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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Brooke:
you remind us of a very valuable aspect
of life in this beautiful rispetto. It
appears David's mother died the morning
after our darling Lexi was conceived; then
Lexi was born just 4 days after his mother's
birthday--I cannot believe it was mere
coincidence but rather a part of God giving
and God taking away, for whatever reason.
By the way, the day you die will be bittersweet
as those who know you will remember the many
gifts you gave but will also celebrate your
going home. love, jan
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Brooke:
you remind us of a very valuable aspect
of life in this beautiful rispetto. It
appears David's mother died the morning
after our darling Lexi was conceived; then
Lexi was born just 4 days after his mother's
birthday--I cannot believe it was mere
coincidence but rather a part of God giving
and God taking away, for whatever reason.
By the way, the day you die will be bittersweet
as those who know you will remember the many
gifts you gave but will also celebrate your
going home. love, jan
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Jan. That story is so beautiful, thank you for sharing :-) Brooke
Comment from flyboy130
This is a sweet poem you wrote. I am afraid to die because I will miss my family. Nothing is wrong with this poem. I know when you die that there is no bad fellings in Haven. The picture go's great with the poem.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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This is a sweet poem you wrote. I am afraid to die because I will miss my family. Nothing is wrong with this poem. I know when you die that there is no bad fellings in Haven. The picture go's great with the poem.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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thank you, James - We all don't want to die because we would miss our families, but you are right, then you get to Heaven and can look down on your family and still live in their hearts. Brooke
Comment from hotstuff
Although from the title, your poem could have been morbid, I found it very calming because of it's focus on life's cycle. I have always heard it said that as one life begins one ends and when my best friend died I gained great comfort a short time afterwards from the birth of my grand daughter. Somehow, I found myself both happy and sad, yet it all seemed so natural. I like your poem very much.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Although from the title, your poem could have been morbid, I found it very calming because of it's focus on life's cycle. I have always heard it said that as one life begins one ends and when my best friend died I gained great comfort a short time afterwards from the birth of my grand daughter. Somehow, I found myself both happy and sad, yet it all seemed so natural. I like your poem very much.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Hotstuff, I'm so glad this resonated with you because you've also had this experience. Thank you for sharing that with me :-) brooke
Comment from Adri7enne
To everything there is a season. I guess that's why they call it the "circle of life". It still saddens me to picture the sensitive little girl you must have been without a mother. But your terrific attitude is proof of the nurturing you received, nonetheless.
So well said, with such a clear message of flowing with life. Great stuff, Brooke. Technically, I think it's perfect, but I would expect no less from you, my friend.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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To everything there is a season. I guess that's why they call it the "circle of life". It still saddens me to picture the sensitive little girl you must have been without a mother. But your terrific attitude is proof of the nurturing you received, nonetheless.
So well said, with such a clear message of flowing with life. Great stuff, Brooke. Technically, I think it's perfect, but I would expect no less from you, my friend.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Adrienne, every day I give thanks for the love my father poured on me when my mother died. Thank you so much for your lovely comments :-) Brooke
Comment from SamanthaD.
This is one of the most touching poems I've read on this site for awhile! Even without your author's notes, I knew what you were trying to get across- and you did such a beautiful job of doing it. I read something in a book recently about a group of people who did not grieve too long because "life is tragic enough" (or something like that. It's true that life does go on. I really love your poem! Outstanding!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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This is one of the most touching poems I've read on this site for awhile! Even without your author's notes, I knew what you were trying to get across- and you did such a beautiful job of doing it. I read something in a book recently about a group of people who did not grieve too long because "life is tragic enough" (or something like that. It's true that life does go on. I really love your poem! Outstanding!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Thank you so much, Samantha. I am touched by your comments and so appreciate your most generous rating. Brooke
Comment from words
I do love how you use these classic forms and mold them to your purpose.
This particular form works so well with the cyclical nature of your message.
Outstanding.
I love the opening verse:
The day I die love's blush will bloom,
a babe will breathe his first full breath,
a lark will trill his mating tune,
and so the world will mark my death.
This would be the perfect verse to read at my funeral.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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I do love how you use these classic forms and mold them to your purpose.
This particular form works so well with the cyclical nature of your message.
Outstanding.
I love the opening verse:
The day I die love's blush will bloom,
a babe will breathe his first full breath,
a lark will trill his mating tune,
and so the world will mark my death.
This would be the perfect verse to read at my funeral.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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thank you, Diane. I wrote another poem about death a year ago that a reader read at her brother's funeral - what a fulfilling experience that was. Brooke
Comment from misscookie
The artwork is perfect for your poem. this is what I call food for thought poem three people can read the same poem ND GET SOMETHING DIFFERENT FROM IT., THATS A GOOD THING FOR YOU HAVE THE READERS ATTENTION
iLOVE THE FLOW OF THE POEM i SENSE YOUR NOT EXPRESSING ABOUT A FLOWER CYCLES BUT, IT'S YOUR INNER FEELING ABOUT LIFE. WHICH IS THE SAME. mY MOTHER WOULD SAY AT A FURNAL GOD TAKES A LIFE TO MAKE ROOM FOR A NEW.
THIS IS A GOOD WRITE
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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The artwork is perfect for your poem. this is what I call food for thought poem three people can read the same poem ND GET SOMETHING DIFFERENT FROM IT., THATS A GOOD THING FOR YOU HAVE THE READERS ATTENTION
iLOVE THE FLOW OF THE POEM i SENSE YOUR NOT EXPRESSING ABOUT A FLOWER CYCLES BUT, IT'S YOUR INNER FEELING ABOUT LIFE. WHICH IS THE SAME. mY MOTHER WOULD SAY AT A FURNAL GOD TAKES A LIFE TO MAKE ROOM FOR A NEW.
THIS IS A GOOD WRITE
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Thank you, misscookie - your mother's philosophy is mine exactly :-) Brooke
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glad to hear that, your welcome, have a nice day.
Comment from Colin Douglas
Very sad. If only she could have held on 12 more days.
My father's father died on the day of my father's first birthday.
You take the necessity of death and make it something beautiful.
Colin
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Very sad. If only she could have held on 12 more days.
My father's father died on the day of my father's first birthday.
You take the necessity of death and make it something beautiful.
Colin
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Colin - I so appreciate your kind thoughts :-) brooke
Comment from RebelRose
You are so right about this fact. One comes and on goes. It's almost as if one has to go to make room for the other. Such is the cycle of life. I enjoyed reading this and I think it is a very profound message.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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You are so right about this fact. One comes and on goes. It's almost as if one has to go to make room for the other. Such is the cycle of life. I enjoyed reading this and I think it is a very profound message.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Thank you, Rose. Your insightful comments are most appreciated :-) Brooke
Comment from Tellis
That's a tough break to lose your mother so young. I thought this poem described well the cycles of life. Keep up the great work.
Tellis
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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That's a tough break to lose your mother so young. I thought this poem described well the cycles of life. Keep up the great work.
Tellis
Comment Written 06-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2010
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Thanks so much, Tellis, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
