Cocoon
Repose and Renewal115 total reviews
Comment from Dustman6180
A nice free verse poem, amada. But, I must say, if you are wanting to stay within, well wrapped in a cocoon, you're going to have a hard time doing that on FanStory. You're going to have to come out to read your reviews. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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A nice free verse poem, amada. But, I must say, if you are wanting to stay within, well wrapped in a cocoon, you're going to have a hard time doing that on FanStory. You're going to have to come out to read your reviews. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Clever, very clever. Ant truthful too. You see, I am here reading my good reviews and feeling better already. Fanstory is the best therapy!
Comment from Soulester
Now that I'm retired, I could give you lessons on this staying within stuff, Amada. LOL It's true, though, that alone time is a necessity we sometimes ignore. Your free verse manages to convey the sentiments of the persona as she describes her bliss. Great job!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Now that I'm retired, I could give you lessons on this staying within stuff, Amada. LOL It's true, though, that alone time is a necessity we sometimes ignore. Your free verse manages to convey the sentiments of the persona as she describes her bliss. Great job!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Yes, it's s blessed refuge to be able to stay away from the crowds, and watch the parade just passing by. Your comments are so true!
Comment from L.lora
suggestion= drop "in" from your L2 and you might possibly want to change "for" to "from" in L16
Nicely done and something many
of us can relate to. Your
word choices serve you well
as your poem moves easily down the
page. Thank you for the read. Lora
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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suggestion= drop "in" from your L2 and you might possibly want to change "for" to "from" in L16
Nicely done and something many
of us can relate to. Your
word choices serve you well
as your poem moves easily down the
page. Thank you for the read. Lora
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you Llora. Your suggestions were all very well taken.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi amada...I imagine there will be many who agree with the message in your poem. I know I do. I am outgoing and love people but sometimes I just want to stay inside myself too. A good poem with a powerful message. Blessings....chey
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Hi amada...I imagine there will be many who agree with the message in your poem. I know I do. I am outgoing and love people but sometimes I just want to stay inside myself too. A good poem with a powerful message. Blessings....chey
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you chey, faithful reviewer of my work.
Comment from FredCollingwood
I like this poem and your excelelnt wording. I particularly like:
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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I like this poem and your excelelnt wording. I particularly like:
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you Fred for reading and liking this poem on solitude.
Comment from anabellapongasi
Hi Amada,
This is beautiful. And yes, the feeling is so familiar, you said it all so well. I love being in my cocoon too. I love my times of solitude and contemplation. Very nicely written.
Anabella
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Hi Amada,
This is beautiful. And yes, the feeling is so familiar, you said it all so well. I love being in my cocoon too. I love my times of solitude and contemplation. Very nicely written.
Anabella
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Thank you Anabella for this great review.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written. It is good to get away from it all and to cover yourself in a security blanket. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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This is very well written. It is good to get away from it all and to cover yourself in a security blanket. This is very well written.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2010
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Thank you c_lucas!
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You're welcome, Amada. Charlie
Comment from EdwardVal
This piece was very introspective and I enjoyed the feelings you present. I do think you could work on formatting some because the way it looks right now it seems broken. Take Care.
Edward Val
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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This piece was very introspective and I enjoyed the feelings you present. I do think you could work on formatting some because the way it looks right now it seems broken. Take Care.
Edward Val
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Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you EdwardVal for reading this work.
Comment from skye
Being cocooned inside oneself is the ideal position. Your
poem says this perfectly, with imaginative and creative lines.
I loved it.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Being cocooned inside oneself is the ideal position. Your
poem says this perfectly, with imaginative and creative lines.
I loved it.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you skye for rading and reviewing this work.
Comment from ArtGal
This is such a great poem! I think we all feel like this at times. I love your wording but especially:
Closed
for wantings
and needs.
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock.
This is wonderful writing and I enjoyed reading it. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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This is such a great poem! I think we all feel like this at times. I love your wording but especially:
Closed
for wantings
and needs.
Time to honor
the complex
simplicity
of my inner clock.
This is wonderful writing and I enjoyed reading it. . .Sharon
Comment Written 09-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2010
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Thank you Sharond for reading and reviewing this work.
