin
I wish I had a six star to give for this poem - excellent rhyme/rhythm - I particular like the repetition of If/I wonder - draws the reader into pondering our nature and our existence. Beautiful
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I wish I had a six star to give for this poem - excellent rhyme/rhythm - I particular like the repetition of If/I wonder - draws the reader into pondering our nature and our existence. Beautiful
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Cin, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from hari anand
Another beautiful poem with perfect rhymes flowing with the colors green and blue. Enjoyed reading this one too. Especially nature of waves.
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Another beautiful poem with perfect rhymes flowing with the colors green and blue. Enjoyed reading this one too. Especially nature of waves.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Hargunanand, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from fastdigits
A beautifully orchestrated poem
that danced down the screen in
whispered words of such thoughts
of all the little everyday occurrences
that make up the world around us.
Well done
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A beautifully orchestrated poem
that danced down the screen in
whispered words of such thoughts
of all the little everyday occurrences
that make up the world around us.
Well done
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Fastdigits, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from humpwhistle
Just in case nobody ever pointed this out, Brooke, that polar bear is showing all her junk. Nice junk, to be sure, but there it is. Cleavage, too.
A common destiny. I love this notion. It's the saddest thing when you think of young Sawyer. But it's the most reassuring, too. If we share a common a destiny, we are never parted.
That means you and me, too, Brooke. Heaven help you. Eternity!
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Just in case nobody ever pointed this out, Brooke, that polar bear is showing all her junk. Nice junk, to be sure, but there it is. Cleavage, too.
A common destiny. I love this notion. It's the saddest thing when you think of young Sawyer. But it's the most reassuring, too. If we share a common a destiny, we are never parted.
That means you and me, too, Brooke. Heaven help you. Eternity!
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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An eternity of your peskiness? Of your pointing out my "junk" in insufferably discourteous ways?? LOL But if you're impertinent in eternity, I'll just give you Sawyer to hold for a minute, and then you'll turn to mush :-) Thanks for the smiles, Lee, and for the lovely review :-) Brooke
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Hey, I'm as mushy as they come. And you have great junk. Eternally yours, L
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;-)
Comment from judiverse
I love the progression from one thought to another. Thoughts about green lead to thoughts about blue, then the waves and next the shore. Beautifully done. The last stanza has a solemn thought about how fleeting those colors are and to how brief life is. A wonderful thought about sharing that common destiny. Great description of the waves as nomads. The alliteration of sweep, sparkle, and sand works in well. Excellent rhyme, of course. judi
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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I love the progression from one thought to another. Thoughts about green lead to thoughts about blue, then the waves and next the shore. Beautifully done. The last stanza has a solemn thought about how fleeting those colors are and to how brief life is. A wonderful thought about sharing that common destiny. Great description of the waves as nomads. The alliteration of sweep, sparkle, and sand works in well. Excellent rhyme, of course. judi
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Judi :-) Brooke
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Eric1
This is a beautiful piece of philosophical writing and verse, I love the way the verses lead into one another, it has perfect rhyming and a very solid rhythm to it. Had I a six it would have been yours Brooke.
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This is a beautiful piece of philosophical writing and verse, I love the way the verses lead into one another, it has perfect rhyming and a very solid rhythm to it. Had I a six it would have been yours Brooke.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Eric, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are welcome Brooke
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You are welcome Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
Once again you've made me smile from ear to ear. You write such delightful poetic thoughts that make me feel good. This is just an excellent poetic presentation that I enjoyed reading... John
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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Once again you've made me smile from ear to ear. You write such delightful poetic thoughts that make me feel good. This is just an excellent poetic presentation that I enjoyed reading... John
Comment Written 18-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2014
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John, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
