Clean Exit
When things go wrong11 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi Mia, this little 75 words flash story has a lot of a action and tells us a lot about a crime, which has just been committed. Not a mean feat in so few words. Great entry, and good luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2020
Hi Mia, this little 75 words flash story has a lot of a action and tells us a lot about a crime, which has just been committed. Not a mean feat in so few words. Great entry, and good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Certainly a lot of action in this Flash Fiction story for the contest. I enjoyed the dialogue, the characters and their interaction with each other. By "they" [are coming] they obviously meant the police? Looks like the perpetrators are trying to get away with the ill-gotten cash in the duffel bag. I wonder if they managed to do it.
I wish you a lot of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
Certainly a lot of action in this Flash Fiction story for the contest. I enjoyed the dialogue, the characters and their interaction with each other. By "they" [are coming] they obviously meant the police? Looks like the perpetrators are trying to get away with the ill-gotten cash in the duffel bag. I wonder if they managed to do it.
I wish you a lot of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
The character build up, setting and plot leave this very open to being a much longer story. You could provide the extensive back story as to the why they have the relationship they do. Even with the word limit, you did a great job.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
The character build up, setting and plot leave this very open to being a much longer story. You could provide the extensive back story as to the why they have the relationship they do. Even with the word limit, you did a great job.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thank you
Comment from sibhus
Yep, brief and to the point. Can't get any brief than when your on the run from the cops. A excellent complete story in 75 words and makes for a good entry for the contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
Yep, brief and to the point. Can't get any brief than when your on the run from the cops. A excellent complete story in 75 words and makes for a good entry for the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Mistydawn
You know what they say about hindsight, lol. Your piece is very well-written, interesting start to finish. Your character's dialogue and their actions are realistic. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
You know what they say about hindsight, lol. Your piece is very well-written, interesting start to finish. Your character's dialogue and their actions are realistic. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This a strong entry for the 75 Words Flash Fiction writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
This a strong entry for the 75 Words Flash Fiction writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Awesome story, take the cash and run and never look back no matter the consequences. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
Awesome story, take the cash and run and never look back no matter the consequences. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! Well written. No grammatical errors. Good luck!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! Well written. No grammatical errors. Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Wow - you have me wondering what's going to happen next;-) Great for the contest so good luck with that!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you;-)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
Wow - you have me wondering what's going to happen next;-) Great for the contest so good luck with that!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you;-)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
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;-)
Comment from MissMerri
A lot of action and some realistic dialogue for this short little story, making it easy to read and fun to allow the imagination to soar. I see this is in a contest, so, I wish you lots of luck. MM
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
A lot of action and some realistic dialogue for this short little story, making it easy to read and fun to allow the imagination to soar. I see this is in a contest, so, I wish you lots of luck. MM
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank you.