Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Football Chapter 2 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
25 total reviews
Comment from AJ McCall
Wow, I loved this chapter! How Katherine keeps bumping into Gabriel is hilarious! I can relate to most things in the story which is very cool! How you have the characters interact is wonderful. Man, I wish I could write like that. Lovely job! (P.S, my brother's name is Gabriel so I just imagine him in your story since you haven't described you him yet, lol!)
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Wow, I loved this chapter! How Katherine keeps bumping into Gabriel is hilarious! I can relate to most things in the story which is very cool! How you have the characters interact is wonderful. Man, I wish I could write like that. Lovely job! (P.S, my brother's name is Gabriel so I just imagine him in your story since you haven't described you him yet, lol!)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I appreciate the review.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Like your story....I'm glad the main character of your story got an education. You never know what happens in life. We have two teachers in our family. With the co-vid, teaching is so skeptical right now. I hope the schools stay open until 2021.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Like your story....I'm glad the main character of your story got an education. You never know what happens in life. We have two teachers in our family. With the co-vid, teaching is so skeptical right now. I hope the schools stay open until 2021.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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I'm teaching virtual right now, not good. Thank you for reading.
Comment from w.j.debi
I thought Gabriel might be the coach since he happened to be heading to football practice at just the right moment in the last chapter.
Good job working in Katherine's backstory. It felt natural for the principal and the coach to discuss it.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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I thought Gabriel might be the coach since he happened to be heading to football practice at just the right moment in the last chapter.
Good job working in Katherine's backstory. It felt natural for the principal and the coach to discuss it.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I like this story line. You did an excellent job so I didn't find a single mistake. How far ahead of writing do you think of your stories? You make the process seem so easy. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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I like this story line. You did an excellent job so I didn't find a single mistake. How far ahead of writing do you think of your stories? You make the process seem so easy. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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I have this story almost completed except the ending. I have it written in my head but not on paper. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from roof35
This very well written with no errors and I found it delightful. The picture of the school pairs perfectly. I liked the humor in your story. This is nicely done.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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This very well written with no errors and I found it delightful. The picture of the school pairs perfectly. I liked the humor in your story. This is nicely done.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouragement.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Excellent chapter in your book about a schoolteacher recently widowed who moves to town where she grew up in Texas. Sounds like a possible budding romance with the football coach. I can feel the vibes of a Hallmark movie. Bill
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Excellent chapter in your book about a schoolteacher recently widowed who moves to town where she grew up in Texas. Sounds like a possible budding romance with the football coach. I can feel the vibes of a Hallmark movie. Bill
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image and very good story, Barbara.
-It flowed well with good dialogue
and character development.
-We also learn a lot about Katherine
and her late husband.
-I like how you have the coach
and principal tell her story.
-She certainly didn't have an easy
life, and now she is branching out
on her own, beginning a teaching career.
-Enjoy your vacation and visit with your son.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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-A good image and very good story, Barbara.
-It flowed well with good dialogue
and character development.
-We also learn a lot about Katherine
and her late husband.
-I like how you have the coach
and principal tell her story.
-She certainly didn't have an easy
life, and now she is branching out
on her own, beginning a teaching career.
-Enjoy your vacation and visit with your son.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Ric Myworld
There are good and bad things about small towns, and the worst is everyone knowing everyone-else's business. But, there is a connection that sometimes makes everyone seem like one big family. Well, sorta. . . Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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There are good and bad things about small towns, and the worst is everyone knowing everyone-else's business. But, there is a connection that sometimes makes everyone seem like one big family. Well, sorta. . . Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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I grew up in a small town. I couldn't do anything wrong. Teachers had no problems holding conferences in the grocery store. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
The dialogue is always natural and your characters just unfold so naturally on the page. This is no exception. We get the personalities, little hints of senses of humor, even the inklings of romance and affection, and all the interconnected relationships and background of the main character comes off in this dialogue. You have set the stage here, and we are being drawn in to see what happens with this couple slowly beginning to feel the magnetism. estory
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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The dialogue is always natural and your characters just unfold so naturally on the page. This is no exception. We get the personalities, little hints of senses of humor, even the inklings of romance and affection, and all the interconnected relationships and background of the main character comes off in this dialogue. You have set the stage here, and we are being drawn in to see what happens with this couple slowly beginning to feel the magnetism. estory
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting chapter. I am a little surprised with all the knowledge about Katherine's entire life being passed around so casually, but perhaps that is how small towns are. No secrets.
Perfect writing. I felt like a fly on the wall.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Very interesting chapter. I am a little surprised with all the knowledge about Katherine's entire life being passed around so casually, but perhaps that is how small towns are. No secrets.
Perfect writing. I felt like a fly on the wall.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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In small towns there are zero secrets. Thank you for the kind review. I grew up in a small town.
