I'm a Big Boy now
A boys troubles19 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
I'm a big kid, now! LOL reminds me of the commercial where he can pull up his pul-ups so he's a big kid. It's interesting thinking what a little kid thinks of like Santa Claus or about being bad and good. I like what he thinks about his sister, the little princess who gets taken care of the minute she starts crying. But, when he screams, his mother tells him he's a big boy and can wait. Cute story! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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I'm a big kid, now! LOL reminds me of the commercial where he can pull up his pul-ups so he's a big kid. It's interesting thinking what a little kid thinks of like Santa Claus or about being bad and good. I like what he thinks about his sister, the little princess who gets taken care of the minute she starts crying. But, when he screams, his mother tells him he's a big boy and can wait. Cute story! Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
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You're welcome~
Comment from papa55mike
Yes, you are a big boy now. What a wonderfully written story and I love the child's POV.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Yes, you are a big boy now. What a wonderfully written story and I love the child's POV.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 27-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
Comment from equestrik
Well, It was a good write and a really good bit of thinking from a young boy's point of view on having a new baby sister. The end was upsetting I must say and am not sure how a little one would be able to put himself into a working washer-anyway...not a story for children.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Well, It was a good write and a really good bit of thinking from a young boy's point of view on having a new baby sister. The end was upsetting I must say and am not sure how a little one would be able to put himself into a working washer-anyway...not a story for children.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt story about the little boy who seems to struggle with all the things the grown ups are talking about him and his behaviour when he becomes a big boy and his little sister gets all the attention.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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A very well-written heartfelt story about the little boy who seems to struggle with all the things the grown ups are talking about him and his behaviour when he becomes a big boy and his little sister gets all the attention.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
Comment from Ayan3
That was an amazing story and I hope you can write more stories and I also could not stop reading it and I hope you get the recognition you need for this story.
Sincerely, Ayan
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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That was an amazing story and I hope you can write more stories and I also could not stop reading it and I hope you get the recognition you need for this story.
Sincerely, Ayan
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Hi Ayan:)Thank you so much for your kind review:)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(Typos: boys troubles s/b boy's; they'll call me a B Y s/b B A B Y) The narrator sounds credible as a child--disturbing twist at the end--not clear on why/when the SS came into the scene. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ
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(Typos: boys troubles s/b boy's; they'll call me a B Y s/b B A B Y) The narrator sounds credible as a child--disturbing twist at the end--not clear on why/when the SS came into the scene. Good luck. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
Comment from RShipp
'but I can feed them to the dog anymore' Maybe you meant 'can't' in the boy's ramblings?
'She is all wriggles and is full of... oh no, I can't say that word, it's a bad word.' Cute
'I am only three years old, but mom says I am a Big Boy now. I think she needs glasses; I am the smallest kid in my group at daycare.' This line is GREAT!!!
Wow!! The ending was not the funny one I wanted.
Good luck in the 'From a child's point of view' contest.
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'but I can feed them to the dog anymore' Maybe you meant 'can't' in the boy's ramblings?
'She is all wriggles and is full of... oh no, I can't say that word, it's a bad word.' Cute
'I am only three years old, but mom says I am a Big Boy now. I think she needs glasses; I am the smallest kid in my group at daycare.' This line is GREAT!!!
Wow!! The ending was not the funny one I wanted.
Good luck in the 'From a child's point of view' contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
Comment from Earl Corp
That was quite the twist at the end. I didn't see that coming at all. I have to say for me personally I wasn't impressed with the green cursive font, it was hard to read. Good luck in the contest.
I'm surprised that a kid would use the word "injections."
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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That was quite the twist at the end. I didn't see that coming at all. I have to say for me personally I wasn't impressed with the green cursive font, it was hard to read. Good luck in the contest.
I'm surprised that a kid would use the word "injections."
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)How jection sounds?
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I understood the POV of the big boy. Your lines flow smoothly with good imagery. The ending is a little abrupt that the police and SS arrived with little explanation (maybe the boy didn't know why and that's all he could think to say).
May I suggest:
but I can (can't) feed them to the dog anymore, 'cause God sees me, and I want to be his Little Angel.
I believe another word could be used of 'injections;, too. A 3 year old would not know that word.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I understood the POV of the big boy. Your lines flow smoothly with good imagery. The ending is a little abrupt that the police and SS arrived with little explanation (maybe the boy didn't know why and that's all he could think to say).
May I suggest:
but I can (can't) feed them to the dog anymore, 'cause God sees me, and I want to be his Little Angel.
I believe another word could be used of 'injections;, too. A 3 year old would not know that word.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
