From Dawn To Day
A free verse of transition14 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker
Marjon,
Such a magical, mystical, musical poem. Birds and farmers get up at the crack of dawn, and they work neatly together in your earthy poem.
Have a wonderful week.
Hope you are well!
Cindy
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Marjon,
Such a magical, mystical, musical poem. Birds and farmers get up at the crack of dawn, and they work neatly together in your earthy poem.
Have a wonderful week.
Hope you are well!
Cindy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
Comment from Alchera
A true morning hymn to the glorious opening of dawn that expands opening its curtain to the cheerful and growing voices of nature and the morning awakening of tireless farmers towards the hope of their seasonal harvest of the day and at the same instant the voices of all living creatures gather in a momentary silence of peace and immense joy in front of this splendor of God's Glorious Creation
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A true morning hymn to the glorious opening of dawn that expands opening its curtain to the cheerful and growing voices of nature and the morning awakening of tireless farmers towards the hope of their seasonal harvest of the day and at the same instant the voices of all living creatures gather in a momentary silence of peace and immense joy in front of this splendor of God's Glorious Creation
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Marjon, before I even started to review this post I needed to lookup two (2) words. ELIDE and AlLLEGRE
Because I know a little about music, I realized that the last two words might be corruptions (or Dutch words for) musical terms.
BUT All those readers and reviewers who do not have any background in music theory, are left clueless. And completely miss out on the wonderful meanings you intended
To improve this poem Please, Please define ALL Unusual terms in author's notes. ( particularly. ELIDE )
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Dear Marjon, before I even started to review this post I needed to lookup two (2) words. ELIDE and AlLLEGRE
Because I know a little about music, I realized that the last two words might be corruptions (or Dutch words for) musical terms.
BUT All those readers and reviewers who do not have any background in music theory, are left clueless. And completely miss out on the wonderful meanings you intended
To improve this poem Please, Please define ALL Unusual terms in author's notes. ( particularly. ELIDE )
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Yes, maybe you are right. I thought that Allegre and Crescendo are two musical terms that are rather known. Allegre = joyful and Crescendo = augmenting in volume.
I meant elide in the sense of striking out. There are different definitions for that word. I'll add all of this to the author's notes.
By the way: Allegre and Crescendo are of Italian origin, not Dutch. But internationally used.
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Only in musical classical musical circles. You keep forgetting 99.98 percent of the people in the world have not had the cultural education that you enjoyed. Even very superior poets on FanStory have had NO musical background other than their local radio station.
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I will think of that the next time, Suzanna. For now, I have made an addition to the author's notes.
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Please Do!
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Did.
Comment from estory
Beautiful job with this. I liked the steady rhythm of the language, the contemplative tone. Nice little soft echoes of off rhyme in it that was subtle and effective. Loved the images. The diamond earings of the dewdrops. That was original and spectacular. Captures the preciousness of the moment. The farmers on their slow tractors tracing the plough lines on the red soil. A great sense of the husbandry and the richness of the land. Then all those bird sounds, like the sounds of life, rising into that cressendo of a symphony of emotion. estory
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Beautiful job with this. I liked the steady rhythm of the language, the contemplative tone. Nice little soft echoes of off rhyme in it that was subtle and effective. Loved the images. The diamond earings of the dewdrops. That was original and spectacular. Captures the preciousness of the moment. The farmers on their slow tractors tracing the plough lines on the red soil. A great sense of the husbandry and the richness of the land. Then all those bird sounds, like the sounds of life, rising into that cressendo of a symphony of emotion. estory
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Spectacular review, Estory, thanks so much for the six stars.!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A verywell-written poem about the dawn is the time when many people and animals start their say long before the sun shines they are already busy preparing their day.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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A verywell-written poem about the dawn is the time when many people and animals start their say long before the sun shines they are already busy preparing their day.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Sandra, true, and that makes this time of day so beautiful, so magical.
Thank you for the review!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
You woke me up! The sounds of life in the morning you give your reader both the visual and the sound of the morning wakeup.
I could "see" the night fade away and "see" the morning beginning.
Good work and good luck.
Thank you
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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You woke me up! The sounds of life in the morning you give your reader both the visual and the sound of the morning wakeup.
I could "see" the night fade away and "see" the morning beginning.
Good work and good luck.
Thank you
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2020
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Mary, thanks for the review.
Comment from royowen
I think someone once boasted of a rich internal life, and I guess that's what a true poet is. A wealth of wisdom, an ability to extend a thought to possibilities, and you certainly have that Marjon, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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I think someone once boasted of a rich internal life, and I guess that's what a true poet is. A wealth of wisdom, an ability to extend a thought to possibilities, and you certainly have that Marjon, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Roy, that is a beautiful compliment! Thanks for reviewing.
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My privilege
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Bless you!
Comment from jaded831
Your poem captured the moments beautifully, not only did you paint a picture with your words, but you created a symphony. The picture you chose added to the magic you created.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Your poem captured the moments beautifully, not only did you paint a picture with your words, but you created a symphony. The picture you chose added to the magic you created.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Oh, I am pleased you saw the poem. Thank you so much for the review!
Comment from equestrik
This is truly a magical time of day. I remember a book I read where the grandpa would climb to the top of a hill every morning and say, "She,s comin' alive", I kind of adopted that idea.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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This is truly a magical time of day. I remember a book I read where the grandpa would climb to the top of a hill every morning and say, "She,s comin' alive", I kind of adopted that idea.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thanks a lot for your review! And I understand your grandpa.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a great word picture of the new day coming to life. When I first started reading the first lines made me thing you were going the rhyming route. I like the way you compare activities of the day to music. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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This is a great word picture of the new day coming to life. When I first started reading the first lines made me thing you were going the rhyming route. I like the way you compare activities of the day to music. Nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2020
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Thanks, Beth, for the review.
