In the Glow of the Midnight Moon
rhyming quatrains in mixed meter147 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
Beautiful picture to accompany your poem. It flows smoothly with the ABCB rhyme scheme and I love the alliterations scattered throughout. I also like the allusion to the Siren's from the Odyssey. Nice job, Brooke. 8-)
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Beautiful picture to accompany your poem. It flows smoothly with the ABCB rhyme scheme and I love the alliterations scattered throughout. I also like the allusion to the Siren's from the Odyssey. Nice job, Brooke. 8-)
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from Just Pete
Very poetic and well constructedwith a soul that fears no dread in the pentametr. The ocean is a great theme, as many of the classic poets have used it with great success. One cmall point I would make:
"with a soul that fears no dread..." Perhaps "feels rather than dreads? (Just a suggetion) Peter
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Very poetic and well constructedwith a soul that fears no dread in the pentametr. The ocean is a great theme, as many of the classic poets have used it with great success. One cmall point I would make:
"with a soul that fears no dread..." Perhaps "feels rather than dreads? (Just a suggetion) Peter
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Thanks for your thoughtful feedback, Peter - I will take a look at that line
Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke, your rhythm flows so smoothly and beautifully that I needed to read it twice for just the flare of this miraculous metered piece. In this particular poem you have manifested that the knowledge, skill and experience needed for success in a particular field such as poetry is greatly masterful in its own artistic way. Your rhymes were neither forced, labeled or sprained and the meter is perfect. Thank you for sharing and posting your work for everyone and may the Lord be with you and yours always.
Alex
PS: the picture is so miraculously complementing your poem
that it is a poem within itself. An exceptional job all the way around.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Brooke, your rhythm flows so smoothly and beautifully that I needed to read it twice for just the flare of this miraculous metered piece. In this particular poem you have manifested that the knowledge, skill and experience needed for success in a particular field such as poetry is greatly masterful in its own artistic way. Your rhymes were neither forced, labeled or sprained and the meter is perfect. Thank you for sharing and posting your work for everyone and may the Lord be with you and yours always.
Alex
PS: the picture is so miraculously complementing your poem
that it is a poem within itself. An exceptional job all the way around.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Krys, thank you so much for your gracious and generous review :-) Brooke
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Brooke, You are so sincerely welcome.
Peace be with you
Alex
Comment from nancyjam
I love the mood of this peace and the
change in meter enhances the feeling
of mystery and enchantment
Wonderful imagery throughout, beautiful rhyme
and a lovely presentation. Nancy
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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I love the mood of this peace and the
change in meter enhances the feeling
of mystery and enchantment
Wonderful imagery throughout, beautiful rhyme
and a lovely presentation. Nancy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from juliaSjames
Thanks for the information about the meter, Brooke. Before I read your notes, I did encounter some false starts.
Lovely, hypnotic poem about an obsession that's almost supernatural in origin.
Perhaps it's a masculine trait.
Some of my male ancestors in Guyana couldn't resist the lure of the rainforest. One was a gold miner, another a river boat captain. They returned to the city less and less, until finally they drifted off and were never heard of again.
Captivating write enhanced by luminous artwork reminiscent of Van Gogh.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the information about the meter, Brooke. Before I read your notes, I did encounter some false starts.
Lovely, hypnotic poem about an obsession that's almost supernatural in origin.
Perhaps it's a masculine trait.
Some of my male ancestors in Guyana couldn't resist the lure of the rainforest. One was a gold miner, another a river boat captain. They returned to the city less and less, until finally they drifted off and were never heard of again.
Captivating write enhanced by luminous artwork reminiscent of Van Gogh.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Julia, thank you so very much :-) I'm glad to hear this triggered memories of similar souls :-) Brooke
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke - I so enjoyed reading this poem. Your imagery was stunning, of course I love the moon, the sea and the sense of awe the seductress calls.
An amazing piece - and since I am trying to learn the da Dums I am going squirrelly - but sure loved this work. Great photo too:)
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Dear Brooke - I so enjoyed reading this poem. Your imagery was stunning, of course I love the moon, the sea and the sense of awe the seductress calls.
An amazing piece - and since I am trying to learn the da Dums I am going squirrelly - but sure loved this work. Great photo too:)
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Maureen, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Harv
Like the tides from the ocean's depths
pull away at the moon's commands,
I entertain no thought at all
but to follow her demands.
this is very special intriguing and fascinating
In the glow of the midnight moon
when the dawn has no hold on me,
I listen only to the call
of the dark, enchanting sea.
this is very powerful, i am grateful to read
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Like the tides from the ocean's depths
pull away at the moon's commands,
I entertain no thought at all
but to follow her demands.
this is very special intriguing and fascinating
In the glow of the midnight moon
when the dawn has no hold on me,
I listen only to the call
of the dark, enchanting sea.
this is very powerful, i am grateful to read
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Harv, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Nosha17
This is a very beautiful poem, the rhymes and mixed meter work very effectively. The draw of the sea is indeed exceedingly hypnotising and this you have conveyed with your choice of words. Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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This is a very beautiful poem, the rhymes and mixed meter work very effectively. The draw of the sea is indeed exceedingly hypnotising and this you have conveyed with your choice of words. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Faye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from evilynne
What a beautiful well written piece. I love the imagery of the see in the darkness. I'm not that good at this point with poetic form, but it seems correct to me. Anyway, it flows beautifully, is well worded and imaginative. The accompanying picture is, indeed, beautiful.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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What a beautiful well written piece. I love the imagery of the see in the darkness. I'm not that good at this point with poetic form, but it seems correct to me. Anyway, it flows beautifully, is well worded and imaginative. The accompanying picture is, indeed, beautiful.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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evilynne, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
An evocative poem with a complex rhythm that must have taken careful thought to achieve consistently from verse to verse. The result is unforced. There is a certain playfulness and musicality about it that suits the subject, which brought to mind John Masefield's famous poem, " I must go down to the sea tonight..."
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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An evocative poem with a complex rhythm that must have taken careful thought to achieve consistently from verse to verse. The result is unforced. There is a certain playfulness and musicality about it that suits the subject, which brought to mind John Masefield's famous poem, " I must go down to the sea tonight..."
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Considering that is one of my favorite poems, I am honored. Thank you, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
