The Edge of Convenience
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Comment from lancellot
This would fit perfect in the Marvel universe. I can see the characters who traverse the multiverse saying this pledge as the police the different realities. Perhaps you should pitch it to Warner Bro. or Disney.
It really does fit.
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This would fit perfect in the Marvel universe. I can see the characters who traverse the multiverse saying this pledge as the police the different realities. Perhaps you should pitch it to Warner Bro. or Disney.
It really does fit.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
Comment from MissMerri
I liked this poem very much Opal Rose. It is a clear glimpse into a pure heart, and with all that is transpiring in our world these days, it is a beautiful thing to see. Thank you so much for sharing this. I see no way to make it better, unless you were to add more words. Very nice! Best of luck in the contest too. MM
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I liked this poem very much Opal Rose. It is a clear glimpse into a pure heart, and with all that is transpiring in our world these days, it is a beautiful thing to see. Thank you so much for sharing this. I see no way to make it better, unless you were to add more words. Very nice! Best of luck in the contest too. MM
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
Comment from emem224224
Hello, Opal Rose.I have often sought beautiful words and thoughts such as yours, to express my happiness, my awe, for being allowed to live in this world. My sincere compliments to you for your poem, and kind thoughts. May you live a long time in this galaxy.
(PS. May I suggest that in line 2 of your poem, you eliminate the words (in which) and put a full stop after (inhabit). It will add impact to your poem, especially if you begin the next sentence the same as the first one. Love, Mary xx
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Hello, Opal Rose.I have often sought beautiful words and thoughts such as yours, to express my happiness, my awe, for being allowed to live in this world. My sincere compliments to you for your poem, and kind thoughts. May you live a long time in this galaxy.
(PS. May I suggest that in line 2 of your poem, you eliminate the words (in which) and put a full stop after (inhabit). It will add impact to your poem, especially if you begin the next sentence the same as the first one. Love, Mary xx
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Well you have certainly sparked some controversy with this beauty. I have always thought the Pledge of Allegiance itself was a majestic write in theory however, maybe not so much now. It's nearly impossible to believe in anything that is moved forward by our present government. Good luck.
xoxo Kiwi
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Well you have certainly sparked some controversy with this beauty. I have always thought the Pledge of Allegiance itself was a majestic write in theory however, maybe not so much now. It's nearly impossible to believe in anything that is moved forward by our present government. Good luck.
xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from rspoet
Hello Opal,
The United Galaxies of multiversity,
we have a long way to go before being admitted.
Perhaps if we send an ambassador of insight,
say Princess Opal Rose, we could al least be heard.
"Hope" is the thing with feathers -
That perches in the soul -
And sings the tune without the words -
And never stops - at all -
Have a beautiful day
Robert
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Hello Opal,
The United Galaxies of multiversity,
we have a long way to go before being admitted.
Perhaps if we send an ambassador of insight,
say Princess Opal Rose, we could al least be heard.
"Hope" is the thing with feathers -
That perches in the soul -
And sings the tune without the words -
And never stops - at all -
Have a beautiful day
Robert
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from Ben1
This is a nice and interesting take on our own national anthem. It was very creative and unique. I could tell were it lined up with the US national anthem but still kept it's uniqueness. It was interesting to also read what life is like far in the future when we fight aliens under the earth banner. Good luck with the contest.
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This is a nice and interesting take on our own national anthem. It was very creative and unique. I could tell were it lined up with the US national anthem but still kept it's uniqueness. It was interesting to also read what life is like far in the future when we fight aliens under the earth banner. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
Comment from Gloria ....
A pledge of allegiance to the Universe. Excellent free verse that needs to be read a few times to be taken in.
I look forward to further writes of yours regarding the theoretical universe.
Nice job, in presentation, poem and author notes. Best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
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A pledge of allegiance to the Universe. Excellent free verse that needs to be read a few times to be taken in.
I look forward to further writes of yours regarding the theoretical universe.
Nice job, in presentation, poem and author notes. Best of luck to you with the Contest Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Megan3333
That's picture is very cool looking. The poem is also very interesting. I like that you want everyone to have peace that's very beautiful. The poem is a bit hard to understand at times though
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That's picture is very cool looking. The poem is also very interesting. I like that you want everyone to have peace that's very beautiful. The poem is a bit hard to understand at times though
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
Thanks for submitting this interesting poem. It sounds but not that far from futuristic imagination. Freedom which to me is no restraints and Neutrality is not taking sides, seems like a bit of a Paradox. Best regards.
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Thanks for submitting this interesting poem. It sounds but not that far from futuristic imagination. Freedom which to me is no restraints and Neutrality is not taking sides, seems like a bit of a Paradox. Best regards.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
Comment from Darlene Franklin
In a way, this could be pledge to the United Federation of Planets. And that;s a good thing I've been binge watching my way through all 7 seven seasons of Voyager, 1-3 shows a day. Fantastic. P.S. Thanks for explaining neutralism. That was the one word that I didn't really like, implying "anything goes," but fair-mindedness and justice are indeed worthy goals.
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In a way, this could be pledge to the United Federation of Planets. And that;s a good thing I've been binge watching my way through all 7 seven seasons of Voyager, 1-3 shows a day. Fantastic. P.S. Thanks for explaining neutralism. That was the one word that I didn't really like, implying "anything goes," but fair-mindedness and justice are indeed worthy goals.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
