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Jealousy

An Acrostic- Loop Poem

33 total reviews 
Comment from Susan X Smith
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I like this Acrostic, and I am unsure if the repetition of the last word in each line to form the first word in the next is a specific technique or something that you though of yourself. I love the green print, which well fits this emotion.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you Susan, it is the "Loop" poem that requires the last word of one line to start the next, I just challenged myself to combine both "An Acrostic-Loop Poem" many thanks, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Raul1
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Congratulations on winning the One Word: Jealousy competition! Much deserved! Exceptional work! No grammatical errors. I like it. Thanks for sharing! Very good poem.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you Raul1, if I am correct I voted for "the best" a wonderful description of jealousy, also congratulations on your placing, I think it was a winner****kahpot
reply by Raul1 on 27-Aug-2020
    You're welcome. Thank you for voting for me. You have made my day! Thank you, my friend! :)
Comment from crzypnter
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I think you did a wonderful job with your Acrostic loop poem. Jealousy is a emotion that runs the gambit, from love to possessions to even writing. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing. God bless
August

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your exceptional comments and review, yes jealousy is a terrible thing it can just take over, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from ameen786
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Hello kahpot and congratulations! First, regrets for not having a six; you penned a perfect Acrostic meeting the contest challenge, above and beyond.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your wonderful review and comments, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lightink
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That was an awesome entry! I missed the voting, but I'm glad I got to see the skillfully penned piece!
You made it's so smooth that I didn't notice the 'loop' part until half way through, which means you weren't 'fighting' the form, but smoothly dancing with it!

The imagery is vivid and you took the metaphors far..creating depth and a very thought provoking poem.

I love how you used the idea of 'etching' to show how it tears into the fabric/foundatiin of love!

Very well done!
Congrats again!
Well deserved!

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your excellent and encouraging comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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Congratulations on your first place win. Your picture and words are a great match. This style has become one of your signature styles. Your work adheres to the complex rules and flows smoothly with a true message. The color scheme is a great choice, too.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you Jan, yes I seem to like this style, when I first started them the feedback and help I received was enormous, as always your comments are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from papa55mike
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No, once you start walking down that path, it's hard to turn around. What a wonderfully written poem.

Good luck in the contest!

Have a great day and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you Mike, for your wonderful review and comments, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Mastery
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Hello Author. You have created a serious side to Jealousy, for sure. but I am not sure there is any other way, is there? I liked this line in particular:

"Yield is no option from the depths of Jealousy."
Good job and good luck with it. Bob

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much
reply by Mastery on 27-Aug-2020
    :) Bob
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Well, you have certainly put a lot into this contest entry, an acrostic and a loop poem! Jealousy is one of those emotions that destroy whole families if allowed to continue. Your poem describes it perfectly, very well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much
Comment from Aussie
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Jealousy, a dish best served cold? Heard it somewhere. Well, jealousy has a sound too, like nails scraped across a blackboard. Unbearable. You have covered the subject well.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you very much