The Minute Poem
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Comment from Domino
Hi, Brooke. Thank goodness we're spoiled here and I've never been 'snowed in'. Blimey - what happens if beer and cigs run out?
Must say, IMHO, this is a superior minute poem. I usually find the format very jerky and sometimes forced. However, particularly where you've continued the flow from the 3rd to the 4th lines in the first two stanzas, this aids the flow incredibly. Excellent technique that I'll try to remember. ;-). Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Hi, Brooke. Thank goodness we're spoiled here and I've never been 'snowed in'. Blimey - what happens if beer and cigs run out?
Must say, IMHO, this is a superior minute poem. I usually find the format very jerky and sometimes forced. However, particularly where you've continued the flow from the 3rd to the 4th lines in the first two stanzas, this aids the flow incredibly. Excellent technique that I'll try to remember. ;-). Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Funny you should ask - you should see the damn stores every time snow is forecast - people line up to buy amazing amounts of toilet paper, as if they will be snowed in for weeks - and milk, bread, the usual. I'm sure the stores that sell beer are also crowded! Thank you for your glowing review - I worked a LONG time on this one. Brooke
Comment from Janet65
A nice Minute, and so interesting with some lovely imagery. You have followed the Minute form perfectly, and the rhyming is well done, as is the flow. These are so fun to write.
Janet
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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A nice Minute, and so interesting with some lovely imagery. You have followed the Minute form perfectly, and the rhyming is well done, as is the flow. These are so fun to write.
Janet
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Janet, thank you for your comments about technique as well as content. Brooke
Comment from earthlybeing
Beautiful, eve when it is hard to be stuck inside God provides us with beauty in his great works of nature. Love the poem. Thanks, Jeanette
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Beautiful, eve when it is hard to be stuck inside God provides us with beauty in his great works of nature. Love the poem. Thanks, Jeanette
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Jeanette, thank you for a warm response, Brooke
Comment from babylonia
brooke,
i imagine it is quite gorgeous. we get all the cold and ice but very little snow this year. if we have to be so cold there might as well be snow. LOL hope that makes sense. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. very beautiful
love,
barbara
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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brooke,
i imagine it is quite gorgeous. we get all the cold and ice but very little snow this year. if we have to be so cold there might as well be snow. LOL hope that makes sense. easy to read and follow. no spaggies. very beautiful
love,
barbara
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Barbara, it is quite lovely, especially since I had no urgent business that necessitated going out into it to attempt to drive! Thanks, Brooke
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brooke,
then that makes it even better.
love,
barbara
