The Corona saga
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "In search of Heaven"to keep my sanity in time of pandemic
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You were lying on green grass...any stain on your clothes by creating a grass angel? yup, you are right on track when you say that we should trust God right now. He is the almighty of this universe.
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You were lying on green grass...any stain on your clothes by creating a grass angel? yup, you are right on track when you say that we should trust God right now. He is the almighty of this universe.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2020
Comment from royowen
I do believe this is the shaking of not only the world but also the church, what remains cannot be shaken, so we are fine, as long as your faith in God remains, you'll be fine, "God's not a man that He should lie as you suppose" so have faith. Well done, Iza, blessings Roy
Typo : Jumping on my favour(te) thing.
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I do believe this is the shaking of not only the world but also the church, what remains cannot be shaken, so we are fine, as long as your faith in God remains, you'll be fine, "God's not a man that He should lie as you suppose" so have faith. Well done, Iza, blessings Roy
Typo : Jumping on my favour(te) thing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
Comment from Spitfire
I love to lay in the grass too especially after it's been mowed and has that fresh green smell. I get 20 minutes of sunshine almost every day in the courtyard. I walk around the planted areas and have this ancient urge to pull up the weeds. But it's not my job.
happiness is for fools, smart people jump to the next worrying game--ain't that the truth. But I get up happy every day. This can't last forever. I miss my son and his family who are holding a box of liquor-filled chocolates that they bought me two months ago!
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020
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I love to lay in the grass too especially after it's been mowed and has that fresh green smell. I get 20 minutes of sunshine almost every day in the courtyard. I walk around the planted areas and have this ancient urge to pull up the weeds. But it's not my job.
happiness is for fools, smart people jump to the next worrying game--ain't that the truth. But I get up happy every day. This can't last forever. I miss my son and his family who are holding a box of liquor-filled chocolates that they bought me two months ago!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020
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This will pass my friend, stay strong and happy, ready to embrace your family again.
Comment from Mary Furlong
Okay, here goes: You do not lay on your back, you lie on it, so you should say lying on my back. You may lay a book or something beside you if you like. Next let the sun caress your face (leave out 'to'.) You should say 'jumping on my favorite thing' (jumping matches ignoring and all the other ing words in the sentence. 'Favor' is a noun as in 'Do me a favor.' 'Favorite,' an adjective, means the thing I like best. There should be a period or a semi colon (;) after "Happiness is for fools.'
I may have missed a few things, but your English is very good. And this little essay was fun to read. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020
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Okay, here goes: You do not lay on your back, you lie on it, so you should say lying on my back. You may lay a book or something beside you if you like. Next let the sun caress your face (leave out 'to'.) You should say 'jumping on my favorite thing' (jumping matches ignoring and all the other ing words in the sentence. 'Favor' is a noun as in 'Do me a favor.' 'Favorite,' an adjective, means the thing I like best. There should be a period or a semi colon (;) after "Happiness is for fools.'
I may have missed a few things, but your English is very good. And this little essay was fun to read. Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020
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Mary, thank you so much for your review and your grammar corrections:)
Comment from richie b
Iza,
I like your strategy on keeping your sanity and
attacking the virus. Your clever writing style keeps
the atmosphere light and gives the writer a new
perspective on adjusting to the virus and its ramifications.
Blessings,
Richie
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020
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Iza,
I like your strategy on keeping your sanity and
attacking the virus. Your clever writing style keeps
the atmosphere light and gives the writer a new
perspective on adjusting to the virus and its ramifications.
Blessings,
Richie
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much, Mr, Richie:)
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
I see that you're continuing to do your best in trying to cope with the isolation of the quarantine, and your sense of humor is one of your best assets. This was an enjoyable read.
As you requested, I have corrected some of your errors, but was unable to copy and paste a few of them in, because of a glitch in the highlighting software, that I have found often happens with FanStory posts, especially in large print. Here are the ones I am able to show you:
I know we are in isolation and we supposed to stay inside,
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I know we are in isolation and we are supposed to stay inside,
Laying on my back and letting the sun to caress my face, this it's a real blessing.
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Laying on my back and letting the sun caress my face, is a real blessing.
Now, at last I can think clear.
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Now, at last I can think clearly.
Now, look at me how I am ignoring the sun, and jump on my favor thing,
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Now, look at me how I am ignoring the sun, and jump on my favorite thing,
Keep writing, and it will help you pass the time and express your feelings, to feel less isolated. And keep praying! May God bless you.
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I see that you're continuing to do your best in trying to cope with the isolation of the quarantine, and your sense of humor is one of your best assets. This was an enjoyable read.
As you requested, I have corrected some of your errors, but was unable to copy and paste a few of them in, because of a glitch in the highlighting software, that I have found often happens with FanStory posts, especially in large print. Here are the ones I am able to show you:
I know we are in isolation and we supposed to stay inside,
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I know we are in isolation and we are supposed to stay inside,
Laying on my back and letting the sun to caress my face, this it's a real blessing.
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Laying on my back and letting the sun caress my face, is a real blessing.
Now, at last I can think clear.
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Now, at last I can think clearly.
Now, look at me how I am ignoring the sun, and jump on my favor thing,
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Now, look at me how I am ignoring the sun, and jump on my favorite thing,
Keep writing, and it will help you pass the time and express your feelings, to feel less isolated. And keep praying! May God bless you.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
Comment from Raul1
I think that this is an interesting story. I like how you structured this story. Good work. It is easy to read. I like it. Good storytelling. Nice job. I like it. Thanks for sharing!
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I think that this is an interesting story. I like how you structured this story. Good work. It is easy to read. I like it. Good storytelling. Nice job. I like it. Thanks for sharing!
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Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
Comment from Alchera
How long can you stay in that state of bliss and dolce far niente? All depends on your time and how much have you to spare: So, if I have understood this is all your piece of paradise! And I am really surprise of your ephemeral selected piece of paradise. Good job
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020
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How long can you stay in that state of bliss and dolce far niente? All depends on your time and how much have you to spare: So, if I have understood this is all your piece of paradise! And I am really surprise of your ephemeral selected piece of paradise. Good job
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020
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My ephemeral piece of paradise when is not raining.
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Lol! How hilarious. The Coronella thing got me rolling on the floor. This is indeed a very lovely tale. Great job!
One thing:
For "we supposed," "we are supposed" would be a better replacement.
Again, here: "I will see my mom and sister," "mom" is a proper noun and hence the initial "m" should be uppercase.
My very best wishes!
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Lol! How hilarious. The Coronella thing got me rolling on the floor. This is indeed a very lovely tale. Great job!
One thing:
For "we supposed," "we are supposed" would be a better replacement.
Again, here: "I will see my mom and sister," "mom" is a proper noun and hence the initial "m" should be uppercase.
My very best wishes!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! Yes, you have the right attitude - happiness is fleeting but faith in God's promises to look after us and know what we need - that will give Coronella a heart attack!
"this it's a real blessing." (either remove "this" or replace "it's" with "is")
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Lol! Yes, you have the right attitude - happiness is fleeting but faith in God's promises to look after us and know what we need - that will give Coronella a heart attack!
"this it's a real blessing." (either remove "this" or replace "it's" with "is")
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
