Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted November 6, 2017


Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Potlatch - 4 November 2017 Burns Stanza

The Fireworks on New Year's Eve

by Sandra du Plessis


The fireworks launched on New Year's Eve
made birds destroy their nests and leave,
the bangs brought fear and made them grieve
on New Year's day
a true story you should believe,
they could not stay.

Against the law, no one takes care
the culprits like to see the scare;
for pets, it's too much noise to bear,
we keep them safe
each year the same ones take the dare
and think they're brave.


 


Recognized


Potlatch Topic - Fireworks

Our cat had a seizure last night while sleeping next to my daughter on the coach, although she seems alright after the fit, this cat's eyes remind me of her eyes when she came back.

Burns Stanza or Standard Habbie

This week we will look at the Burns Stanza. This is named after Scotland's national poet Robert Burns (1759-1796). The form already existed before he made it his own; its old name was standard Habbie, after Habbie Simpson (1550-1620), the Piper of Kilbarchan, its earliest known exponent. This form is also sometimes known as the Scottish stanza or the six-line stave. Stanzas have 6 lines rhyming aaabab, the a lines are written in iambic tetrameter having four feet of two syllables each and the b lines are written in iambic dimeter with two feet of two syllables each, but see the notes below each poem re. feminine rhyme. In this form the first three lines rhyme and the fifth. The fourth and sixth lines become the second rhyming pair. The pattern with upper case letters denoting stressed syllables is thus....

x X x X x X x A
x X x X x X x A
x X x X x X x A
x X x B
x X x X x X x A
x X x B

The Fire Brigade
by Bob Newman

Their uniforms are so divine,
A shiver tingles up my spine!
I swear I never saw so fine
A band of men.
Their mission: let nothing combine
With oxygen.

My heroes! For although each knows
The perils, through the fire he goes
Armed only with a rubber hose
With which he aims
His stream at all the reddest glows
To douse the flames.

Such gallantry! And yet he spurns
The prize his courage surely earns.
My ardour for his brave heart burns
And won't extinguish.
I serenade him �?�¡ la Burns
(Although in English).

This follows the description above closely except in the final stanza lines 4 and 6 which have feminine endings, an extra, unstressed syllable on the end of the line. This is not shown in the schemata. To a Mouse on Turning up her Nest With a Plough.
by Robert Burns

Wee sleekit, cow'rin, tim'rous beastie,
O, what a panic's in thy breastie!
Thou need na start awa sae hasty,
Wi bick'ring brattle!
I wad be laith to rin an chase thee,
Wi murd?ring pattle!

I'm truly sorry man's dominion
Has broken Nature's social union,
An justifies that ill opinion,
Which makes thee startle
At me, thy poor, earth-born companion.
An fellow mortal!



This is Burns' famous poem in which every line has a feminine ending.

Image courtesy of Google images free downloads


Submission for the Poetry Potlatch 10-18-2017 event in the "POTLATCH POETRY".  Locate a writing club. Pays one point and 2 member cents.


Save to Bookcase Promote This Share or Bookmark
Print It View Reviews

You need to login or register to write reviews. It's quick! We only ask four questions to new members.


© Copyright 2017. Sandra du Plessis All rights reserved. Registered copyright with FanStory.
Sandra du Plessis has granted FanStory.com, its affiliates and its syndicates non-exclusive rights to display this work.