Flies and Mushrooms
A hike in Austria Alps ended up on Mars.15 total reviews
Comment from Fei Ma
Fun and relaxing to read this writing! I kept on guessing what is real and what is fantasy while I read it and switching between reading and guessing. Elon Musk's SpaceX made many fans believing in future space travel. I am one of those. Truly enjoyed reading it. Made me feel like want to write one as well.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Fun and relaxing to read this writing! I kept on guessing what is real and what is fantasy while I read it and switching between reading and guessing. Elon Musk's SpaceX made many fans believing in future space travel. I am one of those. Truly enjoyed reading it. Made me feel like want to write one as well.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for such a good review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Mushrooms, what some of them can do to you. But to go on a fantasy trip like this, would be worth nipping out and picking some. I'd love to go on a trip to Mars, anywhere, actually, if it's in outer space. You have written are really excellent story here, well done. I enjoyed it a lot. Sandra :))
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Mushrooms, what some of them can do to you. But to go on a fantasy trip like this, would be worth nipping out and picking some. I'd love to go on a trip to Mars, anywhere, actually, if it's in outer space. You have written are really excellent story here, well done. I enjoyed it a lot. Sandra :))
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it. It has been published in an anthology and available on Amazon.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a most gripping writing from beginning to end. Your imagination is deep and rich. You have a way with words no matter what the subject is. Great story!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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This is a most gripping writing from beginning to end. Your imagination is deep and rich. You have a way with words no matter what the subject is. Great story!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much. Really appreciate for reading.
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from estory
This was a surreal fantasy adventure that could have sprung from those wild mushrooms. It always is interesting to see these figures that appear in dreams and give inklings about our subconscious desires and fears. Here Elon Musk appears as a kind of tour guide of Mars. I thought the whole thing had a Yellow Submarine feel to it. Nice attention to detail kept the scenes jumping out at us and the surreal dreamscape and the appearance of these mysterious figures makes us wonder what is going on behind the scenes. estory
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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This was a surreal fantasy adventure that could have sprung from those wild mushrooms. It always is interesting to see these figures that appear in dreams and give inklings about our subconscious desires and fears. Here Elon Musk appears as a kind of tour guide of Mars. I thought the whole thing had a Yellow Submarine feel to it. Nice attention to detail kept the scenes jumping out at us and the surreal dreamscape and the appearance of these mysterious figures makes us wonder what is going on behind the scenes. estory
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the nice review and reading my long stories. I'm writing a fiction about Elon Musk. I might post it here.
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is a wonderful and very entertaining story that you penned here. This captivated our attention throughout. We noticed one possible typo that you may want to check. It says " Handsome prince beaming at me while engaged a fencing match" just needs "(in) a fencing match". Normally I wouldn't give 6 stars for a post with any mistakes, but in this case I couldn't resist giving you your due. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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This is a wonderful and very entertaining story that you penned here. This captivated our attention throughout. We noticed one possible typo that you may want to check. It says " Handsome prince beaming at me while engaged a fencing match" just needs "(in) a fencing match". Normally I wouldn't give 6 stars for a post with any mistakes, but in this case I couldn't resist giving you your due. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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I really appreciate your 6 stars review and the typo correction.
I also wrote "Goodbye, Nice" which is an adventure in Nice and Shenzhen.
Thanks again.
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You're so very welcome. Have a wonderful day
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
Interesting read and very fanciful. Your description of the surroundings and the different food choices was well written. I found the piece a bit long and had slow spots. It did pull the reader forward wanting to know if this was a dream. I figured it had to be when you seemed rather uninterested in your missing family. You did finally resolve it with revealing the dream. I found some nits so you might want to proof read again. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Interesting read and very fanciful. Your description of the surroundings and the different food choices was well written. I found the piece a bit long and had slow spots. It did pull the reader forward wanting to know if this was a dream. I figured it had to be when you seemed rather uninterested in your missing family. You did finally resolve it with revealing the dream. I found some nits so you might want to proof read again. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thanks.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Lisa Wharton,
What a wonderful piece of General Fiction this is!
From Earth to Mars encompassing all the imaginable Living, Non-Living things beautifully written a well-knit story.
Lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Of course, worth enjoying!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Hello Lisa Wharton,
What a wonderful piece of General Fiction this is!
From Earth to Mars encompassing all the imaginable Living, Non-Living things beautifully written a well-knit story.
Lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology.
Captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Of course, worth enjoying!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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I really appreciate the wonderful review.
Thanks.
You can read my "Goodbye, Nice", too if you want.
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Lisa Wharton, Most Welcome!
"..., Nice", I intentionally didn't write" Goodbye..." because just after Welcome, Goodbye doesn't look good. ha ha..
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Take a look. It is a fun story and it?s #1 on the featured page. Thanks didn?t want to say Goodbye either.
Comment from Ric Myworld
The wonderful thing about writing is you can travel the world, or the universe, experience every adventure imaginable, and do it all from the comfort of home. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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The wonderful thing about writing is you can travel the world, or the universe, experience every adventure imaginable, and do it all from the comfort of home. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2020
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Yes. This is my mood of writing now. I used to write different kind of stories.
Thanks for the great review.
Comment from elchupakabra
This was a great read. I thought it was well written and as I tell everyone, I'm a stickler for dialogue and I thought you did a good job with that here. I enjoyed the fantasy mixed with bits of reality. Great work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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This was a great read. I thought it was well written and as I tell everyone, I'm a stickler for dialogue and I thought you did a good job with that here. I enjoyed the fantasy mixed with bits of reality. Great work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. Yes I love to write dialogues and people tell me that I'm good at it.
Comment from Ben Colder
I tried to hang in here with you but the read was to long for my pee mine. I think it would do better for the reader if you would break it up. I have the same problem and was told the same and it has worked.
I laughed at you statement about the flies being extra protean. Believe me, you will be one sick person if you eat any flies.
Thanks for sharing. Very interesting.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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I tried to hang in here with you but the read was to long for my pee mine. I think it would do better for the reader if you would break it up. I have the same problem and was told the same and it has worked.
I laughed at you statement about the flies being extra protean. Believe me, you will be one sick person if you eat any flies.
Thanks for sharing. Very interesting.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your nice review and feedback. This piece was published in an anthology that required 5000 words minimum. I understand your point.
