The Edge of Convenience
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Comment from R. Hiland
The philosophy is laudable, the ideas clear enough, but I am enough of an imagist at heart that I want something visual/tangible/metaphorical to grip. And I didn't like "in" in line two--broke the flow for me. So as a poem....I wanted more.
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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The philosophy is laudable, the ideas clear enough, but I am enough of an imagist at heart that I want something visual/tangible/metaphorical to grip. And I didn't like "in" in line two--broke the flow for me. So as a poem....I wanted more.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you for your review. There will be this more you crave found within a future piece of a more in-depth work of writing. Stay posted!
Best of luck.
-Opal Rose
Comment from estory
I think your piece accomplishes what you set out to do. You have this long run on sentence and that combines all the elements into one concept, illustrating your theme, so good form following function there. I liked the use of alliterations to combine these philosophical elements too. Tying words together through sound. It is a bit philosophical and maybe you could use some poetic images in there to color it up a bit, some colorful symbols of your concept. A swirling galaxy or something like that. estory
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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I think your piece accomplishes what you set out to do. You have this long run on sentence and that combines all the elements into one concept, illustrating your theme, so good form following function there. I liked the use of alliterations to combine these philosophical elements too. Tying words together through sound. It is a bit philosophical and maybe you could use some poetic images in there to color it up a bit, some colorful symbols of your concept. A swirling galaxy or something like that. estory
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review. I chose to write this piece as a bold, gender-neutral, proclamation that could be stated by all walks of life. I have a different version that creates a softer, more poetic illusion.
Best wishes to you.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
Comment from LisaMay
Aah... I see you are an idealist. You have big dreams, no doubt inspired by a big heart and a desire for freedom and harmony without judgement. This is poetically well expressed in your utopian poem.
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Aah... I see you are an idealist. You have big dreams, no doubt inspired by a big heart and a desire for freedom and harmony without judgement. This is poetically well expressed in your utopian poem.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you kindly for seeing into my heart here. I appreciate your words very much. Best wishes in all you do.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
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Comment from A. Willow Bends
This is quite OUT THERE. True thinking outside the box. I appreciated your author notes, because sometimes, I truly don't get it. But after reading this a couple times, I continued to like it more and more. It is beautifully done and the idea of acceptance of all is so wonderful.
Great job! Great art choice also!
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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This is quite OUT THERE. True thinking outside the box. I appreciated your author notes, because sometimes, I truly don't get it. But after reading this a couple times, I continued to like it more and more. It is beautifully done and the idea of acceptance of all is so wonderful.
Great job! Great art choice also!
Wendy
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you kindly so such a nice review. I appreciate your words shared. Best wishes to you Wendy.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I think it will be a long time, if ever, for freedom to be granted for all. Even in 'free' countries there still seems to be a lot of injustice. I enjoyed reading your piece and it created a lot of strong imagery of a more peaceful world, which I'm sure many long for.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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I think it will be a long time, if ever, for freedom to be granted for all. Even in 'free' countries there still seems to be a lot of injustice. I enjoyed reading your piece and it created a lot of strong imagery of a more peaceful world, which I'm sure many long for.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you kindly for your review. I am happy it spoke to you. Best wishes!
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
If only this were true, of course the world is in constant conflict with countries being very much divided in their thoughts and wars constantly erupt, but your fantasy world in one which we can indulge ourselves and get lost in when reality is too much to bear, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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If only this were true, of course the world is in constant conflict with countries being very much divided in their thoughts and wars constantly erupt, but your fantasy world in one which we can indulge ourselves and get lost in when reality is too much to bear, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you for your words Dolly. I am thoroughly pleased you enjoyed it.
Best wishes to you!
-Opal Rose
Comment from Lance S. Loria
This poem is a creative free verse work. I enjoyed it. Unique accompanying artwork is complimentary. No edits or adjustments are necessary.
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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This poem is a creative free verse work. I enjoyed it. Unique accompanying artwork is complimentary. No edits or adjustments are necessary.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your words. Best wishes to you.
-Opal Rose
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
My sentiments exactly. An apt theme; very clever wordplay re Pledge and the multi-senses of edge; I appreciate the painstaking footnotes. (The title rhymes?) Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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My sentiments exactly. An apt theme; very clever wordplay re Pledge and the multi-senses of edge; I appreciate the painstaking footnotes. (The title rhymes?) Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you for your review Liz. I appreciate your words. Best wishes to you!
-Opal Rose
Comment from royowen
I honestly don't think the galaxy will enter into anything anytime soon, but this vrirus has certainly taken care of any strife, environmental issues, and any other strife between nations, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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I honestly don't think the galaxy will enter into anything anytime soon, but this vrirus has certainly taken care of any strife, environmental issues, and any other strife between nations, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you for the review Roy! It is a dream of mine to see such peace in this world.
Best wishes.
-Opal Rose
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Good Jon,
Comment from Margaret Bednar
I'm not here to weigh in on philosophical points of view (nor politics) for any poem but to review it for the purpose it was written. (I read a few of the comments) These are your thoughts expressed poetically. I like world(s) as it leaves it wide open to the great expanse of this (these?) universe(s). Your words eloquently express your ideal - "as it presently stands"... obviously this is a wish as we are no were near your "utopia" . Very creative.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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I'm not here to weigh in on philosophical points of view (nor politics) for any poem but to review it for the purpose it was written. (I read a few of the comments) These are your thoughts expressed poetically. I like world(s) as it leaves it wide open to the great expanse of this (these?) universe(s). Your words eloquently express your ideal - "as it presently stands"... obviously this is a wish as we are no were near your "utopia" . Very creative.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you kindly for the review! I am pleased you enjoyed the piece. Best wishes to you.
Sincerely,
Opal Rose
