Between Friends (Part-1 of 6)
An old-friend fiasco. (A six-part story)23 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Sounds interesting. Guys sure talk differently than women. We would have ferreted out every bad deed done to you before we let you go! It's a good thing I have a certain amount of confidence, wading through all your heavy review-winning awards is enough to choke traffic.hahaha Karen
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Sounds interesting. Guys sure talk differently than women. We would have ferreted out every bad deed done to you before we let you go! It's a good thing I have a certain amount of confidence, wading through all your heavy review-winning awards is enough to choke traffic.hahaha Karen
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you, Karen, for your generous review and comments. This story gets much better as it goes along and I'm anxious to hear what you have to say about the rest of it. I don't pay much attention to awards. They don't mean that much. I'd really rather not be included in the monthly contests. Plus, only a few of my readers vote in those contests. I appreciate YOU!
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I will keep reading. :)
Comment from lyenochka
Poor Brad! I'm worried that Aaron might be bringing Brad's ex-wife as his new fiancée. This is worse than being forced to going to a high school reunion. I hope Aaron won't be as annoying when they meet again. Great descriptions - enjoyed your hilarious metaphors from Terminator to Rottweiler!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Poor Brad! I'm worried that Aaron might be bringing Brad's ex-wife as his new fiancée. This is worse than being forced to going to a high school reunion. I hope Aaron won't be as annoying when they meet again. Great descriptions - enjoyed your hilarious metaphors from Terminator to Rottweiler!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Helen, for taking time out of your busy schedule to read my foolishness. This silly story needs every chapter in sequence to really drive its message home. Not everyone gets these overexaggerated, simile laden, farces that are intended to be real life comic book style. Whatever that is. LOL. Mostly, I just hope there's a line on every page to make a reader smile, even if just laughing at me for writing it. You are that rare person who goes out of your way every day to pump up your fellow members on Fanstory! You're a champ who always leaves me smiling!
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You're a fabulous writer, Ric! Even if you are splashing the colors Kandinsky or even Jackson Pollack style, you also make us think as well as smile. I'll get to the others in sequence but I'm still drowning in the weekend posts ... It takes me until midweek to catch up on the Inbox.
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You're so sweet! I'm just an old hack who didn't know a noun from a verb at 50, and still not much else. Now, I'll have to find out who Kandinsky and Jackson Pollack are. LOL. Have a wonderful week!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Bars, friends, and rock and roll ð???. This part starts on the wrong foot Aaron, almost got into a fight because of his careless driving. From fists to friendship memories. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next part.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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Bars, friends, and rock and roll ð???. This part starts on the wrong foot Aaron, almost got into a fight because of his careless driving. From fists to friendship memories. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next part.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2020
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I'm so happy to see you've stay with the story, at but part 6, the best part. LOL. I can't thank you enough for hanging in there, that's a lot of reading. I appreciate your kind word and generous review. But most of all, that smiling face that pops up with every review!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Fantastic! Yes, I am enjoying this read. I have some suspicions but I'll keep them to myself, for now. I love your style and narrative descriptions.
You are a fine writer. Look forward to the next part. I'll wait 'til I have some sixes to disperse.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Fantastic! Yes, I am enjoying this read. I have some suspicions but I'll keep them to myself, for now. I love your style and narrative descriptions.
You are a fine writer. Look forward to the next part. I'll wait 'til I have some sixes to disperse.
Ralf
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Raffaelina, for your kind words and generous review. I'm glad you have started back at the beginning and I hope it proves to be worth the extra time of reading the additional chapters. A very talented writer told me I need to get outside my comfort zone; well, this is it. I was embarrassed to have written much of it even before anyone had read it. Especially, chapter 5, which you read first. LOL. I'm happy to have you aboard ship and cruising toward the finale. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from JennaG
Wow! I'm definitely intrigued! Can't wait to find out who this bride-to-be is! I'm sensing there's going to be something especially interesting about her. You easily kept my interest from beginning to end with this piece. Your descriptions of the characters are so skillful. I especially love the description of Aaron when he almost gets hit by a car and responds by "pretending to tip his top hat and dust off his tails". The imagery was so vivid I almost felt like I was there witnessing the whole thing. Sorry I'm so late in reviewing this first part. Looking forward to reading the next piece of the story! Well done! :)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Wow! I'm definitely intrigued! Can't wait to find out who this bride-to-be is! I'm sensing there's going to be something especially interesting about her. You easily kept my interest from beginning to end with this piece. Your descriptions of the characters are so skillful. I especially love the description of Aaron when he almost gets hit by a car and responds by "pretending to tip his top hat and dust off his tails". The imagery was so vivid I almost felt like I was there witnessing the whole thing. Sorry I'm so late in reviewing this first part. Looking forward to reading the next piece of the story! Well done! :)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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It's always great to read what you have to say and get your glimpse into what you, see, hear, and feel from my writing. Most of all, I just hope you like it. Thank you so much for your kind word and generous review. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from ebeta
I had to go back and read this after chapter 2.
