senryu (walking with the moon)
The happiness of being in love.15 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This has lovely imagery. The personification draws the reader in. This could easily be told in a trite, cliche' style; however it is poignant. There is an image of a harp playing loving music. Very nice.
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This has lovely imagery. The personification draws the reader in. This could easily be told in a trite, cliche' style; however it is poignant. There is an image of a harp playing loving music. Very nice.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, Walking with the Moon, presented as a 5-7-5,finds two together discovering the joys of solitude under the silvery moon.
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This senryu, Walking with the Moon, presented as a 5-7-5,finds two together discovering the joys of solitude under the silvery moon.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the
Senryu writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. You followed the rules of the contest well.
Finally a wonderful senryu, yours is the best one in the contest and will get my vote. Beautiful imagery.
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Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the
Senryu writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. You followed the rules of the contest well.
Finally a wonderful senryu, yours is the best one in the contest and will get my vote. Beautiful imagery.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Senryu writing prompt.
This well written verse paints a lovely picture.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Senryu writing prompt.
This well written verse paints a lovely picture.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a good entry for the Senryu writing prompt. That is exactly how a moonlit night will appear to lovers. I hope this poem does well in the contest. Best of luck to you.
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This is a good entry for the Senryu writing prompt. That is exactly how a moonlit night will appear to lovers. I hope this poem does well in the contest. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Senryu about lovers who enjoy the moonlight together that brings out their deepest romantic feelings to the surface and sharing their love.
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A very well-written Senryu about lovers who enjoy the moonlight together that brings out their deepest romantic feelings to the surface and sharing their love.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of all syllables in this lovely, inspiring piece. Through vivid use of personification and metaphor, you have painted a romantic scenario.
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You have made excellent use of all syllables in this lovely, inspiring piece. Through vivid use of personification and metaphor, you have painted a romantic scenario.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
Comment from zanya
A wonderful moment to share for lovers by the light of the midnight moon- captured eloquently here in this Senryu and a super pic -line three is beautiful
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A wonderful moment to share for lovers by the light of the midnight moon- captured eloquently here in this Senryu and a super pic -line three is beautiful
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Melodie Michelle
I loved the picture because it flowed perfectly with the background and font colors and the poem itself as well;-) They are bad ass together!
You adhered to the writing prompt entry contest rules and I think your poem is EXCELLENT! Best wishes with the contest;-)
I appreciate and thank you so much for sharing;-)
Many blessings to you and your family;-)
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I loved the picture because it flowed perfectly with the background and font colors and the poem itself as well;-) They are bad ass together!
You adhered to the writing prompt entry contest rules and I think your poem is EXCELLENT! Best wishes with the contest;-)
I appreciate and thank you so much for sharing;-)
Many blessings to you and your family;-)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
Comment from January L'Angelle
This is a very romantic poem. The words are lovely and set the mood for lovers. I love: "Love strums our heartstrings" that really touched my heart. (I'm married to a musician so I might borrow that line on a romantic night LOL) The picture was perfect and the whole presentation was wonderful. Well done. Hugs. -January L. :)
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This is a very romantic poem. The words are lovely and set the mood for lovers. I love: "Love strums our heartstrings" that really touched my heart. (I'm married to a musician so I might borrow that line on a romantic night LOL) The picture was perfect and the whole presentation was wonderful. Well done. Hugs. -January L. :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
