Comment from Susan X Smith

Excellent

This philosophical essay has a lot of truth to it. Unfortunately, discrimination is often unconscious. I enjoyed reading this piece. However, it reads more like an essay, rather than a true story, which, I expect, would have more biographical details.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020

Thank you for the Time to Read, Rate and Review this offering. Discrimination is a difficult thing to understand and comprehend (of any type) for most people as it S/B, I for example would never feel the (Womens) Gender type, yet seen it and am aware or attuned to it as a previous manger of various employees. This is another piece that I try, to gage the interest and understanding of the Great Spirit of Diversity here on Fanstory, Thanks again, Blessings.

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

Not that it matters, but this reads as a freestyle poem, not a story as outlined in the contest notification. I noticed some errors:
1. Preceived should be perceived.
2. shouldnt misperception be misconception?
3. Should thee be the?
4. Should Societies be Society's?
5. Shouldn't its be it's?
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020

Thank you Sir,
1, I'll make the correction
2. It depends on context , I believe Precieved notes the evelation as opposed to a plan to proceed with it.
3. A Little old English emphasis, LOL,
4. My context relates to or
Includes previous societies- Maya, Roman, Egyptian ect...
5. I'll revisit.
Sir Thank you for Your Highly Valued Assistance on this one.
I guess more of a ranting worry.
Blessings to you.