If Fall Should Ever Disappear
rhyming quatrains174 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Raine
Hello, Brooke!
It's been a while since I've been on FS, and I'm glad to see you're still writing and posting. Haven't come across something you've penned in some time.
I love the memories you invoke for us to share in, for that's what really triggers my senses, causes me to feel - I spent a few years living in the Midwest, and my favorite time was Autumn, watching the leaves turn colors, the air grow crisper; winter is my least favorite season, though, so Autumn was also bittersweet in that regard, a final caress before a long good-bye.
Your imagery really brought me back to mornings I would walk outside in late September and October, watching the sunrise and the world awaken in hues of crimson and copper.
Lovely write, my friend, and good luck in the contest,
- TR
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Hello, Brooke!
It's been a while since I've been on FS, and I'm glad to see you're still writing and posting. Haven't come across something you've penned in some time.
I love the memories you invoke for us to share in, for that's what really triggers my senses, causes me to feel - I spent a few years living in the Midwest, and my favorite time was Autumn, watching the leaves turn colors, the air grow crisper; winter is my least favorite season, though, so Autumn was also bittersweet in that regard, a final caress before a long good-bye.
Your imagery really brought me back to mornings I would walk outside in late September and October, watching the sunrise and the world awaken in hues of crimson and copper.
Lovely write, my friend, and good luck in the contest,
- TR
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Thomas, thank you so very much for your gracious response to this poem. It's good to hear from you :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
Great job on this. Welcome back to FS. I missed your daily missives. The poem has an even flow and great bouncy rhythm. I love the concept of "imagining" an Autumn if it disappeared. Great job
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Great job on this. Welcome back to FS. I missed your daily missives. The poem has an even flow and great bouncy rhythm. I love the concept of "imagining" an Autumn if it disappeared. Great job
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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RYME4U,thank you so much for your lovely comments and your welcome back. :-) Sorry for the delayed response - I'm digging out from reviews :-) Brooke
Comment from Spike the second
Hello Brooke
What a lovely poem indeed. Yes we are lucky in this part of the world to get autumn. I just did not appreciate that some have nevere seen autumn or even spring and winter.
What a sweet poem and so well written. I think you are on a winner with this and I am sure it will win.
Best of luck anyway, not that you will need it.
Blessings
Spike
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Hello Brooke
What a lovely poem indeed. Yes we are lucky in this part of the world to get autumn. I just did not appreciate that some have nevere seen autumn or even spring and winter.
What a sweet poem and so well written. I think you are on a winner with this and I am sure it will win.
Best of luck anyway, not that you will need it.
Blessings
Spike
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Spike, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem. I was very happy to win this contest and appreciate your good wishes :-) Brooke
Comment from Starlit Ink
This poem shares an appreciation for the colorful season of autumn. If we imagine that it would disappear, that makes us appreciate it more. The poem flows with good wording and strong imagery. It is a delight to read and an excellent entry into the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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This poem shares an appreciation for the colorful season of autumn. If we imagine that it would disappear, that makes us appreciate it more. The poem flows with good wording and strong imagery. It is a delight to read and an excellent entry into the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Starlit Ink, thank you so very much for your gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from trimple
Not bad for a beginner :)
Beautifully written. As natural as the seasons themselves.
You inspire us all to write a better day.
Kind regards Trimple
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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Not bad for a beginner :)
Beautifully written. As natural as the seasons themselves.
You inspire us all to write a better day.
Kind regards Trimple
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
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Trimple, thank you so very much. I truly do appreciate your encouragement and your most generous exceptional rating :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
Autumn is a beautiful time when the leaves turn and there's slight nip in the air. I love the inclusion of geese and a pumpkin. Cornupia --makes one think of Thanksgiving, my favorite holiday. Glad to have you back. You must write about your visit with the grandson.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Autumn is a beautiful time when the leaves turn and there's slight nip in the air. I love the inclusion of geese and a pumpkin. Cornupia --makes one think of Thanksgiving, my favorite holiday. Glad to have you back. You must write about your visit with the grandson.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Spitfire, thank you so much for your gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from AprilShower
It is true. We all would miss that special time of the year. Sometimes I wish it would last longer. It is such a beautiful time of the year. If fall would never come again, then some of us would miss the beautiful white snow and the lovely spring flowers and blossoms, too. Each season is a wonder to behold. Thank you for the lovely poem, Brooke.
April
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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It is true. We all would miss that special time of the year. Sometimes I wish it would last longer. It is such a beautiful time of the year. If fall would never come again, then some of us would miss the beautiful white snow and the lovely spring flowers and blossoms, too. Each season is a wonder to behold. Thank you for the lovely poem, Brooke.
April
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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April, thank you so very very much for your gracious comments and wonderfully generous exceptional rating. I truly appreciate both :-) Brooke
Comment from Silverlock
This lovely autumnal verse deserves a six, but have none to give, Brooke, I'm sorry to say.
Beautiful imagery - love the burnished gold of the leaves - matches the artwork you've chosen!
Also like your expression 'cornucopia of dreams'.
I'd love a touch of autumn right now - everything is brown and yellow from the summer heat :(
Hope you had a lovely visit with your family!
Regards, Barb
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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This lovely autumnal verse deserves a six, but have none to give, Brooke, I'm sorry to say.
Beautiful imagery - love the burnished gold of the leaves - matches the artwork you've chosen!
Also like your expression 'cornucopia of dreams'.
I'd love a touch of autumn right now - everything is brown and yellow from the summer heat :(
Hope you had a lovely visit with your family!
Regards, Barb
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Barb, my visit was perfect until the minute I had to leave and my daughter would not let me steal Sawyer from her :-) Thanks so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
Wow! I cannot believe that you were able to use the word cornucopia without having to find a rhyme for it. LOL. Your poem is so beautiful, it is very sad to even have to contemplate the loss of autumn. I live in Southern California, and even here fall is a welcome sight, at least to most of us. You create beautiful imagery with your well chosen words, the cadence is crystal clear and well formed. This is another very fine effort on your part. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Wow! I cannot believe that you were able to use the word cornucopia without having to find a rhyme for it. LOL. Your poem is so beautiful, it is very sad to even have to contemplate the loss of autumn. I live in Southern California, and even here fall is a welcome sight, at least to most of us. You create beautiful imagery with your well chosen words, the cadence is crystal clear and well formed. This is another very fine effort on your part. Congratulations.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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nomi, I'm no fool - I never end a line with a word that bizarre if it has to rhyme! LOL :-) Thanks so very much, my friend :-) Brooke
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Dear Brooke to be called friend by one you admire and respect is a very fine gift. Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This lovely poem effectively implies the suggestion that we use our vision to take as many "pictures" of a season's beauty as possible--as though we'd never really see the elements of that season again. Very good
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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This lovely poem effectively implies the suggestion that we use our vision to take as many "pictures" of a season's beauty as possible--as though we'd never really see the elements of that season again. Very good
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2012
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Janice, thank you so very much for your gracious response to this poem :-) Brooke
