Smell Of Blood
hung over3 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
Within our lives we can have
stability within life
unfortunately many
die on some days
What for we ask
Honeytree
Within our lives we can have
stability within life
unfortunately many
die on some days
What for we ask
Honeytree
Comment Written 28-Apr-2016
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a strong, emotional work with much promise in its construction - reading it aloud several times will help in smoothing the rhyme and rhythm of this exciting poem - taking advantage of "poetic license" is more than acceptable it's expected...
In my opinion, a strong, emotional work with much promise in its construction - reading it aloud several times will help in smoothing the rhyme and rhythm of this exciting poem - taking advantage of "poetic license" is more than acceptable it's expected...
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
Comment from LisaD123
This is a very powerful and deeply evocative poem. The ideas are eloquently expressed and the reader can empathise with the situation portrayed. The rhyme helps to guide the reader on how the poem should be read and it also gives the poem as sense of pace and anxiety. The use of onomatopoeia and the carefully chosen vocabulary make this an interesting aural experience for the reader, too. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
This is a very powerful and deeply evocative poem. The ideas are eloquently expressed and the reader can empathise with the situation portrayed. The rhyme helps to guide the reader on how the poem should be read and it also gives the poem as sense of pace and anxiety. The use of onomatopoeia and the carefully chosen vocabulary make this an interesting aural experience for the reader, too. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2016
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You have added a smile to my day, thank you for stopping, your understanding of the structure is something I seldom find, thank you once again, Walt