Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted April 2, 2016


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When the Wind Leaves

by michaelcahill


When the Wind Leaves
                                                       by michael cahill
 

the words have been passed forth
from the beginning
they float on the sacred wind
we merely reach up to grasp them
 
for a moment
 
off they go
invisible
their destination unknown
 
still they return
with their stories
and one day, son
your story
was to be carried with
 
                                the others
 
but we who were many
are now few
the wind has not returned
for many cycles
 
the stories grow dim
         and we strain to recall
 
even she who bore me
is but a ripple blowing a dead leaf
from a shedding branch
                once there was green

green
I could never
teach you
 
                the river is dry
                the roar of life
                                dimly recalled
 
the blue is only in your eyes now, son
it is all that remains of the sky
 
the wind, you see, grew weary
of us
and left with our memories
 
it won’t be returning for
you or me
 
where it went
        we never knew

                      and we’ll never know


 

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This week's topic: Myth of the Wind

Free Verse
Minimum of 100 words

Pretend you are a member of a primitive tribe at some point in the past. Your people have beliefs and traditions very different from those of other societies around the world. All we want to know is what wind means to you. Give some reasons or examples, as you talk about this invisible yet powerful force of nature.

Suggestions (none required, just ideas to get you started):

In your society, is wind worshipped? Feared?
Does wind have a spirit? A name?
What does it bring to your people?
What stories do you have about its effects?
What myths do you have about its origin?

Please do NOT use myths of known societies, such as Incas, Native Americans, remote tribes of Borneo, etc. Invent your own, and only as regards wind.





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