Excel or Compete
A life lesson taking from the grid iron20 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a powerful image: " grinding heart-thumping,
leg cramping drill upon drill," Some readers will identify with this, some be be relieved those days have passed. There will be "wanna-be's" This is a great metaphor with vivid descriptions. You present a very valuable message. Imagine what the world would if there were only playful competition, not who can make the greatest weaponry threats. I am voting for this one.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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This is a powerful image: " grinding heart-thumping,
leg cramping drill upon drill," Some readers will identify with this, some be be relieved those days have passed. There will be "wanna-be's" This is a great metaphor with vivid descriptions. You present a very valuable message. Imagine what the world would if there were only playful competition, not who can make the greatest weaponry threats. I am voting for this one.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Liz, I am so pleased that this poem resonated with your. I hope value your positive validation on the content.
Comment from Raul1
This essay meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck on the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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This essay meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Good luck on the contest!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Raul I thank you.
Comment from Mia Twysted
This is definitely a message that needs to get out there in the world. It needs to be heard that we can grow with completion and make ourselves and the world a better place.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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This is definitely a message that needs to get out there in the world. It needs to be heard that we can grow with completion and make ourselves and the world a better place.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2020
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Mia, I am very grateful that you fell this of such importance. Have a fantastic day!
Comment from Janet Foor
My first husband was and now my daughter is a coach so I fully understand all the sporting experiences and how they play out in your life to excel and do your best at whatever you do. I loved the analogy to the sun. Very creative. I agree with your conclusion.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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My first husband was and now my daughter is a coach so I fully understand all the sporting experiences and how they play out in your life to excel and do your best at whatever you do. I loved the analogy to the sun. Very creative. I agree with your conclusion.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Janet, wow thank you! Then you did have this poem resonate for you, which is always a delight to read.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer.
The beginning of your free verse poem comparing the Majesty of the sun and the Stars is outstanding.
Your comments make it clear the Stars cannot compete with the sun.
I also like the fact but you continued expressing the ideas of what competition did for you, and not to you.
Competition makes everything better, including the competitors.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Hello mystery writer.
The beginning of your free verse poem comparing the Majesty of the sun and the Stars is outstanding.
Your comments make it clear the Stars cannot compete with the sun.
I also like the fact but you continued expressing the ideas of what competition did for you, and not to you.
Competition makes everything better, including the competitors.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Robert thank you for the review and comments.
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You are welcome.
Comment from ameen786
To learn, evolve and excel-wonderful message in your uplifting poem, fast paced and with meaningful verses; think you got a winner here; good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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To learn, evolve and excel-wonderful message in your uplifting poem, fast paced and with meaningful verses; think you got a winner here; good luck!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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ameen, thank you, I value your nod of approval.
Comment from richie b
Sports teaches much of life in its practices and
games. I played all sports till the age of 60. Now I
am down to golf but I learn life skills from this sport.
Using the sun as a metaphor woks well in your poem.
All phases of life teaches if we own the right attitude.
Thank you for sharing.
Peace,
Richie b
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Sports teaches much of life in its practices and
games. I played all sports till the age of 60. Now I
am down to golf but I learn life skills from this sport.
Using the sun as a metaphor woks well in your poem.
All phases of life teaches if we own the right attitude.
Thank you for sharing.
Peace,
Richie b
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Richie, I am right there with albeit 10 years your senior.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this very well written poem for the competition contest. I agree with the principles you have stated. Just wondering if this was instilled in you in a healthy way by your parents. Bill
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Thanks for sharing this very well written poem for the competition contest. I agree with the principles you have stated. Just wondering if this was instilled in you in a healthy way by your parents. Bill
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Bill, I was raised by my maternal grandpa, yes and four very supportive mentors.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is often a challenge for many as when people don't feel successful they have low self esteem and it often leads to depression and self loathing, we sometimes expect too much of our selves and achieving contentment is key to living well, food for thought here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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This is often a challenge for many as when people don't feel successful they have low self esteem and it often leads to depression and self loathing, we sometimes expect too much of our selves and achieving contentment is key to living well, food for thought here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Thanks Dolly.
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent use of literary devices to drive home your message that the most magnificent events in nature are not based on competition, but rather on personal achievement. Competition is fine, as long as the rivals can shake hands and still be friends after the match. Some folks can't achieve that most challenging part of competition.
Your driving cadence is perfectly matched with your motif.
Best of luck to you in the voting booth.
Gloria
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Excellent use of literary devices to drive home your message that the most magnificent events in nature are not based on competition, but rather on personal achievement. Competition is fine, as long as the rivals can shake hands and still be friends after the match. Some folks can't achieve that most challenging part of competition.
Your driving cadence is perfectly matched with your motif.
Best of luck to you in the voting booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Gloria, thank you.
