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New Day

an acrostic

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Comment from kahpot
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A wonderful and caring read, " noticing the children who still care" "lies have no purpose here" this is an excellent acrostic with great messages throughout, very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 19-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    Thank you, kahpot for your generous review. I was inspired by the beautiful song MORNING GLOW from a musical called PIPPIN. Cheers - DJ
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I am positive that God know who's faithful. He know what's in our hearts. I enjoyed reading your 'fluffy' poem, but I don't believe it's fluff, it has a very important message to it.

 Comment Written 19-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    Thank you, barbara. I was wrong to describe it as "fluffy". Softer than my usual offerings I guess. Angry is ultimately exhausting. God bless - DJ
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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You have painted a very beautiful image of a glowing morning of a day in a word; the truth even God could see from above; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 19-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    ALCREATOR, thank you. I felt pretty good writing this. - DJ
Comment from oliver818
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This is a very nice poem, I enjoyed reading it. I like the way it flows and the imagery you used. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day

 Comment Written 18-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    Thanks, oliver. I am privileged to discover YOUR work. Cheers - DJ
Comment from lyenochka
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Glad to see your "fluffy" side, DJ! Loved this poem and it made me feel the warmth of morning's glow and the hope of a new start. We can keep trusting that God is listening and caring.

 Comment Written 18-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    Thanks, Helen. If I got that wrong I may suicide - kidding. DJ
Comment from Gypsymooncat
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Fluffy? YOU??? Indeed...

Nah, the cynic needs to remain alive and well, even though I don't mind this "fluffy piece" as you imply it is. Your descriptives are very fluffy indeed, sir, and make the reader feel warm, fluffy and squishy...like a pillow. At mention of "pillow" I feel like going back to bed. It's cold and I got up nearly two hours ago and I'm tired. Your wistful thoughts are held by many my friend. I guess we get to wondering if love will ever prevail over the crap we constantly see as the norm in this world.

I enjoy how you can swing from a cynical, satirical piece to something so...FLUFFY (okay okay) and pull it off as well as you do.

That sounded a bit awkward...

Nah! Loved it!

But it's not about me. I did enjoy your acrostic, and also hope that God does notice the children who still care.

 Comment Written 18-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    You really want to see me cross over to the dark side. Too late, Gypsy. I did that already. Love your come backs. DJ
reply by Gypsymooncat on 20-May-2020
    May the farce be with you Darth xo
Comment from country ranch writer
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I love to climb in bed and get all snuggled down under a quilt my grandma made oh so many years ago with so many memories sewn into it.God kooks over his flock to make sure everyone takes heed.

 Comment Written 18-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    Thanks, country. God has some work to do on MY quilt. Belssings - DJ
reply by country ranch writer on 20-May-2020
    You will figure it out!
Comment from strandregs
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I like it all
I don't like begin
Where did begin come from
From Russia
He was an Israeli prime minister.
He made peace with Sadat the Egypt prime minister.
So if I was looking for deep meaning good on you.
But. Begin just doesn't sit with me.
So many ways to say begin poetically.
And you go with that bald orator.
Now I have to offer alternatives.
Into day burst
Into day bloom
Into day break
Into new days hope
Into days mystery
Into days promise.
Fluff away.
Oops... :-))Z.

 Comment Written 18-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    The one person that I can count upon to call me out
    I actually went with a bald typo.
    Complex ADHD sometimes has that effect
    "Day Begin" should read "Daybegin"
    Never no mind. It still won't sit with you.
    I love you enough to cop a knee in the gonads
    Keep kicking.

    DJ - xox
Comment from Spangle
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This is very uplifting and beautiful. We need to be inspired to be better people than we sometimes are...especially where politics are concerned. (America was formed as one nation under God, but its citizens don't always act like it...and we have presently become a nation divided. However, with humility and prayer, that could quickly change.) We all need some fluffy moments in our lives and poetry is a super way to get it inserted. Thanks for sharing, DJ. :-)

 Comment Written 18-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    Thank you so much, Spangle. I wish our collective pens were more powerful than they seem to be. Warmest - DJ
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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Your rhyming acrostic poem is vividly descrptive and inspirational. Yes,
we pray He will have His hand on us--especially now, when it REALLY seems He is trying to tell us something!

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 Comment Written 18-May-2020


reply by the author on 20-May-2020
    Thank you, Janice. I just pray that we learn to listen finally. Blessing - DJ