General Non-Fiction posted November 12, 2017


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I will write my first ever script.

This ad annoys both of us.

by robina1978

The author has placed a warning on this post for language.

SCENE ONE
I open the door to see who is there.
It's Stella with a lot of bikes.
We each say our hellos
Then I ask: 'Why are you here?'
She hesitated a bit: 'I am Stella with my bikes.'

SCENE TWO-behind our flats.
I asked Stella:'What stinks here?'
Stella answers: 'Nothing at all.'
We walk together along the bikes.
Now I know: 'It's pig shit, cow poop.'
The bikes look so dirty
It's inconceivable to believe
she sells these to anybody.

SCENE THREE
Stella told me, that she followed up,
a phone call I made once to her office.
Stella explains, that she takes bikes
to any interested person.
But I had not shown any interest.
I had just asked about a deal, she had ages ago
But that deal was kind of con,
it did not exist the way I understood.
More expensive than any bike I'd ever bought.

So I bought my scoot mobile,
much, MUCH CHEAPER.
It serves my purpose, walking our doggy.
Stick this one up your ARSE
What the heck: 'Why are you conning us oldies?'

I RECKON your only INTEREST is MONEY
MONEY, MONEY, MONEY

Feel ashamed you wicked sales con
cheating BITCH.

Do NEVER come back.
SHIT yourself some other place
We OLDIES here will kick you out
with high heels and STICKS.


Rewrite That Ad! contest entry

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Many thanks to me for pinching this photo of the Stella site.
Thanks for the tips for correcting this a bit. Varying tenses I always tend to do, know I should not.


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