Debbie Makes An Impression
75-word story16 total reviews
Comment from palmart
Great anecdote! As I commented in other review: life is a spinning wheel sometimes you are up, others, down. And similar situation happened to Debbie. She was preparing her motorcycle and did not care about exterior appearance. Nice picture!
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Great anecdote! As I commented in other review: life is a spinning wheel sometimes you are up, others, down. And similar situation happened to Debbie. She was preparing her motorcycle and did not care about exterior appearance. Nice picture!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
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This is a great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
Comment from Paul Borders
Debbie Triumphed !! Sorry, I had to say that. Triumph is a brand of motorcycle. I enjoyed your entry and wondered how many other "Debbies" have ever experienced the same thing. Hope you win.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Debbie Triumphed !! Sorry, I had to say that. Triumph is a brand of motorcycle. I enjoyed your entry and wondered how many other "Debbies" have ever experienced the same thing. Hope you win.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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I have 2 motorbikes myself - a Yamaha XJR 1200 and a Kawasaki KLR650. Those British Triumphs leak oil, but I guess Debbie in the story might have been able to fix that.
Thanks for your good wishes... I've got my fingers crossed that people like my story enough to vote for it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction about the girl standing out from the rest proof to be popular with the boys when she comes to school with her restored vintage motor cycle.
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A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction about the girl standing out from the rest proof to be popular with the boys when she comes to school with her restored vintage motor cycle.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
Comment from Mia Twysted
What a way to make an impression. All those girls are going to want to be her now or be totally jelious of her now that she has all the guys attention.
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What a way to make an impression. All those girls are going to want to be her now or be totally jelious of her now that she has all the guys attention.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt.
This short story is well told and clear.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt.
This short story is well told and clear.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, good for Debbie and I found this write endearing and sweet and being interesting is not always about having a good appearance is it, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Ha ha ha, good for Debbie and I found this write endearing and sweet and being interesting is not always about having a good appearance is it, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt contest.
I love motorcycles. Your flash fiction has a good story and twist at the end. Good word count. Good luck in the contest.
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Hello anonymous
Great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt contest.
I love motorcycles. Your flash fiction has a good story and twist at the end. Good word count. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nice trick girl:) with one motorcycle you got all the boys hooked up:"But one day all the boys clustered around Debbie with rapt attention. She arrived at school on her restored vintage motorcycle.
" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Nice trick girl:) with one motorcycle you got all the boys hooked up:"But one day all the boys clustered around Debbie with rapt attention. She arrived at school on her restored vintage motorcycle.
" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Gotta really know a person... Great offering for the contest here!! ;) Best of luck at the polls! ;)
with her, due to --> with her due to
dirty and her hair --> dirty, and her hair
one day all the --> one day, all the
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Gotta really know a person... Great offering for the contest here!! ;) Best of luck at the polls! ;)
with her, due to --> with her due to
dirty and her hair --> dirty, and her hair
one day all the --> one day, all the
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