It helps make other things make sense.
One note:
"Well . . . after the wreck," Aaron stares off into the distance for an instance
Should be for an instant.
Other than that it was great!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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I had to go back and read this after chapter 2.
It helps make other things make sense.
One note:
"Well . . . after the wreck," Aaron stares off into the distance for an instance
Should be for an instant.
Other than that it was great!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Ebeta, glad you came back for more of my silliness. Every chapter is very different in actions and help make all the pieces fit. I hope you'll come along for the rest. I appreciate your generous review, comments, and suggestions. I need all the help I can get. As for the differences in "instance" and "instant." ?Instance? is an example or single occurrence of something. Which makes my usage okay. An ?instant? is a precise moment or very short space of time. Which makes it also proper to use in this case. So, both being correct, I'll change it later to your choice of "instant." Thanks, again!
Comment from CEO2020
Very Strong writing my friend! I've always admired your writing style. I will try to read all six parts but my time is very limited because of my involvement with book clubs. I am closing my account here. Please stay in touch. www.owenspublishing.com
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Very Strong writing my friend! I've always admired your writing style. I will try to read all six parts but my time is very limited because of my involvement with book clubs. I am closing my account here. Please stay in touch. www.owenspublishing.com
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Neal, for taking time to read my over-exaggerated, simile laden, twisted-context spoof of a story. I do hope you find time to read all six parts, as it takes them all to separate the jest from substance. Your kind words, encouragement, and extra-special six-star review are also greatly appreciated. Most of all, I've enjoyed sharing thoughts and writing stories with a person of such fine character. It's amazing what we learn about people by reading their work. I'll drop you an email and a phone number, hopefully we can keep in touch. I've never met or kept in contact with anyone from this site in all these years, but I've always thought it would be nice to sit down and have a conversation with you. I hate that you are leaving the site but, I'm glad you are busy with projects and business. As I've said, I spent most of my life chasing all the things I thought were important, while missing out on everything that truly should have been. So, Neal, my friend, enjoy the successes, but always take time for the simple things in life. Which I know you will. I appreciate YOU! Sorry, didn't mean to write you a novel. LOL.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a great start, Ric. Brad was ready to stamp on the rude honking driver behind him. Then he discovers it's his once upon a time, old school mate. The two personalities are so opposite it makes you wonder how they were friends in the first place. I think Brad is not in the least interested in meeting up with the Aaron. Brad might be a big boy, but he comes across as a more private man than the flamboyant Aaron, who likes to be the superstar. Now, the ex-wife.... will we be seeing her again? Hmm. I really enjoyed this first part, and will be there waiting for part two. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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That was a great start, Ric. Brad was ready to stamp on the rude honking driver behind him. Then he discovers it's his once upon a time, old school mate. The two personalities are so opposite it makes you wonder how they were friends in the first place. I think Brad is not in the least interested in meeting up with the Aaron. Brad might be a big boy, but he comes across as a more private man than the flamboyant Aaron, who likes to be the superstar. Now, the ex-wife.... will we be seeing her again? Hmm. I really enjoyed this first part, and will be there waiting for part two. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for your kind words and generous review. This over-exaggerated, smothered with simile type of spoof definitely isn't everyone's cup of tea. It's just me entertaining myself with foolishness and playing with characters. LOL. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your story. I was engaged fro the start to finish. Your words are descriptive and flow smoothly. You developed the characters early on--enough for the first part to make readers want to know more about them. I will look forward to the next part.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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You did a good job with your story. I was engaged fro the start to finish. Your words are descriptive and flow smoothly. You developed the characters early on--enough for the first part to make readers want to know more about them. I will look forward to the next part.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Jan, for your kind words, generous review, and taking time to read my story. This is one of those over-exaggerated, smothered with similes type of spoofs that doesn't appeal to everyone, which makes your review all the more special to me. I appreciate your comments and hope you find the rest as entertaining. Thanks, again!
Comment from oliver818
This is an great start to the story. I like the way the characters are developed so far, they are interesting and I'm sure you will do a lot with them In the future. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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This is an great start to the story. I like the way the characters are developed so far, they are interesting and I'm sure you will do a lot with them In the future. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Oliver, for taking time to read my goofy over-exaggerated, simile smothered story. This type of spoof isn't for everyone, which makes me appreciate your kind words and encouragement all the more! I hope you enjoy where I take the story from here. Thanks, again.
