The Edge of Convenience
multiverse unity165 total reviews
Comment from Sumpta
Nice one Rose. That pictorial display is something else, I love it. Welldone, you did well.
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Nice one Rose. That pictorial display is something else, I love it. Welldone, you did well.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from phill doran
Hello Opel Rose
I am quite sure that you will be inundated with 'reviews' for this piece.
It is part pastiche, part parody and I am certain it will resonate with your fellow Americans who are so well versed in the source.
I appreciate that you have entered it as free verse, but I see it more as an opening prologue for a prose work. As I reader, I'd be keen on you elaborating on your vision of a theoretical multiverse. Just a thought.
If you get the chance, perhaps go into the editor and tidy up the stray characters (�?????�????�???�??�?�¢??) in your notes.
Cheers - I wish you well
phill
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Hello Opel Rose
I am quite sure that you will be inundated with 'reviews' for this piece.
It is part pastiche, part parody and I am certain it will resonate with your fellow Americans who are so well versed in the source.
I appreciate that you have entered it as free verse, but I see it more as an opening prologue for a prose work. As I reader, I'd be keen on you elaborating on your vision of a theoretical multiverse. Just a thought.
If you get the chance, perhaps go into the editor and tidy up the stray characters (�?????�????�???�??�?�¢??) in your notes.
Cheers - I wish you well
phill
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Cosmic2011
I had to read it twice to appreciate it's meaning. I like the phrase "world(s) in which I inhabit", to me it implies that we are not subject to the temporal/fleshly universe. We are able to transcend beyond into the spiritual. Thank you for sharing!
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I had to read it twice to appreciate it's meaning. I like the phrase "world(s) in which I inhabit", to me it implies that we are not subject to the temporal/fleshly universe. We are able to transcend beyond into the spiritual. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Opal Rose, this is phenomenal! I am so sorry I don't have more sixes to give this week.
You wrote a poem of wisdom, deep thoughts, encouragement, faith, and hope in a few well-chosen words. I am so impressed! Thank you for posting this beautiful piece.
In the postscript, the ghost of gambling has entered. Please repair!
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Opal Rose, this is phenomenal! I am so sorry I don't have more sixes to give this week.
You wrote a poem of wisdom, deep thoughts, encouragement, faith, and hope in a few well-chosen words. I am so impressed! Thank you for posting this beautiful piece.
In the postscript, the ghost of gambling has entered. Please repair!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Stephen Force
The picture and the verse are well matched, this idea of a multiverse seems to be catching on, and your words may be a guide to constructing the rules to live in it. I have long excepted the possibility of a multiverse and applaud your effort to depict it. Good luck. Steve
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The picture and the verse are well matched, this idea of a multiverse seems to be catching on, and your words may be a guide to constructing the rules to live in it. I have long excepted the possibility of a multiverse and applaud your effort to depict it. Good luck. Steve
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Diana Kane
I love this take on the pledge of allegiance Just tweaked it a little bit and made it so much better. I like this version better. Great job and good luck in the contest.
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I love this take on the pledge of allegiance Just tweaked it a little bit and made it so much better. I like this version better. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Wow! Good grammar, nice wordings and beautiful imagery. All in one great read. How lovely! You've written well. My very best wishes. Cheers and kudos!
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Wow! Good grammar, nice wordings and beautiful imagery. All in one great read. How lovely! You've written well. My very best wishes. Cheers and kudos!
Comment Written 26-May-2020
Comment from Boogienights
This is great! I believe that there are other realms we can't see, but are most assuredly there. Your poem is interesting and fresh...something new under the sun. Thanks for sharing.
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This is great! I believe that there are other realms we can't see, but are most assuredly there. Your poem is interesting and fresh...something new under the sun. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
Comment from Janet Foor
First of all- welcome to FanStory. I look forward to reading your work.
This free verse poem is very creative and well done.
Thank you for sharing.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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First of all- welcome to FanStory. I look forward to reading your work.
This free verse poem is very creative and well done.
Thank you for sharing.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Hello Janet and thank you for the warm welcome to FanStory. I look forward to being a part of this community. I am very pleased you have enjoyed this piece. Thank you for reading. Best wishes and blessings to you.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
Comment from DeboraDyess
What an interesting poem! The flow is lovely and the wordplay is cool.
I'd not like to live in a world where everyone is in agreement. I think healthy RESPECTFUL debate of ideas makes us grow. Of course, that ridiculous rubbish that we fight over just makes us smaller, so that's got to go! :)
Be blessed,
Deb
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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What an interesting poem! The flow is lovely and the wordplay is cool.
I'd not like to live in a world where everyone is in agreement. I think healthy RESPECTFUL debate of ideas makes us grow. Of course, that ridiculous rubbish that we fight over just makes us smaller, so that's got to go! :)
Be blessed,
Deb
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review Deb. Yes, healthy debate helps us all prosper and flourish. These respected differences would ideally be shared in this harmonious life I am referencing in The Edge of Convenience. I hope we can one day eradicate that harmful rubbish and live in peace. Best wishes to you.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
