Sunshine and I
a children's poem in rhyming couplets151 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
Super poem to teach little ones to appreciate the wonders of our world and get to know all about them. Excellent rhyming and imagery, with good use of descriptive language. Most enjoyable, super pic, also. Faye
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Super poem to teach little ones to appreciate the wonders of our world and get to know all about them. Excellent rhyming and imagery, with good use of descriptive language. Most enjoyable, super pic, also. Faye
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
Personification of the sun and the moon made this a playful date, indeed. Nice aabb rhyming scheme. I think children would get a kick out of this. Wonderfully written. Les
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Personification of the sun and the moon made this a playful date, indeed. Nice aabb rhyming scheme. I think children would get a kick out of this. Wonderfully written. Les
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Les :-) Brooke
Comment from words
Such a cheering poem, Brooke. You have captured that special unlimited joy of childhood perfectly here.
Love the photo. I did a film in Canada and spent a year there ... Loved it . I was lucky enough to be able to spend weekends at the resorts of my choice ... All at the films expense. Ah, this one brings back great memories.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Such a cheering poem, Brooke. You have captured that special unlimited joy of childhood perfectly here.
Love the photo. I did a film in Canada and spent a year there ... Loved it . I was lucky enough to be able to spend weekends at the resorts of my choice ... All at the films expense. Ah, this one brings back great memories.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend :-) Resorts on someone else's dime - sounds like a great gig to me! LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
Another good poem for children and a great legacy to leave for Sawyer.
Excellent rhythm in rhymed couplets along with the use of some alliteration
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Another good poem for children and a great legacy to leave for Sawyer.
Excellent rhythm in rhymed couplets along with the use of some alliteration
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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emrpoems, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Genya
Hi and what a cute enjoyable poem. I have never heard the rhythm Dadumdum Dadumdum, but after l read your poem l did go back and read it again with this rhythm in my head. Loved the poem and liked the way the child played with the sun during the day then left the moonbeams to play when the dark came. Good rhyming and an excellent rhythm. Loved the picture as well. Genya
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Hi and what a cute enjoyable poem. I have never heard the rhythm Dadumdum Dadumdum, but after l read your poem l did go back and read it again with this rhythm in my head. Loved the poem and liked the way the child played with the sun during the day then left the moonbeams to play when the dark came. Good rhyming and an excellent rhythm. Loved the picture as well. Genya
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Genya, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Good job with your children's poem with rhyming couplets. I like the personification of the sun and moon. Alliteration of w's and m's. Beautiful scenic picture. 8-)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Good job with your children's poem with rhyming couplets. I like the personification of the sun and moon. Alliteration of w's and m's. Beautiful scenic picture. 8-)
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Brooke: sorry to be out of sixes for this lovely work! I found it to be very entertaining, fresh and uplifting. You certainly have a lovely touch in transmitting your emotions and thoughts into these excellent works! Vance
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Dear Brooke: sorry to be out of sixes for this lovely work! I found it to be very entertaining, fresh and uplifting. You certainly have a lovely touch in transmitting your emotions and thoughts into these excellent works! Vance
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Vance, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from marijmd
How sweet - and it also teaches a good lesson about what is in the sky in day or night. My littlest got all upset when he saw the moon in the sky during the day - he yelled at it to go to bed.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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How sweet - and it also teaches a good lesson about what is in the sky in day or night. My littlest got all upset when he saw the moon in the sky during the day - he yelled at it to go to bed.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Mary, that's so cute - Sawyer has always loved to spy the moon during the day. He waves to it and shouts hello and makes sure his mom sees it too. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your sweet poem. I liked the rhythm of it. The picture is so cute. I see nothing to change. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed your sweet poem. I liked the rhythm of it. The picture is so cute. I see nothing to change. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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jannypan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke;
Thank you for writing about the predominant meter in your authors note and it helped a lot in reading your poem.
And it made it more fun to read.
I enjoyed reading this very much And I can visualize the sun rays and moonbeams casting their way into the life of an unsuspected person.
I found your rhyming couplet quatrains were done quite well And your rhymes are done very well and helped with the rhythmic flow which was also flowing so smoothly throughout your writing.
You were very descriptive and expressive in the imagery. Such as this: "Sun tossed his raising caught each one-- nothing to stop us till daytime was done. When we grew weary, we crept into bed, leaving the moonbeams to play in our stead."
Thank you so much Brooke for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you in yours always.
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Brooke;
Thank you for writing about the predominant meter in your authors note and it helped a lot in reading your poem.
And it made it more fun to read.
I enjoyed reading this very much And I can visualize the sun rays and moonbeams casting their way into the life of an unsuspected person.
I found your rhyming couplet quatrains were done quite well And your rhymes are done very well and helped with the rhythmic flow which was also flowing so smoothly throughout your writing.
You were very descriptive and expressive in the imagery. Such as this: "Sun tossed his raising caught each one-- nothing to stop us till daytime was done. When we grew weary, we crept into bed, leaving the moonbeams to play in our stead."
Thank you so much Brooke for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you in yours always.
Alex
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much, Alex, for your thoughtful and detailed review :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome my friend.
Alex :-)
