The Boat
A 5-7-5 poetry contest entry.214 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem is extremely thought provoking and deep. The author did a great job in just a few words
having the reader look deeper. The artwork was perfect and complimented this poem. Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Excellent Poem! The poem is extremely thought provoking and deep. The author did a great job in just a few words
having the reader look deeper. The artwork was perfect and complimented this poem. Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for giving such a positive review on my poem. I tried to make it as deep as I could, I appreciate it all! Thank you thank you!
- G
Comment from JM daSilva
I guess that's about a person that doesn't feel he owns his destiny. He feels like life is always taking him somewhere he didn't want, or that he might want, but he didn't plan. So he feels like an object sometimes.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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I guess that's about a person that doesn't feel he owns his destiny. He feels like life is always taking him somewhere he didn't want, or that he might want, but he didn't plan. So he feels like an object sometimes.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much for your original review and view. I love looking at all the different things that people see in my poetry. Sounds like the character development of a pretty cool protagonist-hero. :) mind if I use that? :)
- G
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Oh, I'd love to see you develop that.
Comment from Anthony Crosbie
Very thought provoking poem. I'm certain everyone has had moments when they've felt lost and helpless with the way something has turned out. Just got to hope the tide is kind and gets us to where we wanted to go.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Very thought provoking poem. I'm certain everyone has had moments when they've felt lost and helpless with the way something has turned out. Just got to hope the tide is kind and gets us to where we wanted to go.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the complement of your five stars! :)
- G
Comment from Brocha1
Your very short poem painted a vivid picture of the kinds of decisions we all make sometimes. The first line was a very strong line. i found the second line quite a bit weaker because of the ode style which didn't rally seem to fit. The last line was excellent and pulled it all together.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Your very short poem painted a vivid picture of the kinds of decisions we all make sometimes. The first line was a very strong line. i found the second line quite a bit weaker because of the ode style which didn't rally seem to fit. The last line was excellent and pulled it all together.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you, I love the old English type of writing, and it stuck and fit with the syllable count. Thanks for the review!
- G
Comment from gudbjorg
This is a very nicely done poem, really perfect, it has a wonderful flow a beautiful word picture that also rhymes. Very nicely done poetry!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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This is a very nicely done poem, really perfect, it has a wonderful flow a beautiful word picture that also rhymes. Very nicely done poetry!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for saying its perfect! I have gotten a few six stars for it, I hope it will even out to where it will be a six overall! Thank you for your beautiful complement though. It's appreciated!
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Comment from TOMORAL
Deep, thought provoking little message in this fine poem. How did we get here when we don't know how to steer? Loved the picture and the words.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Deep, thought provoking little message in this fine poem. How did we get here when we don't know how to steer? Loved the picture and the words.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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I appreciate the six deeply!!! :) makes me feel great!
- G
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Gabriel,
This is one of those poems that begs to be read more than once, which I have done. I think all of us have embarked on a project only to find that it is beyond us and wonder why we started it in the first place. This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and I wish you the best of luck in the contest...chey
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Hi Gabriel,
This is one of those poems that begs to be read more than once, which I have done. I think all of us have embarked on a project only to find that it is beyond us and wonder why we started it in the first place. This is an excellent 5-7-5 poem and I wish you the best of luck in the contest...chey
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Wow! No better complement can be payed to me than to say that you wanted to read it again! I appreciate such appreciation of my poetry! Thank you my friend.
- G
Comment from Supe
Very thought provoking. You presented this well. The pier is a complement to your words. I think we have all been there at some point in our lives. Good luck in your journey. Nice job.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Very thought provoking. You presented this well. The pier is a complement to your words. I think we have all been there at some point in our lives. Good luck in your journey. Nice job.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much I appreciate your review and good luck in your journey too!
- G
Comment from Macsween
Good job with this 5-7-5 poem, I liked it. I liked how the words rhymed and I liked the picture. The words were great and I wish you every luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Good job with this 5-7-5 poem, I liked it. I liked how the words rhymed and I liked the picture. The words were great and I wish you every luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you for the wish of luck! Does this mean I have your vote? :) just kidding, no pressuring, that's not me... *looks at you with puppy eyes*
- G
Comment from 9999pool
At the pier, the stone is not a real stone but stone as in stunned by what we see at the pier. the boat had gone out and we cannot return back.
Where is the boat and when will it come back?
Will I be left stranded here in what i have pursued all my life as in love, a career and maybe even a writer.
How long must I wait before the boat calls Home, smiles.
This review is subject to a few interpretations. Take the one that truly describe you thoughts, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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At the pier, the stone is not a real stone but stone as in stunned by what we see at the pier. the boat had gone out and we cannot return back.
Where is the boat and when will it come back?
Will I be left stranded here in what i have pursued all my life as in love, a career and maybe even a writer.
How long must I wait before the boat calls Home, smiles.
This review is subject to a few interpretations. Take the one that truly describe you thoughts, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 21-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2013
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Thank you very nice, I enjoyed your review and your interpretation :) i pretty much thrive off of all the things people see in my works...
-G
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It's a beautiful piece of work with the homely countryside feeling of serenity and hope. I loved it! Smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
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Hi G,
Sorry for the earlier reply which i type for the succeeding replies, LOL.
What I meant to say was that many poems leave the interpretation as an open ended story. Well done on this one. i kept wondering why the stone was doing there and it dawn on me only after I started writing the review. Good metaphor and imagery. Maybe without the author's notes, there will be more interpretation coming your way?
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
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Surprisingly, not many people ever read the authors notes, and I just meant them to be a guideline. I still see many different views :) my favorite part
