I Float On Your Tide...
Interdependent, I have become!113 total reviews
Comment from mancub
This is fun and very creative you have a good rhyme and nice even flow, your story here is very interesting and I like the word choice, it gives this a great deal of character and makes it stand out you have a wonderful poem very nicely writen and expressed, thank you for sharing your work, Take care, Mancub
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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This is fun and very creative you have a good rhyme and nice even flow, your story here is very interesting and I like the word choice, it gives this a great deal of character and makes it stand out you have a wonderful poem very nicely writen and expressed, thank you for sharing your work, Take care, Mancub
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Thank you for this review, I really enjoyed it. Also for the complimtnes as well. Mike
Comment from irony007
I think your imagery was right on the nose in this poem. I really enjoyed your first stanza and the manner in which you seemed to simultaneously use the clouds for happiness and sorrow. Your final stanza was exceptionally written. For one to collect the moods and use those moods to float happily along is an outstanding image and concept. Very well done.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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I think your imagery was right on the nose in this poem. I really enjoyed your first stanza and the manner in which you seemed to simultaneously use the clouds for happiness and sorrow. Your final stanza was exceptionally written. For one to collect the moods and use those moods to float happily along is an outstanding image and concept. Very well done.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Mike. This is quite a nice poem although the imagery is not original, ie, head in the clouds, dog with a bone etc. I would have preferred to see some original descriptions of how you feel but I haven't downgraded you for it lol
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Hi Mike. This is quite a nice poem although the imagery is not original, ie, head in the clouds, dog with a bone etc. I would have preferred to see some original descriptions of how you feel but I haven't downgraded you for it lol
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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It sound like your were teetering on that. lol This is the way the poem worked itself out, then Judian's poem hit me. Perhaps those too are a bit cliche'd but I felt that in this case, any substitution would stike in the mind as strongly. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. I enjoyed it.
Comment from Fish
i really like the last stanza in this poem.
the rest of it i don't care about. the last
stanza, for me, is the poem. very nice!
Fish
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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i really like the last stanza in this poem.
the rest of it i don't care about. the last
stanza, for me, is the poem. very nice!
Fish
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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The beginning I believe really ties that last stanza in. Thank you for your compliments and this review.
Comment from starman
Entertaining. The reference to a dog and a bone made me smile. I also liked the imagery. The lines though short didn't unduly emphasise the rhyming.
Pretty good
:)s
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Entertaining. The reference to a dog and a bone made me smile. I also liked the imagery. The lines though short didn't unduly emphasise the rhyming.
Pretty good
:)s
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Might as well stick with the truth. lol I let the poem work itself out and then figure on the best form to put it in, this process has worked very well for me. Thank you for the compliments and this review.
Comment from RossJM
Excellent piece of poetry, Mike.
When I read them
I always smile
Because your poems
Are like a pile
Of laughter.
Regards,
Ross
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Excellent piece of poetry, Mike.
When I read them
I always smile
Because your poems
Are like a pile
Of laughter.
Regards,
Ross
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Can I quote you on that! My boss may disagree. lol Thank you very much for that ditty, the compliments and this review.
Comment from Russel Chale
Nice poem, Mike. I don't know about your reference to water based poems, but this work has a nice flow and feel to it, which makes the picture appropriate in my opinion. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Nice poem, Mike. I don't know about your reference to water based poems, but this work has a nice flow and feel to it, which makes the picture appropriate in my opinion. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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He mispelled a word, facets instead became faucets. I relpied and then he again and he mentioned that faucets might work in others as there are so many water based poems here. I see the humor in things. Thank you for the compliments and this review.
Comment from lee_poe
Lovely poem, very pretty
instantly loose my frown.
instantly lose my frown. did you mean lose?
To Judian James, for using my fingers in this and not for fun
don't understand this, were we supposed to?
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Lovely poem, very pretty
instantly loose my frown.
instantly lose my frown. did you mean lose?
To Judian James, for using my fingers in this and not for fun
don't understand this, were we supposed to?
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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I read the notes, she wrote a poem today making light of sylaable counting. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review.
Comment from Earthwriter
very well written but i think you meant lose in the following line (instantly loose my frown) other than that i felt you did a good job
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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very well written but i think you meant lose in the following line (instantly loose my frown) other than that i felt you did a good job
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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You are correct and the change has been made. Thank you very much for your compliments and review.
Comment from PoesyPoet
Well, what I need to know is who the "she" is in this one, Mike. You write beautifully and if you read this to any girl, she'll fall head over heels...DARN too bad I'm married.
Leave it to Jude to inspire poets to use their hands!
Good job,
C
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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Well, what I need to know is who the "she" is in this one, Mike. You write beautifully and if you read this to any girl, she'll fall head over heels...DARN too bad I'm married.
Leave it to Jude to inspire poets to use their hands!
Good job,
C
Comment Written 22-Mar-2008
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2008
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lol on this review. Jude wrote a poem aaying that fingers should be used for fun, not counting syllables, I agreed then when I worked this poem out it fell into a ten count, I was going to put an eleven count in there and then said I tooked her advice and played, but best leave well enough alone.
I am really not a liberty to disclose names and I would end up the fool because there is a possibility that she too is married. In person, she was three completely different people. I do get the feeling that she does mess with me here and has the time of her life in doing so. At this current time I am seperated in the final process of divorce. I did manage to walk out with both my heart and soul [not much else] and I am writing to the ideal. My marriage was a hoorible situation, but I feel what I mention in my poetry is the truth and needs to be put out there.
Thank you for this review. Have a great evening. Mike
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This is in addition to my previous reply. Regardless, I do consider this person to be a friend and maybe she is responsible for my poetry exploding. Many members here are the greatest people that I have met and it means a lot too me. It's nice to have a venue for me to be who I really am and have a lot of enjoyment doing it.
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Keep doing what you're doing, Mike. It will sure to catch the right woman's eye!
I think you're a terrific poet and yes, we often write of what we've experienced; good or bad.
Hugs,
Celeste
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God, Celeste! Now you calling me a poet really means something. Thank you! The beauty of it all is that I'm not looking and I can be loosey goosey with everything. I leave the when in God's hands. Taking this trek in life has been emensely positive for me, a couple of people have considered me lost in the internet fantasy, but it is actually a vehicle that I can point people to a direction. I maintain my portfolio on this site and to my surprise, I have had a lot of people continue to check it out. I am also working on some projects such as studio quality sound. Also wether or not members are who they say they are, I have made many interesting friendships.
This drives one of my bosses crazy because I should be in a horrible state of affairs. Celeste, I really enjoy life these days. You have a great one yourself!
