The Corona saga
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "The sequel "to keep my sanity in time of pandemic
18 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I must ask you how the dreadful virus is in Canada? I pray that it will soon end, leave us alive, happy instead of sad and perhaps dreadfully ill. I feel so sad for the people who have lost loved ones from this dreadful disease. 2021 has to be better!
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I must ask you how the dreadful virus is in Canada? I pray that it will soon end, leave us alive, happy instead of sad and perhaps dreadfully ill. I feel so sad for the people who have lost loved ones from this dreadful disease. 2021 has to be better!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written dialogue only about the coronavirus and how it will develop over to be next few years making more of them to keep the world hostage for their evil plans.
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A very well-written dialogue only about the coronavirus and how it will develop over to be next few years making more of them to keep the world hostage for their evil plans.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
Comment from Jg
This piece of literary work tells a story . Thanks for writing in such a way that we can understand. For people like me who try to avoid the news because of the sad reality, I was able to understand a lot . Well written .
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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This piece of literary work tells a story . Thanks for writing in such a way that we can understand. For people like me who try to avoid the news because of the sad reality, I was able to understand a lot . Well written .
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
Comment from mauial
Like how you took something that is relevant today and added a little humor to it. The spooky thing about these viruses is what is stated at the end: there will be more sisters and brothers after me. That is chillingly true ð??©
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Like how you took something that is relevant today and added a little humor to it. The spooky thing about these viruses is what is stated at the end: there will be more sisters and brothers after me. That is chillingly true ð??©
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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I know, this is just the beginning. All we can do is pray.
Comment from patcelaw
I wish we had never had to hear the word Covid. I am sure that come November it will be a thing that passes after the election.
Patricia
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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I wish we had never had to hear the word Covid. I am sure that come November it will be a thing that passes after the election.
Patricia
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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I do hope so, we know is man made and made spread.
Comment from Mastery
Very well done, my friend. This dialogue flows quite naturally and keeps one's interest all the way through. You may want to correct this line however: "just to be in tone with your wine analogy." in TUNE not Tone.
:) Bob
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Very well done, my friend. This dialogue flows quite naturally and keeps one's interest all the way through. You may want to correct this line however: "just to be in tone with your wine analogy." in TUNE not Tone.
:) Bob
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Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Hi Bob, thank you so much for your wonderful review, my Romanian stays in the way sometimes:) we say tone, you are saying tune:)
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Hi Iza. I do realize that you have these differences in language, however, It makes it difficult to offer suggestions because you always seem to be aware of the mistakes (or what I consider mistakes) What should I do? I don't want to offer suggestions if you are not able to use them?? :) Bob
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Yes, I get that. : ) Bob
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Please continue to offer those wonderful suggestions and I am trying to apply them as I get a chance. Thank you
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That is all I needed to hear, Iza. I will always help where I can. X :) Bob
Comment from elchupakabra
It's funny because I had said at the beginning that it seems like I've lived through at least 10 pandemics; ebola, bird flu, SARS, mad cow, etc etc etc and now Covid. Or should I say Coronella? Good work and good luck in the contest. Later daze.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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It's funny because I had said at the beginning that it seems like I've lived through at least 10 pandemics; ebola, bird flu, SARS, mad cow, etc etc etc and now Covid. Or should I say Coronella? Good work and good luck in the contest. Later daze.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you, daze:)
Comment from Spitfire
Well-done and unfortunately, the truth, I fear. Your dialogue is crisp, the speakers differentiated, the plot line clear. I picked up on a double meaning here:
The name they gave you sounds like a wine line.
- Smart like your mother, it does sound like wine.
whine as in to complain?
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Well-done and unfortunately, the truth, I fear. Your dialogue is crisp, the speakers differentiated, the plot line clear. I picked up on a double meaning here:
The name they gave you sounds like a wine line.
- Smart like your mother, it does sound like wine.
whine as in to complain?
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you:)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wickedly clever--dark humor indeed--I too hate to call it COVID-19--I say Corona--Coronella does sound human female--some association with Cruella (de Vil) ==the (D)evil woman from 101 Dalmations! Fine work--you may have a winner! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Wickedly clever--dark humor indeed--I too hate to call it COVID-19--I say Corona--Coronella does sound human female--some association with Cruella (de Vil) ==the (D)evil woman from 101 Dalmations! Fine work--you may have a winner! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Nah, no winners for me, usually I am disqualified or no votes except my own:) You know the story
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Indeed--I WROTE the story! I've never got so much as honorable mention in about 2 dozen contests so far.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, they can keep their new wine line to themselves, Iza. You did a good job with your dialogue contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. Your use of dialogue flows well, it sounds natural, and adds many details. Did you intend to spell the family name Coronei and not Coronella. In the second paragraph, you used the word 'better' two time in close proximinity. Perhaps the second one could be 'it makes me feel important.'
I wanted from you to deny it, [ I was hoping you would deny it and say there is no . . . ]
Please remember these are only suggestions or File 13.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Well, they can keep their new wine line to themselves, Iza. You did a good job with your dialogue contest entry. I enjoyed reading it. Your use of dialogue flows well, it sounds natural, and adds many details. Did you intend to spell the family name Coronei and not Coronella. In the second paragraph, you used the word 'better' two time in close proximinity. Perhaps the second one could be 'it makes me feel important.'
I wanted from you to deny it, [ I was hoping you would deny it and say there is no . . . ]
Please remember these are only suggestions or File 13.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Hi Jan, thank you so much for the suggestions, I hope you don't mind that I have applied them:) Have a blessed day.
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Of course not. I'm honored that you thought them worthy. (((HUGS)))
