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Comment from Joy Graham
I didn't know much about the praying mantis, so appreciate your author notes to fill me in. They are just like the black widow spider. I believe they do the same thing?
I think you did a fine job of your haiku. I'm no expert at writing them. I just enjoy reading them. I love a good aha moment.
It's like she prays, then has sex before dinner. kind of like eating dessert first. I'm glad we humans don't eat our mates.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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I didn't know much about the praying mantis, so appreciate your author notes to fill me in. They are just like the black widow spider. I believe they do the same thing?
I think you did a fine job of your haiku. I'm no expert at writing them. I just enjoy reading them. I love a good aha moment.
It's like she prays, then has sex before dinner. kind of like eating dessert first. I'm glad we humans don't eat our mates.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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LOL love your comments, Joy. I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, and thank you for your kind review and response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Karyn
I love that satori line, "sex and dinner". Actually, I'd emphasize "and", as "AND".
That gave you the extra star. The animal kingdom is gruesome, eh? But we all know that women are ruthless, as well as the stronger sex!
I count 4-7-4 syllables in this haiku.
Hey, God answers prayers!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Hi Karyn
I love that satori line, "sex and dinner". Actually, I'd emphasize "and", as "AND".
That gave you the extra star. The animal kingdom is gruesome, eh? But we all know that women are ruthless, as well as the stronger sex!
I count 4-7-4 syllables in this haiku.
Hey, God answers prayers!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Thanks so much, Kimbob, for your awesome review, generous rating, and kind comments for my mantis poem. I'm pleased you enjoyed the satori, and God does answer prayers. LOL I wonder if the males have any clue what will happen after sex. Well, at least they go out happy. LOL
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from rjuselius
this is a fine piece of poetry dear indy with a nice humorous twist. as we go from dinner to sex, the praying mantis does vice versa. haha.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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this is a fine piece of poetry dear indy with a nice humorous twist. as we go from dinner to sex, the praying mantis does vice versa. haha.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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I'm delighted you liked the twist in the satori, Rebekah. I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, and thank you for your kind review and response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is an excellent haiku and I get and all too vivid orgy, smorg from your very creative first two lines. Your satori, "sex and dinner" and in that order is really the way of the preying mantis. I wonder if scientists have every figured out why they do this. I mean, it is black widow spider behaviour is it not?
And not to mention, you selected a fantastic photo, she looks most triumphant after her rendezvous and meal.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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This is an excellent haiku and I get and all too vivid orgy, smorg from your very creative first two lines. Your satori, "sex and dinner" and in that order is really the way of the preying mantis. I wonder if scientists have every figured out why they do this. I mean, it is black widow spider behaviour is it not?
And not to mention, you selected a fantastic photo, she looks most triumphant after her rendezvous and meal.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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LOL love your comments, Lu, and I was thrilled to find that awesome photo. I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, and thank you for your kind review and response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Spitfire
All I can say is that the male mantis must be a lousy lover. Good use of alliteration with 'mantis mates' and 'devours, dinner'.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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All I can say is that the male mantis must be a lousy lover. Good use of alliteration with 'mantis mates' and 'devours, dinner'.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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LOL love your comments, Shari. Maybe he's an excellent lover and she doesn't want to share him. I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, and thank you for your kind review and response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from jmdg1954
Wow. I'm glad not to be born a male praying mantis...
I always enjoy your haiku writing. Heck! I enjoy all your writing.
Well done as usual, chomp chomp!!
John
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Wow. I'm glad not to be born a male praying mantis...
I always enjoy your haiku writing. Heck! I enjoy all your writing.
Well done as usual, chomp chomp!!
John
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Hello John! It's great to hear from you and thanks so much for your review and great comments. I hope all is well with you and your family. Pitchers and catchers ...woo hoo! Go Cubs! Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Rhonni
This is an informative haiku and gives the reader quite a jolt if they didn't know this. I love your last line, sums it all up, lol!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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This is an informative haiku and gives the reader quite a jolt if they didn't know this. I love your last line, sums it all up, lol!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, Rhonni, and thank you for your kind review and response. Thanks for mentioning you liked the last line.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from starkat
Hello Insect Indy - That praying mantis in the picture seems really happy, a kind of holy roller dance, waving her arms in the air. She has amazing footwork and should consider entering the 'Insects Got Talent' show. 'sex and dinner' is a wonderful satori to enlighten us. She got both, and her partner paid the tab. Hopefully, before her partner realized what was happening, he screamed out to others to stay away or they might become dessert. But her partner was probably dumb as a box of ants and thought the rest of his life would be a picnic.
Praying Mantis was a mascot for the KC Royals for awhile, and ultimately ended up in the KC Zoo looking for sex and dinner. Excellent job with this haiku. Enjoyed it, except the part where she chomped off my head.
An extra star for the amazing artwork and presentation.
Cheers ... ;o) Devoured Kat
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Hello Insect Indy - That praying mantis in the picture seems really happy, a kind of holy roller dance, waving her arms in the air. She has amazing footwork and should consider entering the 'Insects Got Talent' show. 'sex and dinner' is a wonderful satori to enlighten us. She got both, and her partner paid the tab. Hopefully, before her partner realized what was happening, he screamed out to others to stay away or they might become dessert. But her partner was probably dumb as a box of ants and thought the rest of his life would be a picnic.
Praying Mantis was a mascot for the KC Royals for awhile, and ultimately ended up in the KC Zoo looking for sex and dinner. Excellent job with this haiku. Enjoyed it, except the part where she chomped off my head.
An extra star for the amazing artwork and presentation.
Cheers ... ;o) Devoured Kat
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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LOL love your comments, DevouredKat. I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, and thank you for your great review, generous rating, and very kind response. Don't you just love the,look of victory in the mantis photo? I was happy to find it.
Smiles,
InsectIndy :-)
Comment from mermaids
Yeah... that is what this beautiful bug does. She eats and kills. Excellent haiku that captures the life of the praying mantis. They are beautiful though, I have a poem about them in my portfolio.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Yeah... that is what this beautiful bug does. She eats and kills. Excellent haiku that captures the life of the praying mantis. They are beautiful though, I have a poem about them in my portfolio.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, mermaids, and thank you for your kind review and response. Thanks so much!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello IndianaIrish, Your poem made me laugh. Very good, especially:
mates then devours her partner
(Bingo ... a lot of problems would be solved - prevented)
A fun poem. Delicious thinking! Big-teeth smile.
Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Hello IndianaIrish, Your poem made me laugh. Very good, especially:
mates then devours her partner
(Bingo ... a lot of problems would be solved - prevented)
A fun poem. Delicious thinking! Big-teeth smile.
Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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LOL love your comments, LateBloomer. I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, and thank you for your kind review and response. Your laugh is the best compliment I could receive.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)