Dust bowl
famine and a plague of love7 total reviews
Comment from oliver818
This is a really nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. The imagery is really powerful and evocative. I particularly like the lines starting "demarcation of", they are used to great effect. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day.
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This is a really nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. The imagery is really powerful and evocative. I particularly like the lines starting "demarcation of", they are used to great effect. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
Comment from AnnieDawn
I had a difficult time reading through this entry because of conflicting meanings in some of the sentences which I am sure have meaning for you. A description at the end of your post would help the reader to understand why and how you have written this particular post. I try to understand each one I review and there seems to be a lot of effort that has gone into this one.
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I had a difficult time reading through this entry because of conflicting meanings in some of the sentences which I am sure have meaning for you. A description at the end of your post would help the reader to understand why and how you have written this particular post. I try to understand each one I review and there seems to be a lot of effort that has gone into this one.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(dairy s/b diary; lacey s/b lacy) Vetch for thatch reap scythe and sickle--quite the tongue-twister--clever wordplay and startling imagery--masterful metaphor. Cheers. LIZ
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(dairy s/b diary; lacey s/b lacy) Vetch for thatch reap scythe and sickle--quite the tongue-twister--clever wordplay and startling imagery--masterful metaphor. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like a foreboding terrain filled with a mix of harsh extremes and touches of joy amid the backdrop of loneliness, a treacherous journey here, love Dolly x
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This sounds like a foreboding terrain filled with a mix of harsh extremes and touches of joy amid the backdrop of loneliness, a treacherous journey here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
Comment from Carlos' girl
outstanding. just one of the best poems i have seen here on this site. absolute. unflinching and flinty. dark w some light. tough with some tender. really loved it. gorgeous images beautiful words
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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outstanding. just one of the best poems i have seen here on this site. absolute. unflinching and flinty. dark w some light. tough with some tender. really loved it. gorgeous images beautiful words
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Dear Carlos' girl
I am so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Thank you and may stars shine like diamonds in your life to.
Blessings,
Sergeant
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or may diamonds shine like stars!!!
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Six stars here!
A haunting ode to loss and desolation. The crushing of hopes. The desertion of prosperity. All dreams buried under inhospitable ground, sprinkled with the grace of yarrow, grasses and forget-me-nots.
Seems to me that if one was brave enough to NOT walk away, hope would spring eternal and an oasis would emerge in this desert of death. For behind the scenes, an opportunity lurks. Waiting for a brave soul to believe, and to come for it.
Well done!
Lucy
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Six stars here!
A haunting ode to loss and desolation. The crushing of hopes. The desertion of prosperity. All dreams buried under inhospitable ground, sprinkled with the grace of yarrow, grasses and forget-me-nots.
Seems to me that if one was brave enough to NOT walk away, hope would spring eternal and an oasis would emerge in this desert of death. For behind the scenes, an opportunity lurks. Waiting for a brave soul to believe, and to come for it.
Well done!
Lucy
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
Comment from robyn corum
SF,
Whoa. I can't even begin to tell you how much I liked this poem. *smile*
I felt like I was back in high school English class, pouring over a piece of fine literature and trying to turn it every which way to let the music pour out in the right way.
This was just amazing. There were so many little parts here that gave me chills. The stark descriptions - that say so little -- and yet sooooo much. I write Flash Fiction - where each word is weighted - and you have to be so careful to choose the right one... each pace/step in a sentence... finding the clever words that will jump and do acrobatics over words that simply lie flat on the page. This is a thing I strive to master...
But it looks like you have that skill in abundant quantities.
I could read this poem ten times a day for the next month and still not extract all the juices from it. I really, really love it!
Alas, no sixes left to me - but perhaps you will accept a virtual one.
Thank you! I have been blessed!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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SF,
Whoa. I can't even begin to tell you how much I liked this poem. *smile*
I felt like I was back in high school English class, pouring over a piece of fine literature and trying to turn it every which way to let the music pour out in the right way.
This was just amazing. There were so many little parts here that gave me chills. The stark descriptions - that say so little -- and yet sooooo much. I write Flash Fiction - where each word is weighted - and you have to be so careful to choose the right one... each pace/step in a sentence... finding the clever words that will jump and do acrobatics over words that simply lie flat on the page. This is a thing I strive to master...
But it looks like you have that skill in abundant quantities.
I could read this poem ten times a day for the next month and still not extract all the juices from it. I really, really love it!
Alas, no sixes left to me - but perhaps you will accept a virtual one.
Thank you! I have been blessed!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Dear Robyn
Thank you so very much! I can tell the words you write
do not fall flat on a page. Your key words really jazzed me up.
Keep composing not composting.
Blessings in abundance,
Sergeant
