Gotta feel the pain
A Fibonacci or Fib poem10 total reviews
Comment from sherrygreywolf
POWERFUL! Thought-provoking and unique. Everything about this poem says winner to me. Good luck in the contest and I hope you are having a great week.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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POWERFUL! Thought-provoking and unique. Everything about this poem says winner to me. Good luck in the contest and I hope you are having a great week.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hello friend, I appreciate your time and the wonderful review; thank you very much.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This poem needs to be reader by everyone. I've heard a couple responses to "all lives matter" They said, "It's not the white people's house that's on fire, it's the black people's house that on fire." another one was very to the point, "Why does it have to be about you?" I guess I would say. " Just what's wrong with letting someone else have the affirmations and support?" This is a good topic.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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This poem needs to be reader by everyone. I've heard a couple responses to "all lives matter" They said, "It's not the white people's house that's on fire, it's the black people's house that on fire." another one was very to the point, "Why does it have to be about you?" I guess I would say. " Just what's wrong with letting someone else have the affirmations and support?" This is a good topic.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hello Liz, I thank you for your wonderful insights.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A Fibonacci poem is rxtremely topical in 2020, the year of mathematics. This one is a particularly fine example by its shape. Its content is also excellent, but I feel that the image doesn't fit in well with the poem - too Sisyphussian for me.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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A Fibonacci poem is rxtremely topical in 2020, the year of mathematics. This one is a particularly fine example by its shape. Its content is also excellent, but I feel that the image doesn't fit in well with the poem - too Sisyphussian for me.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Hello Katherine and thank you kindly for the wonderful review; I use this picture to project that fighting racism is like Sisyphus trying to roll that stone; appreciate your time.
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maybe you could add that point to your author's notes.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Nice entry for the Those who endure... writing prompt contest.
George Floyd is a good topic for your poem. His murder has become a world wide movement for
black lives matter and no justice no peace. It's gaining momentum and hopefully this time we will see some real change. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Hello my friend
Nice entry for the Those who endure... writing prompt contest.
George Floyd is a good topic for your poem. His murder has become a world wide movement for
black lives matter and no justice no peace. It's gaining momentum and hopefully this time we will see some real change. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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I hope so my friend, enough is enough and how long have we been saying this; I appreciate your time and the kind insights; thank you.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Well done - I love the Fib myself, and you wrote it so eloquently. A shape of both societal and individual thinking in the awfulness of what is going on. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Well done - I love the Fib myself, and you wrote it so eloquently. A shape of both societal and individual thinking in the awfulness of what is going on. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Hello Darlene, I am pleased that you like the poem; appreciate your time and the thoughtful review; thank you very much.
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You're welcome
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yes, racism of all kinds in all disguises breeds hate, especially in the young and the impressionable... thank you so very much for sharing and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Yes, racism of all kinds in all disguises breeds hate, especially in the young and the impressionable... thank you so very much for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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I thank you my friend, appreciate your visit and the insights.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
All racism is hateful and it happens on both sides of the fence, all lives matter not just black lives, we must champion human life as a whole without breaking it down and targeting just one section of society, a fine write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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All racism is hateful and it happens on both sides of the fence, all lives matter not just black lives, we must champion human life as a whole without breaking it down and targeting just one section of society, a fine write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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I agree my friend, thank you for a wonderful review.
Comment from Susan X Smith
As far as relatively innocent black folks being killed, it's been one sad incident after another this year. Truly shocking and heartbreaking. Something must be done about it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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As far as relatively innocent black folks being killed, it's been one sad incident after another this year. Truly shocking and heartbreaking. Something must be done about it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Hello Susan, I thank you for your time and the thoughtful review.
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is a wonderful tribute to George Floyd and his family. The poem flows effortlessly due to a beautiful format. I have two suggestions which in no way reflects the beauty of this poem. first " DO black lives too matter " instead of "Does". Secondly the "Too" should be after ,"Matter". Still a really beautiful poem. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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This is a wonderful tribute to George Floyd and his family. The poem flows effortlessly due to a beautiful format. I have two suggestions which in no way reflects the beauty of this poem. first " DO black lives too matter " instead of "Does". Secondly the "Too" should be after ,"Matter". Still a really beautiful poem. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Hello friends and thank you very much for your kind review and wonderful suggestion, I made the recommended suggestion; would appreciate a second look, if you have time; thank you.
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That's absolutely perfect. I'm
so happy that we could help even
in the tiny way that we did.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a very well written and beautifully presented poem. I like the picture you chose because it has been a test of endurance and uphill battle all the way. Racism does breed hate. It is some we've learned from those who have gone before and it has unlearned.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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This is a very well written and beautifully presented poem. I like the picture you chose because it has been a test of endurance and uphill battle all the way. Racism does breed hate. It is some we've learned from those who have gone before and it has unlearned.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Hello friend, I appreciate your visit and the wonderful insights; thank you very much.
