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Essence

good versus evil

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Comment from Bill Schott
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This piece on the soul, Essence, meets the word count and gives another idea about what the soul goes through once it is released from this cage.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much for this wonderful review.
Comment from Alchera
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During our existence, we often lose the way of reason due to our daily ups and downs and therefore we must redeem ourselves and purify ourselves in order to be able to take the lost road which, unfortunately, not all of us manage to find it. You have purified yourself, my friend, and now it is time to resume your steep road towards the good path. Well described and thought to the point and set within its right thematic selected words due to the rules of the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much, I think you are the only one who got my encrypted message:)
Comment from Mia Twysted
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I understand the concept of this work. You have done wrong and so your soul then is at stake. To make sure you go on you must face the challenge to prove yourself. However, the piece felt choppy and odd as I read it aloud.

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much for this wonderful and encouraging review
Comment from sandramitchell
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That is an interesting thought on the soul. If you have sinned, which every living person has, then you have to burn to repent that sin before going to Heaven. Hmm, not too sure I'd like that!! Lol. Well done, this is a totally different contest entry on the soul that I've read today. Good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much for this wonderful and encouraging review
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello my friend

Good try with your entry for the Soul Writer writing prompt contest.

It's hard to define a soul in 150 words or else. The soul is our lives plus our spirits.

I don't understand your poem...it doesn't flow and it's hard to follow.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
    It's more of a futuristic story about repentance and purification:)
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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You have brought up one of my questions. I just don't get it. If Jesus died to save people's souls. What was the oint if no one believes it. The carry terrible guilt around and worry that God id angry at them & wonder if he'll ever forgive them...Hello...did you not get the memo??? He died for your sins and shame. Did he die in vain? I could go on but I won't.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
    He died, but we still are doing our things in the background:) It's more of a futuristic story about repentance and purification:)
Comment from Vanna1
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Perhaps sinking "into". Comma after matter for flow and effect?! No capital on said. Awkward wording with the sparkle part. This however is interesting and original. It has great potential.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2020

Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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I am sure there are many views on what the unseen soul of man really is. Your take on this subject is a good entry for the Soul Writer contest. Good luck!

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much for this wonderful and encouraging review
reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 09-Jun-2020
    You're welcome.
Comment from ESOSTINE
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Your poems touched my inner self and I felt the uniqueness of every individual being a part of the Creators divine choice. We are called to genuine repentance whenever we stray to heal the heart and unite the land. Thanks for sharing and goo luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much for this wonderful and encouraging review
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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-First paragraph starts in present tense and switches to past tense. Should remain one or the other.

-sparkle and depends would read better as sparkle and it depends

-Hand-counted 140 words so meets that requirement of the contest.

My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that provides assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2020