New dawn entangles sullen night
The power of love123 total reviews
Comment from words
I like your triolet on love.
I especially liked your closing stanza:So doth your love's life-giving light
Set free my heart from wintry cold.
New dawn entangles sullen night
With silken threads of fine-spun gold.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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I like your triolet on love.
I especially liked your closing stanza:So doth your love's life-giving light
Set free my heart from wintry cold.
New dawn entangles sullen night
With silken threads of fine-spun gold.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind words and for taking the time to review.
Steve
Comment from mauial
I see more than a poem about a literal new day as this could be taken as a poem about new beginnings as one takes flight from the darkness of the past. Good poem.
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I see more than a poem about a literal new day as this could be taken as a poem about new beginnings as one takes flight from the darkness of the past. Good poem.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you - perhaps it is appropriate that I am embarking on a new beginning in my life at present.
Steve
Comment from Tonulak
This was one of the best triolets I've read so far. i loved your imagery and the whole romantic flavor. Good luck in the contest. Great job!
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This was one of the best triolets I've read so far. i loved your imagery and the whole romantic flavor. Good luck in the contest. Great job!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you, and congrats on your placing in the recent contest.
Steve
Comment from donette1914
very beautiful! you painted a lovely photo and you made it come to life. you have a very good chance to win. thankyou for sharing it was a pleasure
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very beautiful! you painted a lovely photo and you made it come to life. you have a very good chance to win. thankyou for sharing it was a pleasure
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind words and for taking the time to review.
Steve
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
With silken threads of fine-spun gold. <<< Superb line! Lovely tribute to our sun, love your flair for words. Just wonderful!
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With silken threads of fine-spun gold. <<< Superb line! Lovely tribute to our sun, love your flair for words. Just wonderful!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Phyllis, for the kind words and for taking the time to review.
Steve
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written triolet movingly compares the sun and its welcome effects to love and how it rejuvenates and uplifts.
Very good
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This well-written triolet movingly compares the sun and its welcome effects to love and how it rejuvenates and uplifts.
Very good
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Janice, for the kind words and for taking the time to review.
Steve
Comment from tango494
Wow, what an excellent job you did on this poem. I loved the technical quality but even more so I loved the beauty your words created. This was truly a joy of a poem to read.
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Wow, what an excellent job you did on this poem. I loved the technical quality but even more so I loved the beauty your words created. This was truly a joy of a poem to read.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind words and for taking the time to review.
Steve
Comment from rama devi
Lovely triolet, true to form with flawless meter and fine rhyming. Fluid flowing phrases, especially the repeating ones. unique and interesting formatting with the line break for dramatic pause. Beautiful presentation.
Looks like a fine entry. Good luck!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Lovely triolet, true to form with flawless meter and fine rhyming. Fluid flowing phrases, especially the repeating ones. unique and interesting formatting with the line break for dramatic pause. Beautiful presentation.
Looks like a fine entry. Good luck!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Rama. A couple of other revierwers have questioned the line break, although one of the examples given uses that technique - I just felt it needed it.
Steve
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Some people are uncomfortable with enjambement, but I find it an excellent poetic device and use it in most of my poetry. :) usually it is people new to poetry who do not like enjambment between stanzas. Warmly, rd
Comment from TOPE1
Love is light. This poem is a triolet that is a poem of 8 lines. It has two stanzas. It has a rhyme scheme of abaaabab. The poet uses nature to describe the power of love. He uses figure of speech such as : personification(Dark shadows' fears are put to flight), simile(So doth your love's life-giving light), etc. The use of language , he uses doth as does. A good poem, well done!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Love is light. This poem is a triolet that is a poem of 8 lines. It has two stanzas. It has a rhyme scheme of abaaabab. The poet uses nature to describe the power of love. He uses figure of speech such as : personification(Dark shadows' fears are put to flight), simile(So doth your love's life-giving light), etc. The use of language , he uses doth as does. A good poem, well done!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind words and for taking the time to review.
Steve
Comment from ennahanid
What a magnificent picture that leads into your Triolet. I think you rose to this challenge beautifully, absolutely love your words, then the picture and color choice makes for such a super presentation.
It was a pleasure to read you this morning...Dinah
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What a magnificent picture that leads into your Triolet. I think you rose to this challenge beautifully, absolutely love your words, then the picture and color choice makes for such a super presentation.
It was a pleasure to read you this morning...Dinah
Comment Written 11-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you, Dinah, for the kind words and for taking the time to review.
Steve
