The Search
Only the evidence is needed.13 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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This is a great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Me too thank you.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction about the search that leads to definite evidence that the accused is guilty and there is a whole refrigerator full of pieces.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction about the search that leads to definite evidence that the accused is guilty and there is a whole refrigerator full of pieces.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from palmart
Wow! What a Story! And in only 75 words! You develop tension on the reader that is released at the end (partially) as it may start another story linked with this one. I really do not want to be the rookie officer.::!
I thank you not to have a picture in this poem, but I really do not know if it was better than our imagination...
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Wow! What a Story! And in only 75 words! You develop tension on the reader that is released at the end (partially) as it may start another story linked with this one. I really do not want to be the rookie officer.::!
I thank you not to have a picture in this poem, but I really do not know if it was better than our imagination...
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Oh no! I didn't mean not to have a picture with this piece. It was storming and I had to do it all from my phone and I overlooked that. I will see about adding one.
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Not a Problem, author! I was commenting about not to place a picture -specifically- of the "finding"! I just say that as a way to intrigue even more to the reader... But it is your writing and your command is respected. Now, I remember reading your comment about the storm..
Have a good time!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt.
This grim story is well told and clear.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt.
This grim story is well told and clear.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, this kind of discovery is chilling and imagine living next to someone with this going on! Your words sent a shiver down my spine even though the detectives had their case in the bag, or in this case in the freezer! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Oh my goodness, this kind of discovery is chilling and imagine living next to someone with this going on! Your words sent a shiver down my spine even though the detectives had their case in the bag, or in this case in the freezer! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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I am glad you liked it.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt contest.
I love scary stories. Your flash fiction has a good story and twist at the end. Good word count. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hello anonymous
Great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt contest.
I love scary stories. Your flash fiction has a good story and twist at the end. Good word count. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, a horror story in 75 words this is quite an achievement. Vini, vidi, vinci:) come , see and victory you got the guilty party. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Wow, a horror story in 75 words this is quite an achievement. Vini, vidi, vinci:) come , see and victory you got the guilty party. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
EEEeeewww... A good short for the contest here - best of luck! ;)
house the police --> house, the police
closet. Peeled back --> closet, peeled back
basement Barns stood --> basement, Barns stood
him," Barns smiled, "we got --> him." Barns smiled. "We got
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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EEEeeewww... A good short for the contest here - best of luck! ;)
house the police --> house, the police
closet. Peeled back --> closet, peeled back
basement Barns stood --> basement, Barns stood
him," Barns smiled, "we got --> him." Barns smiled. "We got
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Thank you for pointing those out. It was hard typing and turning it in from my dying phone in the dark, during a storm.
Comment from oliver818
This is nicely done and creepy. I like the ending although I'm not sure about the repetition of "we got him". You have so few words to use it seems a waste to use some for repetition but that's just my opinion. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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This is nicely done and creepy. I like the ending although I'm not sure about the repetition of "we got him". You have so few words to use it seems a waste to use some for repetition but that's just my opinion. Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from humpwhistle
Well, frozen human parts sure sounds like damning evidence to me.
I can only hope the cops had a valid search warrant.
Burns sounds like jaded cop to me.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Well, frozen human parts sure sounds like damning evidence to me.
I can only hope the cops had a valid search warrant.
Burns sounds like jaded cop to me.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Yes, hen does. Thank you.
