I Need You, Lance!

by Jim Wile

    Been over a month since hearing from Lance.
    He’s given my novel the boot.
    I guess that, for him, it’s lost its appeal.
    It must be he can’t give a hoot.

    I think it’s because it lacks any cats.
    No babies and hardly a word
    of flowers and old people’s problems, you know.
    No mention of beautiful birds.

    I miss his critiques, ‘cause clearly he speaks
    from the heart, and he doesn’t mince words.
    They'll sure let you know if your story just sucks.
    They’re couched in a way that’s not blurred.

           lancellot, oh lancellot,
           my story won’t advance a lot.
           I just cannot enhance a lot
           until you voice your stance a lot.

    I miss you dear Lance, and won’t you, perchance,
    come rip me a new one, I beg!
    Your honesty’s missing. I’m needing some dissing,
    so, come take me down a few pegs.

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I haven't heard from lancellot in about a month. He was a regular follower of my novel and even gave me a few 6s, but alas, no more. I don't usually beg for readers, but his reviews (as well as Jay Squires') always make me question the fundamentals of my stories, and they become better for it.

So, Lance, if you're listening, please come back. I'm a glutton for punishment. I'll even include a cat if that's what it will take to get you back!

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Sometimes I need a good kick in the pants.

I Need You, Lance!

by Jim Wile

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