Just Wed-We See
A Senryu Poem8 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Good entry for the Recently Married (senryu) writing prompt contest. The Syllables count is right. Nice lines connection and flow. It's romantic.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2020
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Hello my friend
Good entry for the Recently Married (senryu) writing prompt contest. The Syllables count is right. Nice lines connection and flow. It's romantic.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, much appreciated
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
The vast majority of marriages start off just like this, very positive thinking. The problem is they do not "tend the garden." Love is strangled by weeds, divorce happens, and both people look for greener grass. It should never end like this.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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The vast majority of marriages start off just like this, very positive thinking. The problem is they do not "tend the garden." Love is strangled by weeds, divorce happens, and both people look for greener grass. It should never end like this.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you-I love do not "tend the garden" so very true
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow - if they agree on everything, I think that may be a bit odd... Just be sure the freedom is there to disagree sometimes. :) :) Your syllable count is correct -- best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Wow - if they agree on everything, I think that may be a bit odd... Just be sure the freedom is there to disagree sometimes. :) :) Your syllable count is correct -- best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written senryu about a couple recently married and vow that their marriage will unite their hearts in agreement that they will be free together for the rest of their lives.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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A very well-written senryu about a couple recently married and vow that their marriage will unite their hearts in agreement that they will be free together for the rest of their lives.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I like the simplicity of this, but in that simplicity is so much more. I think you sum up a good marriage well, hearts agree, but everything else is free because of this.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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I like the simplicity of this, but in that simplicity is so much more. I think you sum up a good marriage well, hearts agree, but everything else is free because of this.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from CHANYA MASHENGU
I wish there was six stars. I would give it to you.
The image is beautiful and befitting.
How great is this.
Hearts that unite.
Good luck in the competition
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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I wish there was six stars. I would give it to you.
The image is beautiful and befitting.
How great is this.
Hearts that unite.
Good luck in the competition
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you so very much
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Here comes the dream of perfect marriage, the hope that the magic will stay past the honeymoon:"our marriage will be
uniting hearts that agree ~
together we're free"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Here comes the dream of perfect marriage, the hope that the magic will stay past the honeymoon:"our marriage will be
uniting hearts that agree ~
together we're free"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
New marriages have a long way to go before they can be considered stable and some make it and some don't, but a wedding is always hopeful, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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New marriages have a long way to go before they can be considered stable and some make it and some don't, but a wedding is always hopeful, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much
