What to Believe
It did matter, and now it doesn't. Maybe.13 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
You used the repetition of "why did I believe you?" to really show how much the narrator questioned herself about why she tolerated this mistreatment so much. Hope you do well in the contest. And if this is biographical - hope this person gets out of a dangerous relationship.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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You used the repetition of "why did I believe you?" to really show how much the narrator questioned herself about why she tolerated this mistreatment so much. Hope you do well in the contest. And if this is biographical - hope this person gets out of a dangerous relationship.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
It's autobiographical to a certain extent... being alone is better than enduring abuse.
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Agreed! Glad you are out of that relationship. 💖
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your poem serves as a strong cautionary tle. There will be many readers who can identify with how the speaker's situation. If they could. they would give support telling the victim things will get better. It will mean taking care of themselves. That is very difficult when we don't even have any idea of who we are, what we need, like, dislike. This is a valuable topic. Thank you.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Your poem serves as a strong cautionary tle. There will be many readers who can identify with how the speaker's situation. If they could. they would give support telling the victim things will get better. It will mean taking care of themselves. That is very difficult when we don't even have any idea of who we are, what we need, like, dislike. This is a valuable topic. Thank you.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your review. It's always a difficult situation giving advice to people who are caught up in bad relationships.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an interesting entry for the Repetition Poem writing prompt. Not only does it encompass the three repetitions required by the prompt, it also provides several variations where the subject is changed. This gives a rich, deep melting pot of a poem.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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This is an interesting entry for the Repetition Poem writing prompt. Not only does it encompass the three repetitions required by the prompt, it also provides several variations where the subject is changed. This gives a rich, deep melting pot of a poem.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your warm response to my poem.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the Repetition Poem writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of repeating a line three times or more.
Your topic of battered woman is sad but it happens a lot.. well done.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the Repetition Poem writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of repeating a line three times or more.
Your topic of battered woman is sad but it happens a lot.. well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Repetition Poem writing prompt. You used very good heartfelt words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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This is a very well written poem you have penned for the Repetition Poem writing prompt. You used very good heartfelt words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 07-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a subtle and emotion write about domestic abuse and when we label our love with abuse it gives it a completely different tone, when the trust turns to terror, it is time to leave, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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This is a subtle and emotion write about domestic abuse and when we label our love with abuse it gives it a completely different tone, when the trust turns to terror, it is time to leave, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Departure is certainly the best solution for an abusive relationship.
Thanks for your review.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Author,
You've succeeded in this contest. Your repetition is quite effective... "why did I believe you?" ... morphing to "why did you believe me?", "Do you believe yourself?", "Do you believe me?", and finally "I don't know what to believe."
This is the tale of a relationship spiraling out of control. The woman is at her wit's end... coping, hoping, groping.
This woman needs her family and friends.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Hi Mystery Author,
You've succeeded in this contest. Your repetition is quite effective... "why did I believe you?" ... morphing to "why did you believe me?", "Do you believe yourself?", "Do you believe me?", and finally "I don't know what to believe."
This is the tale of a relationship spiraling out of control. The woman is at her wit's end... coping, hoping, groping.
This woman needs her family and friends.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thanks for your comment regarding this poem. It is certainly a doomed relationship.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a sad poem about and abusive relationship. It shows all the things people believe when they shouldn't and also things they believe and don't act on. This woman needs to leave this relationship. Then she can truly learn to care about herself and someone else.
Good luck in the prompt contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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This is a sad poem about and abusive relationship. It shows all the things people believe when they shouldn't and also things they believe and don't act on. This woman needs to leave this relationship. Then she can truly learn to care about herself and someone else.
Good luck in the prompt contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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I was trying to show how confusing it can become in an abusive relationship. Thanks for understanding that.
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You're welcome.
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Comment from Eternal Muse
It's hard to lose trust. You believe and believe and at some point trust dies. And it doesn't matter anymore, as you said. A wonderful rendition of the repetition contest, with wonderful descriptive imagery and visuals. I enjoyed your artistic presentation and artwork.
This should do very well in the contest good luck in the booths.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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It's hard to lose trust. You believe and believe and at some point trust dies. And it doesn't matter anymore, as you said. A wonderful rendition of the repetition contest, with wonderful descriptive imagery and visuals. I enjoyed your artistic presentation and artwork.
This should do very well in the contest good luck in the booths.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much for such a positive review.
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Really excellent commentary on a very unhealthy relationship with someone who ought to be in jail! I like the repetition you used "why did I believe you" etc. The idea of believing something that is untrue because we want to believe it is a good subject for people to talk about, but many people avoid facing it. You wrote an excellent poem that, hopefully, will open some eyes about abuse.
Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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Really excellent commentary on a very unhealthy relationship with someone who ought to be in jail! I like the repetition you used "why did I believe you" etc. The idea of believing something that is untrue because we want to believe it is a good subject for people to talk about, but many people avoid facing it. You wrote an excellent poem that, hopefully, will open some eyes about abuse.
Well done!
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
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I appreciate your thoughtful review. So many damaging things are hidden and should be talked about in the open to remedy the situation.
