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Comment from Falafa
Wonderfully powerful statement here. Oh, gosh, that is a sad state of affairs. Makes this poem even more potent. Great job. Your expertise, again, is awesome.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Wonderfully powerful statement here. Oh, gosh, that is a sad state of affairs. Makes this poem even more potent. Great job. Your expertise, again, is awesome.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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I thank you for such an encouraging and positive review, Brooke
Comment from WRITER1
Sad but true, as with so many companies. This poem it well written, and held a lot of truth. In this case this poem is all too true.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Sad but true, as with so many companies. This poem it well written, and held a lot of truth. In this case this poem is all too true.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Thanks so much for your perceptive comments, Brooke
Comment from skye
Well, it is definately time for some of that change...
it must start with the people, not with the corporations.
If they would have used the billions....written every person in America a check for equal shares... just think of the stimulus to the economy.
Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Well, it is definately time for some of that change...
it must start with the people, not with the corporations.
If they would have used the billions....written every person in America a check for equal shares... just think of the stimulus to the economy.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Skye, Amen to that. I sure would be spending my share on luxuries like heat, groceries... Thank you, Brooke
Comment from joan marie
I sit here and think about all the stores going out of business but not only that the lost jobs. That leads to lost work for daycare, and it just goes on and on. We are blessed our home is paid for. We just pay taxes. Which of course keep going up. Great write. joan marie
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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I sit here and think about all the stores going out of business but not only that the lost jobs. That leads to lost work for daycare, and it just goes on and on. We are blessed our home is paid for. We just pay taxes. Which of course keep going up. Great write. joan marie
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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It all has a snowball effect - the people out of work no longer use day care and no longer use the local dry cleaner or eat in the local restaurant, etc, etc. Thank you for your insights, Brooke
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The same sort of thing happened with the Gulf War. Jacksonville, Fl where I was living has 3 naval bases. When Mayport Naval station shipped out it was difficult for the small businesses to survive. People need to realize we are all connected in some way. jm
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near us Willow Grove air force base was threatened with shut down - same thing - the dry cleaners and restaurants, etc, would all lose most of their customers
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It's such a big mess. I just bought a printer from Circuit City. One week later I receive an email they are going out of business. They are giving my info on my warranty stuff. Lots of jobs lost their. Walmart pays and manages their employees in Florida so poorly they estimate 16,500 are on medicaid because of the lack of concern for the families of the stores. jm
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that is criminal that a full time employee qualifies for medicaid!
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Walmart is a place I now avoid at all cost. They treat their employees so badly. There is even a movie shown on tv occasionally about the indescretion perpertrated against woman, low pay, no chance for much advancement or raises. The movie really opened my eyes to a lot of there unfair employee practices. jm
Comment from artsygal
That is really sad news, Brooke. The poem shows the same public complacency you've admonished before (in the poem Apathy for example). People are hungry to save money for themselves, an until they themselves are unemployed, they don't get it. As you point out, the clerks, who will soon be jobless, can only sigh. They sigh along with those of us who saw the problems coming once Bush said his first mispoken idiot blunders. If he couldn't even talk comprehensively, he couldn't lead to anywhere but darkness.
Nothing good could come from a stolen presidency, and nothing but problems did.
Hugs for your understanding of the plight of salesclerks everywhere. I was once one of them!
Sara
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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That is really sad news, Brooke. The poem shows the same public complacency you've admonished before (in the poem Apathy for example). People are hungry to save money for themselves, an until they themselves are unemployed, they don't get it. As you point out, the clerks, who will soon be jobless, can only sigh. They sigh along with those of us who saw the problems coming once Bush said his first mispoken idiot blunders. If he couldn't even talk comprehensively, he couldn't lead to anywhere but darkness.
Nothing good could come from a stolen presidency, and nothing but problems did.
Hugs for your understanding of the plight of salesclerks everywhere. I was once one of them!
Sara
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Sara, Amen to all of that!! The guy who owned Circuit City, I'm sure, had a nice savings account stashed away - his sales clerks, on the other hand, will be broke in a week. Thank you, Brooke
Comment from chaswriter
Brooke - That would be funny if it didn't make me want to cry. Terrible situation. I just read this morning that Circuit City was closing all its doors. A friend's son who worked there got laid off a couple of months ago. Too bad. Charlie
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Brooke - That would be funny if it didn't make me want to cry. Terrible situation. I just read this morning that Circuit City was closing all its doors. A friend's son who worked there got laid off a couple of months ago. Too bad. Charlie
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Charlie, yes, I wrote it after hearing the news of the final closings since they found no buyer - not a day goes by without more people being laid off, all left to compete for jobs in an economy with not nearly enough jobs to go around.
Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
Yes, these company closings are happening all around us. Thanks for reminding us of all the jobs that are lost as a result and the lives that are potentially pushed into upheaval. Thanks also for a model cinquain that truly reflects the "turn" you taught us about some time ago. The title and picture support your satire well. I also liked the alliteration.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Yes, these company closings are happening all around us. Thanks for reminding us of all the jobs that are lost as a result and the lives that are potentially pushed into upheaval. Thanks also for a model cinquain that truly reflects the "turn" you taught us about some time ago. The title and picture support your satire well. I also liked the alliteration.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Thank you - I do try to get the turn into my cinquains as that is where the punch comes from. I'm so glad you notice, Joan. Brooke
Comment from NadineM
Brooke,
This poem, statiric cinquain was well-written. Spoke volumes! The sad sighs were perfect words to end with.
Financial difficulties are the source of much sadness and pain. Being able to meet your responsibilities and live comfortably is a joy that those who've never gone without do not understand. So while some are preparing to struggle, those with big bank accounts continue to selfishly furnish their lives with much that is unneccesary. Makes you wonder just what, if anything, they actually appreciate. These shoppers seem to those suffering as vultures, picking apart those that are still alive, albeit barely.
Thanks for sharing this with me. Obviously it evoked emotion in this reader!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Brooke,
This poem, statiric cinquain was well-written. Spoke volumes! The sad sighs were perfect words to end with.
Financial difficulties are the source of much sadness and pain. Being able to meet your responsibilities and live comfortably is a joy that those who've never gone without do not understand. So while some are preparing to struggle, those with big bank accounts continue to selfishly furnish their lives with much that is unneccesary. Makes you wonder just what, if anything, they actually appreciate. These shoppers seem to those suffering as vultures, picking apart those that are still alive, albeit barely.
Thanks for sharing this with me. Obviously it evoked emotion in this reader!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Nadine, thank you for your most perceptive comments - it is always so good to know something I've written as caused others to think. Brooke
Comment from mstad55
You have stated a sad fact in this satirical poem. It is truly a buyers market. But, at what cost to the seller? Not only retail sales and the auto industry, but the poor home owner that has lost their equity and has to sell a devaluated property. In some cases they can't break even. We have had a few people in the still of the night take what ever possessions they could and just leave their home. It hurts them and it hurts the rest of the neighborhood's resale value when the home goes to bank sale. It's not pretty and I'm not sure how this new administration is going to handle it, and fairly. mstad55
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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You have stated a sad fact in this satirical poem. It is truly a buyers market. But, at what cost to the seller? Not only retail sales and the auto industry, but the poor home owner that has lost their equity and has to sell a devaluated property. In some cases they can't break even. We have had a few people in the still of the night take what ever possessions they could and just leave their home. It hurts them and it hurts the rest of the neighborhood's resale value when the home goes to bank sale. It's not pretty and I'm not sure how this new administration is going to handle it, and fairly. mstad55
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Mike, yes, I've watched documentary features on TV about people who can't sell a house for half what they paid - it is all so unfair and tragic. Thank you, Brooke
Comment from Donovan
And so another store that imported every good they bought for a country with no human rights, vowed to oppress and destroy freedom loses another supplier. I feel for those that are unemployed, I feel sorry for a country that will not take back from those that exist on greed and avarice. We can not go back to where we were. We can not have Babylon in one hand and Zion in the other. You are right to express sadness over those that lost their job. Many more to come, now if we just do not do more of the same that got us here.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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And so another store that imported every good they bought for a country with no human rights, vowed to oppress and destroy freedom loses another supplier. I feel for those that are unemployed, I feel sorry for a country that will not take back from those that exist on greed and avarice. We can not go back to where we were. We can not have Babylon in one hand and Zion in the other. You are right to express sadness over those that lost their job. Many more to come, now if we just do not do more of the same that got us here.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2009
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Donovan, you are so right - so many of our greedy and uncaring practices got the country into this mess, but the ones who pay are the lowest paid workers, not the ones who made all the bad decisions. Thank you, Brooke
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You are correct. But it does show what happens when we give our moral responsibilities to others and we did this for the promise of a free lunch, a chicken in every pot and car in every garage. We freely choose that and now we must take it back. Now, I will be quiet...maybe.
