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Comment from dragonpoet
It is true that mothers keep families together and that her loss creates a hole in the heart. This is true of the loss of any parent. You use line breaks well to strengthen the emotion.
The end supplies hope and shows that the spirit of the person stays with us. Sorry for your loss.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpooet
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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It is true that mothers keep families together and that her loss creates a hole in the heart. This is true of the loss of any parent. You use line breaks well to strengthen the emotion.
The end supplies hope and shows that the spirit of the person stays with us. Sorry for your loss.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpooet
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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It's been a while since I've been on, and didn't see this review until today. I didn't even know I placed in the contest. Anyway. Thank you for this excellent review that shows a well thought response. I very much appreciate it.
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You are most kindly welcome.
Glad you are back.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your prize! Vivid and clever imagery re Mom's loss as black hole in personal universe and electrostatic family turned split atom. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Congrats on your prize! Vivid and clever imagery re Mom's loss as black hole in personal universe and electrostatic family turned split atom. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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It's been a while since I've been on, and didn't see this review until today. I didn't even know I placed in the contest. Anyway. Thank you Elizabeth, for this excellent review that shows a well thought response. I very much appreciate it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem in honor of mother's day that become a sad day when we can only visit the the grave where we can brought flowers to remember our own mother for the day.
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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A very well-written free verse poem in honor of mother's day that become a sad day when we can only visit the the grave where we can brought flowers to remember our own mother for the day.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thank you Sandra. Your comments are much appreciated.
Comment from Pantygynt
An epitaph couched in delightfully varied tones that somehow reflects your interests. The first two thirds are set out in modern American style, but the final five lines hark back to the language and culture of the native Americans in whose footsteps you, and your mom have trod.
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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An epitaph couched in delightfully varied tones that somehow reflects your interests. The first two thirds are set out in modern American style, but the final five lines hark back to the language and culture of the native Americans in whose footsteps you, and your mom have trod.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thank you Jim. Very insightful
Comment from sunnilicious
I suppose we always grieve for those that have passed. Sorry about your mother. This was a nice way to commemorate her life and your love. Nice work. God bless you
Hope you having a nice Mother's Day Weekend otherwise :)
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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I suppose we always grieve for those that have passed. Sorry about your mother. This was a nice way to commemorate her life and your love. Nice work. God bless you
Hope you having a nice Mother's Day Weekend otherwise :)
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you Alicia. I will visit her grave and also my wife's mother's grave as well, to place flowers. I appreciate your thoughts.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your tribute to your mother. I relished your "electrostatic"/"atom" analogy and your appeal to our senses. I hope you feel her closeness tomorrow. Best wishes in the Mother's Day Poetry Contest- Joan
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you for sharing your tribute to your mother. I relished your "electrostatic"/"atom" analogy and your appeal to our senses. I hope you feel her closeness tomorrow. Best wishes in the Mother's Day Poetry Contest- Joan
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you Joan. I will visit her grave and also my wife's mother's grave as well, to place flowers. I appreciate your thoughts.
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Unfortunately, our mothers were cremated and their ashes scattered. Enjoy some moments of solitude at the gravesites on this special day. Warm regards- Joan
Comment from artisart4u
Yes, you can always think of something they said to you during you life. I like the words you have "you held us together," they surely do that in a nice gently way.
Good luck with your mother's day poem.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Yes, you can always think of something they said to you during you life. I like the words you have "you held us together," they surely do that in a nice gently way.
Good luck with your mother's day poem.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you Artis4U
Comment from enitsalemap
You had me at "electrostatic family now split like an atom" I know the loss of mother can change the dynamic of a family universe. That is certain. I also know my mother is always with me, especially her words. Thank you for baring your heart in this poem. It is lovely.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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You had me at "electrostatic family now split like an atom" I know the loss of mother can change the dynamic of a family universe. That is certain. I also know my mother is always with me, especially her words. Thank you for baring your heart in this poem. It is lovely.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you enitsalemap
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
You put blACK instead of black, but other than that, this is a great poem with a lot of emotions and images that I really did like. Nice job with this one.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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You put blACK instead of black, but other than that, this is a great poem with a lot of emotions and images that I really did like. Nice job with this one.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you Amanda
Comment from amada
Beautifull written mother's poem. Very strong, loving voice. I seem to hear your words in my own mind, as I think of your mother's character. Sich a loving homage to her name. I celebrate your words.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Beautifull written mother's poem. Very strong, loving voice. I seem to hear your words in my own mind, as I think of your mother's character. Sich a loving homage to her name. I celebrate your words.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thgank you Amada, as I feel the warmth of your words.
