Josiah Hezekiah
a love story in rhyme139 total reviews
Comment from pipersfancy
Well! I just couldn't help but be swept overboard, alongside Josiah and his mermaid love as they gracefully slipped through the waves! Such a lovely tale (or... tail?) you've spun!
Wonderful, effective use of the repetitions... very wave-like! Simply loved this one!
Adorable pic of Sawyer... a sea-faring sailor in the making?
PF
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Well! I just couldn't help but be swept overboard, alongside Josiah and his mermaid love as they gracefully slipped through the waves! Such a lovely tale (or... tail?) you've spun!
Wonderful, effective use of the repetitions... very wave-like! Simply loved this one!
Adorable pic of Sawyer... a sea-faring sailor in the making?
PF
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, PF :-) He loves the beach, but this was his first time on a boat. I foresee many more trips in his future. I appreciate your generous sixth star. Brooke :-)
Comment from IndianaIrish
I love this captivating story poem of adventure and love, Brooke. The repeating rhymes make this poem an absolute joy to read out loud.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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I love this captivating story poem of adventure and love, Brooke. The repeating rhymes make this poem an absolute joy to read out loud.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Karyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Curly Girly
I really loved this poem! I wish I had six stars to give, but I am out. The funny old name and the rhyme and rhythm are simply perfect.
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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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I really loved this poem! I wish I had six stars to give, but I am out. The funny old name and the rhyme and rhythm are simply perfect.
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Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Brooke,
I liked the "sea chanty" feel of this little ditty. It had that sense of repeats that would help hoist canvas in the days of sail. Great rhythm and rhyme as always. Great job--Ted
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Dear Brooke,
I liked the "sea chanty" feel of this little ditty. It had that sense of repeats that would help hoist canvas in the days of sail. Great rhythm and rhyme as always. Great job--Ted
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Ted, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
O ADP! Another great poem. How do you come up with these beauties. You used my favorite poetic devise here. A very good poet! In fact a major poet to be. I wish I had your creativity in poetry!-R
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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O ADP! Another great poem. How do you come up with these beauties. You used my favorite poetic devise here. A very good poet! In fact a major poet to be. I wish I had your creativity in poetry!-R
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much, Raphael :-) Brooke
Comment from LIJ Red
Some cynical historian or biologist said mermaids were actually manatees, seen in the deeps by sailors. I don't think a manatee could swim that deep. There was an old song or chantey with that rhyme scheme, and I'm fumbling to recall it...Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Some cynical historian or biologist said mermaids were actually manatees, seen in the deeps by sailors. I don't think a manatee could swim that deep. There was an old song or chantey with that rhyme scheme, and I'm fumbling to recall it...Excellent writing.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, LIJ - I've seen manatees, and all I can say is a man would have to be drunk as a skunk to think one of those creatures is a pretty girl. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Josiah Hezekiah, once adrift upon the sea,
now sails with joy within his heart,
as happy as can be, can be,
as happy as can be.
And a special thank you for sharing this amazing
poem - with its sing-song rhythm - and the lovely
picture of Sawyer. He's so adorable.
Just popped in - soooooooooooo hot - off to have another cool shower - hope all is well, Brooke.
Margaret
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Josiah Hezekiah, once adrift upon the sea,
now sails with joy within his heart,
as happy as can be, can be,
as happy as can be.
And a special thank you for sharing this amazing
poem - with its sing-song rhythm - and the lovely
picture of Sawyer. He's so adorable.
Just popped in - soooooooooooo hot - off to have another cool shower - hope all is well, Brooke.
Margaret
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Margaret, I am so glad you enjoyed this whimsical love story :-) It is so hot and humid here today that I have not even ventured out. My air conditioning and I are quite happy together. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke - you captured a lot in this post including the photo of Cutie Pie so serious in taking in this new adventure of his first boat ride. Great poem skillfully crafted as always, this has a lovely lyrical flow to it. Nicely done.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Dear Brooke - you captured a lot in this post including the photo of Cutie Pie so serious in taking in this new adventure of his first boat ride. Great poem skillfully crafted as always, this has a lovely lyrical flow to it. Nicely done.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Maureen, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ekim777
Written with all the finesse of an old time ballad and the repetition never lose their freshness. This might be a romantic piece but does it not touch on the realities of live. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Written with all the finesse of an old time ballad and the repetition never lose their freshness. This might be a romantic piece but does it not touch on the realities of live. -Ekim777
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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Ekim, thank you so much for your generous response to this story poem which is definitely not meant to be realistic. :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
i love HOW you have told Josiah Hezekiah's tale using repetend in every stanza to give us a sense of a rolling sea. It sounds like a sailor's tale, Brooke, and I can see how it would appeal to a young audience. But there is that more serious undertone about an unhappy traveler who found--at last--a soul mate.
A delightful sailor's yarn. Rod
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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i love HOW you have told Josiah Hezekiah's tale using repetend in every stanza to give us a sense of a rolling sea. It sounds like a sailor's tale, Brooke, and I can see how it would appeal to a young audience. But there is that more serious undertone about an unhappy traveler who found--at last--a soul mate.
A delightful sailor's yarn. Rod
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2014
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thank you so much, Rod :-) Brooke
