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multiverse unity

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Comment from Ignatius Albright
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A lovely piece, nicely done. It is concise and compelling to read.
I very much like the ending
"one multiverse
under God, infinitely congenial,
with freedom and neutralism for all." A nice play on words and allusion to the U.S. pledge of allegiance.
There is a slight grammatical error near beginning,
"and world(s) in which I inhabit"
Believe it should read:
and world(s) which I inhabit

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2020

Comment from karenina
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Thank you for your author's notes. I've never wanted your vision more than I do in today's divisive, troubled world. Out of the box thinking to develop your own "Pledge" to be all inclusive and aimed at achieving universal peace. I was touched by the hope (and determination) woven within your poem.--Karenina

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

Comment from padumachitta
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hello

A wonderful poem that is postive and full of feeling, empathy and compassion. Ah, if we could all take this to heart, and really reach out...

Good luck in the free verse poetry contest

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

Comment from sixftlion
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Wow, just wow. This was an amazing poem. I read it several times and each time I felt another level of your message. In this current, divided world, your poem should be read by everybody to gain some perspective on what is important. Awesome work, good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

Comment from Wabigoon
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Opal--
No matter how big you go, no matter the Titan of human government buried beneath Mt. Ida, on Crete, in tears you still go with that bit added to the pledge of allegiance, "under God." That was, if I am not mistaken, added, to suit folks like you. Not me. What if I am a member of the Freedom from Religion Foundation? Well, then, your pledge does not work, at all. I see utterly no understanding of that, or that the "galactic" elements of your pledge might simply be about us accepting our larger inheritance?

Sorry, I cannot subscribe to your pledge.

Best
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2020

Comment from BHWatson
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I like this. Amen Sister! I became an American Citizen in 2010, and proudly placed my hand over my heart as I did so. Your poem speaks to the greater good of existence. In this day and age, I feel the need to be aligned to the well-being of the planet as a whole.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2020

Comment from Lobber
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Hello,
A clever and effective rewrite of the Pledge. I like the phrase ". . . one multiverse
under God, infinitely congenial,. . . Thank you.
- Lobber

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2020

Comment from Christine Frey
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Oh to live in this space/place you have portrayed here today!! What a delight to read. Thank you for sharing something so deep to self. Congrats on a piece written so wonderfully!

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2020

Comment from TPAC
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A very creative twist agreeing with these noble standards for equality for all throughout the existence perhaps our world first step towards initial contact between worlds. A wonderful thought in my given opinion.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2020

Comment from Eternal Muse
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Your free verse is enchanting, and your words take us to the far away exciting places. I enjoyed the visuals here as well as the presentation.

Good luck in the contest with this interesting entry.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2020