The Ultimate Price
The soldier's wives also go through a living hell...35 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
So sorry to have missed this, dear Bill. I'm delighted to see your writing recognized with a first place ribbon. I've been sick (kidney infection) and injured, but still writing with my eyes barely functional. Still overcoming one day at a time. Bless you and congratulations.
Sal XOs......
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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So sorry to have missed this, dear Bill. I'm delighted to see your writing recognized with a first place ribbon. I've been sick (kidney infection) and injured, but still writing with my eyes barely functional. Still overcoming one day at a time. Bless you and congratulations.
Sal XOs......
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Thanks Sal, it's really good to hear from you. So sorry to hear about your health issues. I am basically in the same situation. All we can do is hope and pray for the best and as you said take it one day at a time.
When I went to your profile page to check on you I saw that you had a limerick posted, so I immediately brought it up and wrote you a really long review calling you by name and everything then I saved it. I didn't even notice that it was in a blind contest...LOL. So I went back in and did an edit real fast and took your name out...Hey, I must really be getting old.
I'll be praying for you, my friend. We must force ourselves to keep going and never give up until it's time to take our Heavenly flight. God bless you and your family, dear Sal...Bill
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Thank you, Bill. No worries. I was more pleased to hear from you than anything else. Thank you for checking on me. Sal XOs....
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bil (Cedar)l smiles for being the Memory contest of how
many soldier's wives go through a living hell.
The Ultimate Price is a great title for your very well written emontial prose/poem.
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Hello Bil (Cedar)l smiles for being the Memory contest of how
many soldier's wives go through a living hell.
The Ultimate Price is a great title for your very well written emontial prose/poem.
Gert
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Hello Gert,
Thank you very much for your wonderful review and rating, I appreciate it a great deal. Yes, it is a very sad poem but unfortunately it is true.
Have a blessed day my friend and take care of yourself...Bill
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You are welcome Cedar
Gert
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Ultimate Price", is an extremely well-written and heart-breaking piece. This talented poet's work brought tears to my eyes. To have loved and lost in this way, must be truly unbearable. This is definitely a six.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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"The Ultimate Price", is an extremely well-written and heart-breaking piece. This talented poet's work brought tears to my eyes. To have loved and lost in this way, must be truly unbearable. This is definitely a six.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Hello Duchess,
Thank you for your wonderful review and rating, I appreciate it very much. Yes, this is truly a sad situation, however according to the historians it has happened many times throughout all the wars.
How have you been lately? It's good to hear from you...Bill
Hello Bill.
I'm fine and hope you're the same.
God bless, take care and keep safe,
the Duchess
Comment from Ben1
Holy crap! This some depressing stuff I did not expect to find on FanStory. It seemed like a depressing roller coaster that keeps going down. I really liked it though. The way you set everything up and make me think there's a happy ending. We do need to give recognition to fallen vets and their family members left home. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Holy crap! This some depressing stuff I did not expect to find on FanStory. It seemed like a depressing roller coaster that keeps going down. I really liked it though. The way you set everything up and make me think there's a happy ending. We do need to give recognition to fallen vets and their family members left home. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Hello Ben,
Thank you for your exceptional rating and review, I appreciate it very much. I'm glad it got your attention because my goal was to capture the readers attention and it certainly did. This is a serious situation that the public never hears about.
Have a great weekend my friend...Bill
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Your poem brought chills to my body, and tears to my eyes. I really felt Mary's pain and desperation. Yes, when a soldier is killed in action, the family also suffers grievous wounds.
Should "Marine" be capitalized?
One doesn't often hear about suicide among family members of the military killed in action -- I suppose they don't want to advertise it -- but it must happen, more than we know.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Your poem brought chills to my body, and tears to my eyes. I really felt Mary's pain and desperation. Yes, when a soldier is killed in action, the family also suffers grievous wounds.
Should "Marine" be capitalized?
One doesn't often hear about suicide among family members of the military killed in action -- I suppose they don't want to advertise it -- but it must happen, more than we know.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Hello Mary,
Thank you for your exceptional rating and review, I appreciate it very much.
Yes, this is a subject that the public never hears about that's why I decided to write about it. I'm an old Vietnam vet from the sixties and according to the historians this has happened throughout all the wars.
I have always capitalized every branch of service, regardless of which one it is. It just seems like the proper thing to do.
Have a great weekend Mary...Bill
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You're very welcome, Bill. Thank you for bringing this to my attention. I always knew that when a member of the military service is killed in action, it's hard on the family members, but this poem portrays it on a much deeper level.
