I Hate A Messy Mirror
Tribulations of a fastidious mother and wife.2 total reviews
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
Kind of gross but funny, lol. I laughed at the end of this, so good job with it. I would have worked on the meter a bit, but it's a good effort nonetheless.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Kind of gross but funny, lol. I laughed at the end of this, so good job with it. I would have worked on the meter a bit, but it's a good effort nonetheless.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thanks for your review. My poem is a bit rough around the edges, concerning metre - I had to do it quickly. It is rather a gross topic, so I doubt I'll spend much time on fine-tuning!
Comment from Earl Corp
The big question is do they put the toilet seat down for you? Did you mean apple of my eye? This entry should do well. Your poem rhymes, makes sense, and entertains me. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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The big question is do they put the toilet seat down for you? Did you mean apple of my eye? This entry should do well. Your poem rhymes, makes sense, and entertains me. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Haha... that is certainly the flash point for male-female confrontation. No - they seem to think it is better for me to be annoyed than it is for them to be nagged, poor darlings.
I used 'acme' on purpose because it makes an internal rhyme with 'acne' and it means: "something or someone that represents perfection of the thing expressed", but as it is a less well know word i think I'll change it to 'apple'... thanks for drawing my attention to it.
