General Poetry posted January 19, 2008


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Gold tarnishes? An analogy.

Tarnished Gold

by Mike K2

I searched for a ring
that I wanted to give you.
I was so proud to find
something so beautiful.

You said it should be
bigger and called it a bugger
saying, "You got ripped off."

We exchanged them at the altar anyway.
Immediately mine started to tarnish.

I wore mine, until I was informed,
"I am just living here..." You lived
just like you said,"... don't consider
me married to you."

When you left, I hung that ring up.
Each time I walked past it, I could
see just how tarnished it had become.

Some shine still came through, caused
by the scuffs of my labors. 

You said... 

"You will never be able to give
another woman what you gave me." 


You're right. 


"You will never have another woman
like I was."
 

You got that damn right.
"No woman, 'Will ever, even like you!'" 


I'm sorry, you are wrong.
 

The ring never left a mark on my finger;
but bruised and battered, I thought it
indelible upon my soul.

When a woman can bear to look at me...
...With every sparkling eye my way.
...Every smile.
...Warm, lilting voice or greeting
...or spends a little time with me.
...Maybe with just a little passing thought.

With every passing day that I
walk by that ring. The tarnish
wears off just a little more.


With the warmth of my soul,
 love from them and a gentle soft
 rub, that ring will once again be
 nice and shiny. With the right one,
 ready to be put back on that finger.

The marks will always remain on my soul,
but once again, with a little loving
touch, it will become a very alluring
patina from them and God
to enjoy and cherish.





This ring concept came from a discourse between Mrs Louis and myself, about her mention of Louis'. Again I joked that I may put mine up and she said that she would like to see it. In the course of my marriage, I looked at it so long and hard it is a wonder that it didn't melt off of my finger and head straight to hell. A point of agitation with me is after my seperation, many people have told me it is not time yet, to even think of a new relation. It seems to have to be an all or nothing way of life in this time, a dinner to enjoy would be great and I have been happy over the few things that did happen to me. I try to keep in touch with my soul and live life with a sense of God and events came about that made me realize that that is not true. Handled by life, we are all damaged boxes. But everything is OK if the contents escape the rough handling.

I consider this to be a true free verse poem or prose. I let the various thoughts find there own form. The thoughts also didn't want to find rhymes this time. I wanted to pace the verse as if the thoughts emanated for you. If you feel that I have used too many periods, its that time of the month. OK! lol

I decided to also used color to break the line of the thoughts using the advanced editor, which has had different effects on different computers, this required numerous edits that may not reflect in yours, the final outcome of what I had created. Please take this into account.
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