The reason I asked about the capitalization of "Marines" is that "marine" isn't capitalized in your first line, so you might want to adjust that... it's such a beautiful, poignant and important poem and I'm sure more people will be reading it.
I keep thinking that this poem deserves a wider audience than the one you have here on FanStory, as supportive and enthusiastic as we are. This story (regardless of whether it's about an actual person, or representative of many others) needs to be told. And if you do, you might want to include the number for the National Suicide Prevention Hotline, just in case anyone is having thoughts like that. It's always a good idea.
As you probably realize, I was deeply touched by what you wrote.
Thank you for your service, and may God always bless you. - Mary Kay
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Thank you Mary for binging that to my attention (Marine) I don't know how I missed that. Thanks also for the suggestion about the suicide hotline, that is definitely something to think about.
I'm thankful that you enjoyed reading it. I just felt that it was a subject that needed to be put into words. I believe that people pay more attention to the things that they read over the things they listen to.
Have a great weekend and stay safe from the virus. May God bless you and yours...Bill
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Thank you so much, Bill, for your open-hearted reply. You stay safe, too. Blessings! - Mary Kay
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For whenever you want to make use of it (especially if you're writing to a wider audience), the National Suicide Prevention Lifeline is 1-800-273-8255.
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Thank you Mary Kay. Have a blessed Sunday. Bill
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You're welcome, I did :-)
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was scary. This gave me goosebumps. I guess, some can't deal with the pain of losing their loved ones and decide to join them sooner. It's still a mortal sin to commit suicide - God gave us this life, he is the one that decide when we go.
Extremely moving and powerful, congrats on a very deserved win.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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This was scary. This gave me goosebumps. I guess, some can't deal with the pain of losing their loved ones and decide to join them sooner. It's still a mortal sin to commit suicide - God gave us this life, he is the one that decide when we go.
Extremely moving and powerful, congrats on a very deserved win.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your excellent review, I appreciate it very much.I suppose when someone has constant heartache to the point they can't eat or sleep they will do about anything to get rid of that suffering.
Thanks again...Bill
Comment from Jacob David Collins
This is a heartbreaking piece of writing. It's true, losing a loved one in war can be devastating but what is more devastating is the effects it can have on the wider family. I thought this was really well written.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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This is a heartbreaking piece of writing. It's true, losing a loved one in war can be devastating but what is more devastating is the effects it can have on the wider family. I thought this was really well written.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thank you Jacob for your excellent review, I appreciate it. I'm also very pleased that you enjoyed it.
Have a great weekend my friend. Cheers...Bill
Comment from Colin John
An excellant poem Cedar and we can see why it was a winner with love and the loss of a son and husband and the tragic ending should make anyone ghasp with sadness. Thank you for entering so all could read.Cheers Colin
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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An excellant poem Cedar and we can see why it was a winner with love and the loss of a son and husband and the tragic ending should make anyone ghasp with sadness. Thank you for entering so all could read.Cheers Colin
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Hello Colin,
Thank you for your kind words, I appreciate it very much. Have a great weekend, my friend...Cheers...Bill
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Hi Bill, many thanks and for the nomination. Cheers
Comment from gramalot8
I can personally relate to this military wife on many levels.( read "No One Knows" in my portfolio). I was married to Joe, who was in the Army. He made it through a year in Vietnam then was killed by lightning 9 months after being home. I still ended up being an Army widow with a small son to raise on my own. Unlike your soldiers wife, I was fortunate to never actually use that gun! Too many left alone. Thanks for sharing this with us today.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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I can personally relate to this military wife on many levels.( read "No One Knows" in my portfolio). I was married to Joe, who was in the Army. He made it through a year in Vietnam then was killed by lightning 9 months after being home. I still ended up being an Army widow with a small son to raise on my own. Unlike your soldiers wife, I was fortunate to never actually use that gun! Too many left alone. Thanks for sharing this with us today.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review, I appreciate it.
I'm so sorry to hear that about your husband, I'm an old Vietnam vet myself. I can't imagine what you must have went through, especially just after getting him home from that crazy war.
Take care of yourself, my friend...Bill
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Thank you
Comment from Ben Colder
Well said poet.
Yes, I have known a few of these situations and yes, the wives take a beating beyond measure.
I served with some of these guys and know the depth of this write.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Well said poet.
Yes, I have known a few of these situations and yes, the wives take a beating beyond measure.
I served with some of these guys and know the depth of this write.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Hello Ben,
Thank you for your excellent review, I appreciate it. Yes, I'm an old Vietnam vet myself. I served two years in that part of the world in the mid-sixties.
Have a great weekend...Bill