The Corona saga
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Life in a concentration camp"to keep my sanity in time of pandemic
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Oh goodness. I hope they find a vaccine so they will keep the death rate low, instead sky high. Sorry to say, but there are some states that are higher than others. Must pray so this virus stops!
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Oh goodness. I hope they find a vaccine so they will keep the death rate low, instead sky high. Sorry to say, but there are some states that are higher than others. Must pray so this virus stops!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
Comment from Spitfire
You got that right about the feel of a concentration camp. Thank god, they are going to let us roam the halls starting tomorrow. A start toward freedom. Appropriate metaphor of jail with security guard and gun,
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You got that right about the feel of a concentration camp. Thank god, they are going to let us roam the halls starting tomorrow. A start toward freedom. Appropriate metaphor of jail with security guard and gun,
Comment Written 11-Jun-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, this is rather dark. But I understand what you are saying. There is too much fear - especially of the unknown and the extreme contagiousness of the disease.
"Those batmen's are ok," (batmen) 'men' is already plural.
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Oh, this is rather dark. But I understand what you are saying. There is too much fear - especially of the unknown and the extreme contagiousness of the disease.
"Those batmen's are ok," (batmen) 'men' is already plural.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
I do believe, my lady, that your first paragraph is 'spot on', there... ;) :) Well done as usual, Iza!! Thanx for the smiles!! ;) Yvette
survivals who don't --> survivors who don't
taking in account --> taking into account
Aaa, look at --> Aaah, look at
there, because they --> there because they
" Lou, what --> "Lou, what
batmen's are ok, their --> 'batmen' are ok - their
dead, they are too many, and --> dead. There are too many of them and
oldies are draining the system, and --> oldies were draining the system and
that look, I know --> that look: I know
cruel, deep down --> cruel. Deep down,
supremacy, soon I --> supremacy. Soon I
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I do believe, my lady, that your first paragraph is 'spot on', there... ;) :) Well done as usual, Iza!! Thanx for the smiles!! ;) Yvette
survivals who don't --> survivors who don't
taking in account --> taking into account
Aaa, look at --> Aaah, look at
there, because they --> there because they
" Lou, what --> "Lou, what
batmen's are ok, their --> 'batmen' are ok - their
dead, they are too many, and --> dead. There are too many of them and
oldies are draining the system, and --> oldies were draining the system and
that look, I know --> that look: I know
cruel, deep down --> cruel. Deep down,
supremacy, soon I --> supremacy. Soon I
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I have started to feel that these chapters have lost their feshness a bit, and then as I am drawn into the chapter I still find little gems of expression. Here it is:
-People are turning on each other
-Fear means control
-enjoy your fake supremacy
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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I have started to feel that these chapters have lost their feshness a bit, and then as I am drawn into the chapter I still find little gems of expression. Here it is:
-People are turning on each other
-Fear means control
-enjoy your fake supremacy
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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You are right I am kind of bored of this Corona thing, but I promised to post something from time to time.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written summary of the latest world events that keep us imprisoned for weeks on end and suddenly it is
safe enough to take part in protests that turn out violent riots.
Typo
scientists running their statics(statistics)
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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A very well-written summary of the latest world events that keep us imprisoned for weeks on end and suddenly it is
safe enough to take part in protests that turn out violent riots.
Typo
scientists running their statics(statistics)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Hi Sandra thank you so much for correcting my typo:) and for reading
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
IZA, you have a rather ironic viewpoint about this pandemic. The covid-19 is really very serious and takes lives left and right without scruples. The only way to stop your Coronella is by not giving her a chance. But I guess you know all that and just want to lighten our hearts with a bit of fun.
You did too! I liked it.
I found two little things:
1. ...statics are statistics
2. ...Those batmen are ok. You don't need the 's.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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IZA, you have a rather ironic viewpoint about this pandemic. The covid-19 is really very serious and takes lives left and right without scruples. The only way to stop your Coronella is by not giving her a chance. But I guess you know all that and just want to lighten our hearts with a bit of fun.
You did too! I liked it.
I found two little things:
1. ...statics are statistics
2. ...Those batmen are ok. You don't need the 's.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Hi Marjon, thank you so much for understanding my point of view and for the corrections.
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So welcome, Iza!
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So welcome, Iza!
Comment from DeboraDyess
Hi, Iza!
I was afraid the Saga of Coronella was over. Glad to see a new entry. :)
and pessimists. >> either pessimistic or 'feel like pessimists'.
I feel like been locked >> like I've been locked
in a concentration camp.
and her gun is a virus. >> EXCELLENT line! In fact, this is a cool paragraph!
us align and scared. >> in line and scared
lay inf front >> in front (got the 'f' at the end of 'in'. I do that all the time!
and then are the survivals >> then there are the survivors
I can these crazy scientists running their statics without >> I can(see? hear? imagine?) these crazy scientists running their statistics without
"We need this month two hundred to die in this province, >>"We need two hundred to die in this province this month,
on people, keep it, we >> people, keep it (up OR move it), we
let's put some 5 G over there >> 5G, no space, I believe
" Lou what about China? >> "Lou, what about China?
they are too many, and numbers means insubordination. >> there are too many, and numbers mean insubordination.
"Oi Manuel, >> "Oi, Manuel! (or a period)
Another really interesting and cool Coronella read, Iza! I think a lot of people are feeling just this way right about now.
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Hi, Iza!
I was afraid the Saga of Coronella was over. Glad to see a new entry. :)
and pessimists. >> either pessimistic or 'feel like pessimists'.
I feel like been locked >> like I've been locked
in a concentration camp.
and her gun is a virus. >> EXCELLENT line! In fact, this is a cool paragraph!
us align and scared. >> in line and scared
lay inf front >> in front (got the 'f' at the end of 'in'. I do that all the time!
and then are the survivals >> then there are the survivors
I can these crazy scientists running their statics without >> I can(see? hear? imagine?) these crazy scientists running their statistics without
"We need this month two hundred to die in this province, >>"We need two hundred to die in this province this month,
on people, keep it, we >> people, keep it (up OR move it), we
let's put some 5 G over there >> 5G, no space, I believe
" Lou what about China? >> "Lou, what about China?
they are too many, and numbers means insubordination. >> there are too many, and numbers mean insubordination.
"Oi Manuel, >> "Oi, Manuel! (or a period)
Another really interesting and cool Coronella read, Iza! I think a lot of people are feeling just this way right about now.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 08-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for the corrections and the continue support of this saga. Sometimes I am tired of it, but then here comes the boom:)
Comment from January L'Angelle
The story is funny but you do have some slight errors. I will note for you:
"She keeps us align and scared." This should be:
"She keeps us aligned and scared."
"My mind continues to lay inf front of me this macabre scenario..." This should be: "In front of me, my mind continues to play this macabre scenario..."
I can these crazy scientists running their statics without taking in account human lives." This should be:
"I can hear these crazy scientists running their statistics without taking into account human lives."
Hope that helps. I like the story! -January L.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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The story is funny but you do have some slight errors. I will note for you:
"She keeps us align and scared." This should be:
"She keeps us aligned and scared."
"My mind continues to lay inf front of me this macabre scenario..." This should be: "In front of me, my mind continues to play this macabre scenario..."
I can these crazy scientists running their statics without taking in account human lives." This should be:
"I can hear these crazy scientists running their statistics without taking into account human lives."
Hope that helps. I like the story! -January L.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
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Hello my friend and thank you so much for your corrections and continuous support of this book. Stay safe:)
