Comment from Cedar

Excellent

I like everything about this one. This is a splendid poem and should do very well in the contest. Your presentation matches your words perfectly. Good luck. Bill

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012

Thank you, Bill, for the kind words and for taking the time to review.
Steve

Comment from cvcopac

Excellent

Beautifuly written triolet. Excellent rhyme and the cadence is perfect. Nice parallel in the fith and sixth lines. Maybe more enjambment?

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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012

Thanks for the nice review - yes, I am an inveterate end-stopper! Perhaps a weakness that I shall overcome in time....
Steve

Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

This is so beautiful in message, form, color and art. And I get an extra bonus as I pull back my curtain, the sun is just rising on the eastern horizon. Oh poetry is truly soul connection. Best to you with the entry.

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 Comment Written 11-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012

Thank you, Jean. I can do the same thing as I type this, except autumn is getting a grip now and all I see is a fuzzy light unable to break through heavy fog! Will be a nice day, however.
Steve