Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

This is a great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt. I was glued to it from the beginning to the end. I hope this story does well in the contest. Good luck!

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020

I?m afraid it didn?t fair well with the readers. Thank you though for the interest.

reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 29-Sep-2020

Oh, no. So sorry.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction about the older making room for the young to live when the older one's life comes to an end.

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020

Thanks, Sandra. This one was a bit too vague for most readers to understand.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt.
This short story is well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020

Thanks, Sharon

Comment from equestrik

Excellent

This would be sweet and a nice way to influence ourselves in the next occurance of ourselves, at least that is what I took from this. A thought provoking write.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020

Thank you, equestrik

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello anonymous

Great entry for the 75 Word Story writing prompt contest.

I love angels. Your flash fiction has a good story and twist at the end. Good word count. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020

Thank you, GBR

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I wonder is this a story about de-dublation and your alter ego takes your play to live instead of you. Anyway thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020

AngelA had her chance at living a life, now Angel B will replace her.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your story held my interest. It seems like this lady decided to live. Excellent flow of story and I like the image of the angel. You created a story in few words and best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020

Thank you for giving this a look. I changed the ending to hopefully make it clearer.

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Not clear on which woman is doing / saying what and why-- e.g. which woman wonders what SHE ... ? I realize it's not easy in 75 words to clarify who's who, but I'm lost. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ

I'm delighted to see that you clarified this; fine work! I've upgraded the rating accordingly.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020

Thank you for giving this a look. I changed the ending to hopefully make it clearer.

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 27-Sep-2020

Ancient memories filled her (Angela's ?) mind; she (the woman ?) smiled and vanished. Does she, Angel B, (Angela ?) decide to walk away vs jump?

reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020

Rewrote the ending again. Take a look.

Comment from Mia Twysted

Excellent

It is hard when you are the only one of those you knew left. It makes you think lots of crazy things. That is what went through my mind as I read this piece.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020

AngelA and AngelB

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is nice. I do have one concern. Is the woman's name: Angela, Angel, or AngelB? You seem to have three different spellings of the name. It is a good ending, the woman for some reason, we are not told, choosing to live longer.

Very interesting. I wish you luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020

AngelA is standing on the parapet.
Keeping her balance while turning, she saw a young woman.
The young woman was AngelB.